| "Seasons of Sorrow" Reviews/Comments [ 33 ] |
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Reviewed By: kougalover123 On: August 08, 2005 15:27 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I only read finished stories and i am very interested in reading this story it seems like a very good story. i would like to know if you have any idea when you are going to finish this story i can't wait to read it. email is Tigres66@aol.com. please finish this story soon i have been patiently waiting fomany months watching the updates.
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Reviewed By: Yori-chan On: August 08, 2005 14:20 EDT
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uwaaah!! ^ ^ omg!! it is so amazing! and long OO i hope you show more! actually i've been waiting since the last chapter checking here everyday seeing if you made a new one and it finally came!! i had no signs of giving up!! *tears* what about Yuki? isnt he going to get more attention?
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Reviewed By: sxc On: June 28, 2005 02:08 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
breathtaking that's all i can say simply breathtaking
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Reviewed By: sxc On: June 28, 2005 02:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
breathtaking that's all i can say simply breathtaking
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Reviewed By: Spike631 On: June 16, 2005 08:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting premise with much possibility but unfortunately it is flawed by wandering verb tenses and internal dialogue by the author. Let the character tell the story through his actions instead. Keep writing -- it's the only way to get better.
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Title: MiakaRyo
Reviewed By: MiakaRyo [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2005 00:20 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are such a beautiful storyteller. I love this two chapters so much. I don't think I have ever laughed as much as I have over the Yuki and Kazuma cooking moments. I just had a feeling as soon as I read that both were in the kitchen cooking that it would be something I would enjoy reading!!! I loved just as much Haru and his digicam. That in itself was hilarious!! THank you so much for the Kyoru and Yukiru moments. I thought that they were beautiful. THe music that you chose for each I really liked espically the song "For you I Will" by Monica. I thought it really fit Kyo, too! I love your descriptions. I thought that Kyo's present to Tohru was very sweet and I can't wait to see what Yuki's real present is to her. It is just so exciting. Anyway I will wrap this up b/c I have to get up early tomorrow. I just want to finish saying that I love how your chapters are long and I don't mind reading them b/c with your chapters being long it gives more detail and character to your story. That is my opinion though!!! I just want to say that your story is my favorite and that I can't wait until you update again. I love spring but I can't wait until summer. Til next review... Brava!!! MR
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Reviewed By: Yori-Chan On: May 08, 2005 22:00 EDT
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hello!! i read most of your amazing chapters (which were quite long might i add) and it was so awesome!! i laughed, i cried, i blew nose bubbles. i just hope that you can continue with as greatness astarted with!! good luck :D
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Title: MiakaRyo
Reviewed By: MiakaRyo [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2005 01:04 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey I am reviewing again. I am at chapter 20 so I thought I would review. First thank you for answering my email's and also my questions. I just wanted to say that you are portraying Yuki and Kyo just the way I think they are. I thought Kyo's paper meche incident with the others was very funny!! Seriously my sides are still hurting. I also love the suspence and mystery you are weaving. It just leaves me wanting to read more. You have a wonderful talent for writing. I cannot wait to read more, but now I have to go to bed so please keep up the beautiful writing. Also the song "Breakway" really does represent Yuki and it also represents me. Anyway til the next review, Have fun writing!!! MR
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Title: MiakaRyo
Reviewed By: MiakaRyo [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 11:32 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely adore your story! I just started reading so I am only on chapter 8, but I will review or try to review every 3 to 4 chapters. I have had a very hard time trying to find a Fruits Basket story that I liked, but yours has filled the void perfectly. I love your writing style and the music that you recommend. I am all for Kyo and Tohru becoming a couple, but I am a Yuki fan as well. I like your idea of putting Kagura and Ritsu together. In my opinion, it works very well. Anyway... great job on the story and I cannot wait until you update. Until the next review! MR
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Reviewed By: yuki-girl On: April 21, 2005 20:59 EDT
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I like this new chapter, although it has as you put it, more "physical situations that may be a little on the volatile side", I felt a lot of emotion behind your writting. The very same emotion you transpired during the chapter about Yuki's confrontation with his mother! Not meaning that your other chapters didn't turn out well also, it's just that I felt like I could relate more to Yuki in those chapters, you make him seem much more real!! Also, I really must say you hit a soft spot in me with the part about Tohru's moving out, I have been in the same situation VERY often, and it still pains me to feel all that sorrow and regret whenever I change homes. Still, I'm very proud of you! The scene involving Akito and Shigure really did amaze me! I felt as though Akito showed a more important side of her with her use of women "wiles"!I say, Go Girl!! Anyways, I have wondered how and from where do you choose the songs for your chapters?, I really like them, and if it isn't too rude from me, I'd like to share with you a few couple of songs that have always inspired me! If you want to... Well, I think that's all, OH! I forgot, well, I have a riddle for you!: "I'm 2 reviewers at once, we both love Yuki, one of us is a mediaminer reviewer and the other one a Fanfiction.net one, AND we both reviewed your last chapter...Guess who?" Hehe, I'm pretty sure you must have an idea already, since I use some words in both reviews (mediaminer and fanfiction), just hoped to entretain you! Hugs and |
Reviewed By: yuki-girl On: April 17, 2005 23:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've honestly never read such a great Fruits Basket story!! I've always looked fot fics in which Akito and Yuki share some type of affectionate relationship, and I totally love the fact that this story is based on Yoki's point of view, I've never known why, but I cna always relate more to Yuki than any other character. I think no one has had the chance to see Yuki's outlook of life, everyone always expects him to be calm and serene about everything. People take pity on Kyo more, because he DOES show his feelings and raging emotions from time to time, but Yuki always keeps a mask, so no one knows his true emotions! Basically, all I'm trying to say is that I'm so happy that wonderful writters such as yourself use the talent on original works, like your fanfic. Keep up with the good work, and I was wondering, will Momiki play a bigger part on the plot, I'd really like it, since I like him a lot too!
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Reviewed By: Teddy Bear On: April 15, 2005 22:43 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think that having narritive in the middle of a poem is putting a weak spot in the writing. It might be better if the narrivite was befor or after. I think that if you had foot notes insted of parenthers it would make your writing stronger. One other thing I think that there might be a better way to transition between flashback. Mabey saying it in a sentence like he rembered. Then it would still tell that it was a flash back.
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Reviewed By: Teddy Bear On: April 15, 2005 21:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think that this ia a really good fan fic. It is so fun to read. One of my favorite things is that Kyo is teaching Tohru martial arts. The way that part is writte nand the idea are totally awsome.
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Reviewed By: cheekynezumi-chan On: January 17, 2005 13:42 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Any more room for another reviewer? I had some questions and comments swimming around in my head so here they are. First off its nice to see a yuki centric fic for once and one that has a nice style of writing too!^_^ I'm especially impressed with your writing skills seeing as english is not your first language. But one thing I must ask is that you please stop using & and just write out the actual word and when you write something that other readers might not know like a japenese word, it woul be better to write a explaination at the end of the chapter instead of in parenthese. Those kind of things makes your writing look juvenile. With that said I can't wait for your next chapter! P.S. Are you using the japenese manga reference of Akito? And will there be any alone-time between Yuki and Tohru?
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Title: awesome!!
Reviewed By: Emily V. On: January 16, 2005 22:45 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, i just wanted to tell you that i love your fanfic very much. You know how to make the viewer laugh and cry and feel warm and fuzzy inside. It is very well written and I loved how you blended the song in at the end of chapter 6. Very nice work, i hope to see a new chapter soon! I will keep reviewing!!
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