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Reviewed By: parvatilotus [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2012 11:03 EST
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ok... well it's been a few years now and I was hoping that you had posted another chapter, even if it was just to finish off the story. I really hope you come back to this. |
Reviewed By: venuslegacy (not logged) On: March 03, 2011 22:49 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an amazing story, you are a very talented writer. I absolutely loved your characterisations, the way you depicted the character relationships was fascinating. This is definitely one of my top inuyasha fanfics, I'm just sad that there's no more, I felt so drawn into the universe you created, that I am eager to find out what happens next. |
Reviewed By: elani On: July 28, 2010 01:32 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was sad to see this one didn't continue on after the first lemon, because you had a good thing going, here, and I was interested in seeing where some of the story threads you'd started would go. I felt like your characterization was spot-on for just about everyone, but I particularly liked your take on Inuyasha. He's true-to-character rough around the edges without being way too over-the-top, and one looks at how he's written and has this flash of recognition for him as the universal coarse, impulsive young guy covering up his rampant insecurities with bluff and bravado...it's a part of his character that tends to get glossed over in this genre of story. Your Kagome was pretty good...she's tough to write, especially when the story's coming largely from her POV...and your Miroku and Sesshoumaru were fantastic. And if this makes any sense, I almost feel like Kagome's and Inuyasha's miscommunication could be its own character by now, and you really got that one right, too. And then of course there's the lemon, which deserves a round of applause both for being well-written (sexy without descending into romance-novel purple prose; subtle and unobtrusive word choice) and for being so refreshingly realistic -- poor Inuyasha, LOL. I think with most fic writers being young and female, there's a sort of unspoken "Guys have it soooo easy!" assumption behind sex scenes, combined with an awful lot of wishful thinking about how these things "should" be when they happen, and it's very nice to see someone step back from these cliches and end up with a scene that's a bit more three-dimensional, sympathetic, and true to life. Even the rather scary lead-up was deftly done and handled very well, and I think it provided a necessary break in the tension up to that point. Their relationship is a mess of conflict and misunderstandings layered over a lot of genuine caring, and you nailed that. Nice work. :)
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Reviewed By: vampireskiss [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2009 14:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
not to be a horribly bad critic or anything, but... I love the story and all and i may have skipped over it, but it didnt seem like Kagome had an orgasm. And I think the Inuyasha should kind of be held off a little bit in his release. I mean, him not making it to 5? I think you should continue the story further. But if I may make a request to prolong Inuyasha's releases a little bit and have Kagome have some major mind blowing ones. It may just be me and the fact that I am used to the lemon being a little different. But please take my request into consideration. Im sure it would make this wonderful story that much more wonderful. I would love to hear what you think of my request in a personal e-mail. a.hammersla@myactv.net
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Reviewed By: blackenedlove On: March 21, 2009 22:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my god! This was so refreshingly REALISTIC!!!!!!! The characters were so ridiculously in character I hated them all at times!!! I particularly love how you turned Sesshoumaru into the 'good older brother' - though he wasn't 'good' at all - without completely ruining the sadistic unfeeling character that he is! And yay! Someone finally figured out that Inuyasha, who lives in a male dominated time, probably wouldn't know all that much about sex and how a woman feels!! (I always am amused by the stories where Inuyasha is this amazing sex god who knows exactly what to do) I love you and your story!
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Reviewed By: Elina On: March 14, 2009 04:13 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well... This is one of the best Inuasha canon fanfics. Well written, beautiful language, character emotions and nature are nicely described. (the originality about Inuasha and Kagome relationship is not the most original... but of course fans want it this way ;) ) I hope that someday you will continue.
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Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2008 22:19 EDT
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I've just re-read the last two or three chapters. This has been a great story. Poor Inuyasha has been twisted into knots and he finally gets what he needs. I think your lemon was just fine. It was so emotional. I don't remember there being so much thought description the first time I read it and I think that it's a bit distracting, but not enough to make much of an impact. The twists and turns this story takes makes it well worth the read. I love your portrayal of the characters. You did an excellent job on all of them. That is so difficult to do. Cheers! Sesshoumaru really knew how to stir the pot. Brilliant tactician. This was a lovely romance with awesome action and high suspense. It was great! I can't possibly go into all the details. There is just so much about this story that is awesome. I'd have to write a whole chapter! Now...what was the whole issue with mating? Did you finish the story on another site? Anyway, love the story! ^_^ Snow (Eh, it's late and my mind is only half here, otherwise, you'd get a much better review. It has only taken me three hours to read one chapter because of all the interruptions! Anyway, sorry.)
