Hikaru No Go Fan Fiction ❯ Future ❯ chapter 4 ( Chapter 4 )
[ Y - Young Adult: Not suitable for readers under 16 ]
By: jgal 
ignored the last paragraph, that's my beta-reader words to me =_=
Anime/Manga: Hikaru No Go Fan Fiction | Genre(s): Romance | Type: Continuation | Uploaded On: 05.15.2005 | Pages: 2 | Words: 1.6K | Visits: 483 | Status: Completed
ignored the last paragraph, that's my beta-reader words to me =_=
Anime/Manga: Hikaru No Go Fan Fiction | Genre(s): Romance | Type: Continuation | Uploaded On: 05.15.2005 | Pages: 2 | Words: 1.6K | Visits: 483 | Status: Completed
Disclaimer: The usual disclaimer applies. I do not own Hikaru No Go!
Future
Chapter 4-- Moving out!
Akira was showing his father's study group to the door when he caught sight of Hikaru's approach. He was understandably surprised since it was 11.45 at night, and Hikaru usually avoiding coming over when his parents were home, especially without giving any warning beforehand.
"Shindou, what are you doing here so late?" he asked.
Hikaru looked embarrassed at being caught red-handed. Noticing that he was making Hikaru uncomfortable, Akira invited him into the house. His mother, Akiko, served tea while Hikaru apologized for coming so late at night.
"So why are you visiting us so late?" Akira asked the moment Hikaru sat down on the couch.
He watched as Hikaru gulped, very aware of Akira's parents, but braced himself and stated his reason for coming over.
"Well, I was hoping that I could stay over for the night..." Hikaru said sheepishly.
"Stay over?" Akira echoed, nearly dropping his tea cup.
While Touya Kouyo, his father, watched in stern silence, Akiko asked tentatively, "Shindou-kun, are you sure it's all right with your parents? Do they know you aren't at home right now?"
"Well, my parents were already asleep when I left, so it's fine. Actually, staying over here would be better than staying at home at this point..." Hikaru spoke slowly, choosing his words carefully. "I'm sure it won't be a big a surprise for them since it's not the first time--"
"Shindou... don't tell me you've run away from home..." Akira interrupted, narrowing his eyes at Hikaru. He could tell Hikaru was holding back some information from the way he had taken such care in answering. The fact that Hikaru was trying to avoid his eyes simply confirmed his suspicions.
"Of course not! I didn't run away from home, I'm just trying to stay away for now."
"May I ask why you suddenly felt the need to stay away from home this late at night?" his father interjected before an argument could start. Akira bit back a sharp retort when he realised that his father had probably heard about their earlier, childish argument from Kurata, who had dropped by for a visit that afternoon.
Directing his attention back to Hikaru, Akira realised that Hikaru actually felt embarrassed about the reason he was planning to give. Upon closer inspection, he found Hikaru fidgeting uncomfortably under his parents' scrutiny. However, his observations were cut short when Hikaru started to explain.
"Well, I'm trying to avoid my cousin who's staying over at my house for who knows how long," said Hikaru. "Let's just say that I don't get along with him, but I can deal with that. What I can't deal with is the non-stop noise pollution."
Akira blinked. "Noise pollution?"
"Yeah. He's a rock star, and he's loud and hyperactive. Before I'd even stepped into my house, he tackled me, and I had to pry him off. Next, he used my kifu to scribble song notes on. It's lucky I was quick enough to snatch them from him before he did any real damage. Then he started whining to me about an argument he had with his ... a friend over chewing gum."
"Who has arguments over chewing gum?" Akira asked, feeling utterly bewildered. If he hadn't been suspicious before, he would be now. He wondered why Hikaru had seemed to hesitate before saying "a friend." The mere idea of someone making a big fuss over chewing gum was just absurd, although there were always exceptions. He was drawn out of his thoughts when he heard Hikaru's sharp retort.
"That's what I'm saying! Then he cornered me in the bathroom, and I literally had to drag him out and latch the door before I could take a bath. The worst part was that he invited one of his band members over to work on their next album. At eleven o'clock at night!" Hikaru exclaimed. "That was the last straw. I can't imagine how my parents manage to sleep with all that racket."
"Well..." Akira looked to his father for permission.
