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Title: hiei
Reviewed By: blubberlady On: June 30, 2005 04:31 CDT
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kags/hiei kags/hiei kags/hiei plz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Adicted to crossover On: May 18, 2005 23:09 CDT
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Can I vote for a Yusuke/Kagome? I really like it so far, update soon please
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Reviewed By: gcdv [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 16:09 CDT
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hey sorry for writing again but i just wanted you to know not to listen to that Marauding Penguin.she doesn't know what shes talking about.I mean can you say *OVER ANALIZING* just continue your story.
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Reviewed By: gcdv [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 15:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Tour story sounds really interesting.Icna't remember if i already reviewd but im doing this again just in case. O well i vote for a H/K!!Up date soon.now just so you know im going to keep bugging you until you review.I'm a little *cough* weird.
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Reviewed By: roseblade [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2005 18:42 CDT
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kag/youko or kag/kur or kag/sess love it so far pleas update
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Reviewed By: Samantha121212 On: April 25, 2005 08:36 CDT
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Poor Kagome! I hope Kurama can warm her heart again! What part of Yu Yu is this fic established in? I hope it's after the tournament where Yusuke is no longer a King of Demon World!!! Please POST MORE ASAP!!!! Love ya, Sam
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Title: voting
Reviewed By: Tsuki-tora [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 18:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I vote Kur/Kag with maybe a brother sister relationship with Hiei (not by blood though, or you could do that...o_O). I think you should have Kagome turn demon/miko, you could have it to where she was always demon but didn't know it, or maybe she was recently turned demon.^_^... Will Sesshoumaru come back into the story later? I hope you update soon! Ja-ne! ~Tsuki-tora
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Reviewed By: Marauding Penguin On: April 24, 2005 15:09 CDT
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My advice would be to shelve this fic until you can come up with something just a little more original. Genkai as Kagome's grandmother has been done to death. Inuyasha killing everyone has been done to death. Naraku or his minion coming through the well and killing Kagome's family has been done to death. You've asked your readers to suspend disbelief more than a few times in this short chapter alone. Why on earth would Inuyasha do something like that? It's completely out of character for him. How did a minion get through the well in the first place, when it's pretty much established that nobody other than Kagome and Inuyasha can get through the well in the first place? For that matter, how did Shippou get through the well, when he can't in the canon? These are things that need to be explained if you want to write a good fic. You also need to use a spellcheck and work on your grammar. Perhaps you could enlist the aid of a beta reader. And for the life of me, I can't understand this silly trend of authors asking their readers what they should be writing. Seriously, do you know how pandering that is? It's like you're looking to please as many readers as you can so you can get more reviews or something. Put your characters in a novel situation - something that hasn't been done to death - and then let them take the story where they will. That's how writing works (well, GOOD writing, anyway.) Step away from the keyboard and go read a few good books for inspiration.
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Reviewed By: lksajdflk On: April 24, 2005 14:33 CDT
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this is............interesting, update soon, i vote kagome/hiei
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Reviewed By: kawaiigirlanime [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 11:07 CDT
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great beginnig can't wait to see where u go with it. kurama/kagome :D
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Reviewed By: kawaiigirlanime [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 11:07 CDT
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great beginnig can't wait to see where u go with it. kurama/kagome :D
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Reviewed By: TheStatue On: April 24, 2005 03:35 CDT
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Gah. It's not a bad start, I don't think- but the typos are egregious. Get a dictionary, if you don't have word. or something. Spelling is not a function of document programs, after all. As for Kagome's racial status- keep her human. It gives her more weaknesses and that makes her more interesting as a character. Besides... she's a miko. sure, it can be cute to have her be a demoness, but that is in direct conflict to her nature.
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Reviewed By: FireDemon86 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 19:54 CDT
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Your story is off to a great start, I can't wait to read more. As for the vote thing i'd say keep Kagome human, and as for pairing I don't know I want to see how your going to have them interact. However just a heads up I love Kag/Hiei, but that girl, Kagome15, has a nice idea. ;) Anyway can't wait to read more Please Update SOON!!!!
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Reviewed By: Squirrel Girl On: April 23, 2005 18:15 CDT
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Your story is pretty cool so far, so I really hope you continue it! My vote is for Hiei and Kagome to get together. If you decide to make Kagome a demon, you could always have Sesshomaru show up and play off of that. Well, until your next update, bye! : )
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 16:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kur/Kagome/Hiei PLEASE PLEASE!!!! UPDATE SOON ASAP!!! GRAET JOB ON IT TOO!! ^_^
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