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Reviewed By: xstephaniex [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2008 15:14 EDT
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I just discovered this story yesterday and I haven't stopped reading it since. You should really continue; it's very well written and I am interested to see how it will turn out. I hope you plan to finish some time soon. Anxiously waiting. Stephanie
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Reviewed By: ~ME On: January 11, 2008 19:28 EST
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DANG!! I'm SO sorry!! I missed the anniversary of your last update -- was there a big party?? ^_^ Just a nudge -- hope the inspiration to continue to write this little gem hasn't left you completely....there are those of us still out here waiting.......... and waiting........ and waiting....... (we're the 'Energizer Bunnies' of the fandom). Here's hoping you don't celebrate ANOTHER anniversary without an update ^_~ *cheese*
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Reviewed By: moussajinx [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2007 22:23 EST
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Okay, I officially can't stand it anymore. Your love scene was remarkably done and the jolt of humour at the end just set it in stone as one of THE best Kag/Inu love scenes of all time. But the story is just so damn good I can't stand NOT knowing what happens after. Will Inu ever figure out the illusive bond that Sess alluded to? What's going to happen with Sango now that Kouga's found a new interest? What about Miroku? Will Jaken loose his mind when he figures out what's in store for the future? What about the comb? I MUST NEEDS KNOWING!!! Please. For new years? Maybe? Love inadequately portrays my feelings for this story. And the emotion and realism rates right up there with the most memorable of all fics. My imagination isn't as good as yours and if you're worried about any cliche' "overdone" anything regarding where you were taking the aging thing or anything else, your style and knowledge of the characters would make anysuch thing nigh impossible. I really truly hope you do continue this, and until then, I'll keep re-reading it and periodically pestering you. Cheers! :D
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Title: please update!
Reviewed By: inukagfan4life On: November 09, 2007 20:14 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is a really good story!!!! i think it sounds like something that could happen not only in the show but in real life too. well sorta. anyway are you ever gonna update this? i'm dying to know! this story is way too good for you to just forget about! truth be be told, it's the best one i've ever read.
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Reviewed By: Merely Truth On: October 24, 2007 06:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
If you are no more interested in writing the story, could you PLEASE put some sentences to explain how you had seen the end of it in your head. I would be very glad, HAPPY about it !!!!! Thank you for your wonderful story ! A french mommy and reader, Bonjour de la France Merely Truth
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Reviewed By: moussajinx [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2007 20:28 EDT
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Okay, now I realize this could stand as it is and that's most likely what I'm getting. But....damnit! I really wanted a bit more in the closure/thisisthis/thatisthat/musediesosorry. phoo.l Munches buffalo chips. ;)
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Reviewed By: InuYashacrazy101 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2007 19:24 EDT
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are u done with the story or is this it coz i would end it here. iluv how inuyasha thot she was biting the man!! its to funny :) i hope if u continue the story dont make everyone wait that long! i mean come on 5 months?! thats to long!!
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Reviewed By: A.M. Smart On: May 12, 2007 01:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I adored reading this fanfic from the very first chapter! The characterization is true and the story flows very well. I loved the development of Kagome's and InuYasha's relationship. I also felt you were being very truthful and realistic when you wrote about the insecurities the characters felt. I can't wait to find out what happens now that they have mated. And finally, I have to ask: Did they remember protection? Or can I expect a cute little bundle to appear near the end of the story?
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Reviewed By: malitiadixie On: March 22, 2007 21:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh please please please update soon. I love this story soooo much! Please!!!
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Title: What a Girl Needs
Reviewed By: crimsondragon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2007 14:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great story, I feel that the characters are all represented very well. I especially like sesshoumaru because even though he is helping the inu gang, it is really just for his own ends, which I think is really like him. A lot of fics have him just softening up a lot, and while he certainly has through the series, not enough to get all chummy with Inuyasha. I also loved the part when Kagome comes back from her great uncle's funeral and Sess is interrogatin her. "A fast horse could travel that distance in two days." "Well, sorry, our family doesn't have horses!" And then sess' reasoning to be understanding was great. He feels bad that Kag's family is "too poor to own horses". And that her uncle must have been very important to be considered "great" LOL, that is one of my favorite fanfic moments I've read! The lemon was also pretty appropriate, as you said, they are first timers. Please update as soon as possibe! PLEASE!