"I suppose it's all right," said his father. "But he'll have to share a room with you. We don't have any guest rooms," he added for Hikaru's benefit.
With that, both his parents left the room to retire for the night, leaving him alone with Hikaru to settle their sleeping arrangements. They stood in silence for a while, not speaking but eyeing each other. Finally, Akira said, "Come with me. I'll show you to my room."
Hikaru followed without a word as they made their way towards the very end of the hallway. Akira slid the door opened and gestured for Hikaru to enter before him. Then he reached for the cupboard and pulled out an extra blanket, pillow and futon, laying them down for his friend. Hikaru fell asleep the moment his head hit the pillow.
Two weeks later, Akira stood on the sidewalk in front of Shindou Hikaru's new apartment, a smile tugging at his lips when he remembered how cute his rival had looked that night.
Shaking his head for one last time, he pressed the doorbell and waited patiently for Hikaru to answer the door. He heard a shuffle of feet, then the door open to reveal Hikaru standing there in his usual T-shirt and shorts. He tripped over a box that was lying carelessly by the side of the door, and Akira nearly reached out to steady him. He couldn't help but smile when Hikaru scratched the back of his head sheepishly and said "Sorry for the mess, I'm still unpacking."
Akira took a moment to survey the apartment, feeling satisfied with what he found. The apartment was fully equipped with a kitchen, two bedrooms, a living room and a dining area. He felt like a weight had been lifted from his heart. Intially, he'd been worrying over whether Hikaru would manage to find a decent apartment. He had even almost offered his own house, but then he remembered how uncomfortable Hikaru always got around his parents.
Hikaru broke into his thoughts by offering a can of Oolong tea, which Akira accepted gratefully. "Thanks," he said.
He felt warmth engulfing his heart as he looked down at the can of Oolong tea in his hands, glad that Hikaru had remembered his fondness of tea in any flavor. Placing the canned tea by the side of the table, he said, "Shindou, let me help you unpack."
Without waiting for a reply, he separated all the empty boxes lying around with those that had yet to be unpacked. Next, he took the empty boxes out front to the main garbage dump while Hikaru opened those that remained. They spend the next hour busily unpacking and decorating the apartment, stopping only for lunch. In the end it took them three whole hours before the apartment was presentable.
Silence permeated the air as both of them took in their new surroundings, and Akira spied for Hikaru's reaction from the corner of his eye. He was relieved to see Hikaru grinning down at the new Go board sitting on the table in the center of the living room, a contribution Akira had snuck in while they were working. He watched as Hikaru inspected the Go board in detail and smiled in response when Hikaru beamed up at him. When Hikaru reached for his hands, thanking him enthusiastically for the house-warming gift, Akira had to fight against the blush that slowly crept across his face.
He slowly pulled his hands from Hikaru's grasp. It wasn't that Akira disliked physical contact from Hikaru. On the contrary, he didn't trust himself not to take things further, something that was sure to confuse the other boy if not scare him off altogether. Darting a quick glance at the time on Hikaru's kitchen clock, he realised he was going to be late.
Shooting Hikaru an apologetic look, he said "I'll have to go now. I have a game with my father this evening."
"Oh... sure! Say hi to your parents for me," Hikaru answered with a smile.
Akira smiled back. "I'll see you tomorrow. Thanks for having me over."
With that, he left Hikaru's new apartment and went home.
~ to be continued ~
date completed: 01/04/05
date revised: 21/04/05
Notes to Jgal--
Very good. :) The transition works well, as does Akira's curiosity over Hikaru's hesitation. Just made a few grammatical corrections here and there and rewording a couple other things. When writing in English, it's generally a good idea to avoid repitition when you can (for example, using a character's name several times within two sentences). You might want to give it a quick run through the spell-checker, though. I have a migraine, so it's a little hard to focus . . .
Future
Chapter 4-- Moving out!
Akira was showing his father's study group to the door when he caught sight of Hikaru's approach. He was understandably surprised since it was 11.45 at night, and Hikaru usually avoiding coming over when his parents were home, especially without giving any warning beforehand.
"Shindou, what are you doing here so late?" he asked.