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Title: Chapters 1-14
Reviewed By: HopelesslyEscaflowne [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2007 22:51 EST
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I started reading this a logn time ago but never finished it. I finally did today and I have to say I am glad I'm all caught up on the story so far. This is truly one of the most unique, exciting, endearing, and enjoyable Inuyasha fanfics I have read. I love how everything is so raw and inexperienced. I also enjoed how you put lots of modern day references in, such as the "big bad wolf" descriptions of Kouga among many others. You had said that you weren't sure about your Shippou portrayl but I think you did an excellent job. I thought it was especially original how you had him physically mature to a more normal height. He's so adorable! ^^ I hope that, after Kags and Inu are all settled, they adopt Shippou. Even though they all feel like a family, I still think Shippou is closest to Kagome and Inuyasha. I still can't describe how perfect the moments were between Shippou and those two. It all seemed very real and believable. I'm hoping for lots more Kagome, Inuyasha, and Shippou in the future! They are finally starting to iron things out and they definitely have more to discuss with one another. They also didn't even complete the mating ritual and you could tell Kagome hadn't felt the moment for it to happen, like it was mentioned earlier. There's so much more to tell and that makes me happy, hehe. As for Miroku and Sango, I'll be honest, I'm always more interested in the other three. I will say that you wrote them very true to character and they were very enjoyable to read. They just aren't my favourites, hehe. I thought it was a great twist when you had Kouga start going after Sango. I was most impressed! Kouga has always been sexy and if he can't have Kagome he might as well get right back to pursuing other strong females, hehe. I never really liked Ayame and it was obvious that Kouga never had any romantic feelings for her. He's just a really nice guy who doesn't think about what he says, but believes it when he says it. I liek that about him, he's very passionate, just like our favourite hanyou. ;) Anyways, I hope there's lots more on the way and I'll keep an eye out for any future updates. ^^ Keep up the good work! P.S. Your beta does good work.
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Title: UPDATE!!!
Reviewed By: AngelChii49 On: February 24, 2007 21:32 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! this story is soooo great!!!when's the nexted chapter coming????i have to read more of this!!!
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Title: update!!
Reviewed By: sunrisegoodbyes [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2007 21:02 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic... it is very different but in a good way. I've never read anything like this and i have got to admit it sounds just like the real world, for Virgin's anyway. Lol! Well i hope you update soon!!
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Title: update!!
Reviewed By: sunrisegoodbyes [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2007 21:02 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic... it is very different but in a good way. I've never read anything like this and i have got to admit it sounds just like the real world, for Virgin's anyway. Lol! Well i hope you update soon!!
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Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2007 10:04 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, I just wanted to tell you that you are one of the few people who manages to keep my action whore happy soul! ^_^ Snow
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Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2007 10:02 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story and really, really hope that you continue. It is wonderful. I love the conniving Sesshoumaru, his attacks on Kagome and her responses. Inuyasha is just great too. And your lemon was great. I am putting this story in my favorites hoping that the notifications actually work now! I lost track of so many stories when there was that glitch. I am very anxious for another chapter, although I know that you are probably very busy. Well, I'll be watching for more fun! Especially since Kagome and Inu are now mated! WooHoo! ^_^ Oh, and if I reviewed you elsewhere, I don't remember. My memory sucks. LOL Snow
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Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2007 19:42 EST
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I must have read the Hot Springs part of the most recent chapter 10 times or more, not because th elemon is so juicy but because I love the dialog between Kagome and Inuyasha.
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Reviewed By: Inusbabe [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2007 14:42 EST
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So glad to see new chapter! I reread the whole story hopefully more will come soon
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Reviewed By: Catticus (not signed in) On: January 11, 2007 00:11 EST
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may i also add that i am a horrible typer? sorry for the extra review.
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Reviewed By: Catticus (not signed in) On: January 11, 2007 00:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i must stay, i enjoy this fic immensely. i would like to point out that you do tend to ramble sometimes, and include facts in the narrative that sound repeptive because one can derive sertain conclusion without the extra information. just thought i'd let you know. again, love the story. cheers!!
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Reviewed By: Kristen Inubunny On: January 07, 2007 22:25 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank God someone has finally written a realistic virgin lemon for these two. I don't care what anyone says, the first time for most females hurts like hell. Speaking from experience...a woman often does not have an orgasm the first time. Usually the only pleasure you receive is from pleasing the one you love. And yes it STILL hurts a little the 2nd and 3rd time too...no matter how 'good' the male is. Very touching chapter though. I can't wait for more. Good luck with moving too. Lord knows that's a bitch. :)
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Title: Yay!
Reviewed By: blackberry [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2007 18:55 EST
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Awesome chapter! And not just the lemon--the Inu-Kagome dialogue throughout was spot-on, especially the arguing. Excellent work on building up the tension to the breaking point, the n/c tussling was actually pretty disturbing, but you brought it to the next level perfectly! Loved the lemon, the emotion came through beautifully--and that's what really counts. And the last line killed me!
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Reviewed By: axel721 On: January 06, 2007 09:19 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whew, that was almost a years wait XD What an awesome chapter though!! I love it when the sex is more realistic like that, and definately not perfect. The future "explorations" are going to be very interesting ^.~ Update soon this time, ne? =D
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