Hikaru looked embarrassed at being caught red-handed. Noticing that he was making Hikaru uncomfortable, Akira invited him into the house. His mother, Akiko, served tea while Hikaru apologized for coming so late at night.
"So why are you visiting us so late?" Akira asked the moment Hikaru sat down on the couch.
He watched as Hikaru gulped, very aware of Akira's parents, but braced himself and stated his reason for coming over.
"Well, I was hoping that I could stay over for the night..." Hikaru said sheepishly.
"Stay over?" Akira echoed, nearly dropping his tea cup.
While Touya Kouyo, his father, watched in stern silence, Akiko asked tentatively, "Shindou-kun, are you sure it's all right with your parents? Do they know you aren't at home right now?"
"Well, my parents were already asleep when I left, so it's fine. Actually, staying over here would be better than staying at home at this point..." Hikaru spoke slowly, choosing his words carefully. "I'm sure it won't be a big a surprise for them since it's not the first time--"
"Shindou... don't tell me you've run away from home..." Akira interrupted, narrowing his eyes at Hikaru. He could tell Hikaru was holding back some information from the way he had taken such care in answering. The fact that Hikaru was trying to avoid his eyes simply confirmed his suspicions.
"Of course not! I didn't run away from home, I'm just trying to stay away for now."
"May I ask why you suddenly felt the need to stay away from home this late at night?" his father interjected before an argument could start. Akira bit back a sharp retort when he realised that his father had probably heard about their earlier, childish argument from Kurata, who had dropped by for a visit that afternoon.
Directing his attention back to Hikaru, Akira realised that Hikaru actually felt embarrassed about the reason he was planning to give. Upon closer inspection, he found Hikaru fidgeting uncomfortably under his parents' scrutiny. However, his observations were cut short when Hikaru started to explain.
"Well, I'm trying to avoid my cousin who's staying over at my house for who knows how long," said Hikaru. "Let's just say that I don't get along with him, but I can deal with that. What I can't deal with is the non-stop noise pollution."
Akira blinked. "Noise pollution?"
"Yeah. He's a rock star, and he's loud and hyperactive. Before I'd even stepped into my house, he tackled me, and I had to pry him off. Next, he used my kifu to scribble song notes on. It's lucky I was quick enough to snatch them from him before he did any real damage. Then he started whining to me about an argument he had with his ... a friend over chewing gum."
"Who has arguments over chewing gum?" Akira asked, feeling utterly bewildered. If he hadn't been suspicious before, he would be now. He wondered why Hikaru had seemed to hesitate before saying "a friend." The mere idea of someone making a big fuss over chewing gum was just absurd, although there were always exceptions. He was drawn out of his thoughts when he heard Hikaru's sharp retort.
"That's what I'm saying! Then he cornered me in the bathroom, and I literally had to drag him out and latch the door before I could take a bath. The worst part was that he invited one of his band members over to work on their next album. At eleven o'clock at night!" Hikaru exclaimed. "That was the last straw. I can't imagine how my parents manage to sleep with all that racket."
"Well..." Akira looked to his father for permission.
"I suppose it's all right," said his father. "But he'll have to share a room with you. We don't have any guest rooms," he added for Hikaru's benefit.
With that, both his parents left the room to retire for the night, leaving him alone with Hikaru to settle their sleeping arrangements. They stood in silence for a while, not speaking but eyeing each other. Finally, Akira said, "Come with me. I'll show you to my room."
Hikaru followed without a word as they made their way towards the very end of the hallway. Akira slid the door opened and gestured for Hikaru to enter before him. Then he reached for the cupboard and pulled out an extra blanket, pillow and futon, laying them down for his friend. Hikaru fell asleep the moment his head hit the pillow.
Two weeks later, Akira stood on the sidewalk in front of Shindou Hikaru's new apartment, a smile tugging at his lips when he remembered how cute his rival had looked that night.
Shaking his head for one last time, he pressed the doorbell and waited patiently for Hikaru to answer the door. He heard a shuffle of feet, then the door open to reveal Hikaru standing there in his usual T-shirt and shorts. He tripped over a box that was lying carelessly by the side of the door, and Akira nearly reached out to steady him. He couldn't help but smile when Hikaru scratched the back of his head sheepishly and said "Sorry for the mess, I'm still unpacking."
Akira took a moment to survey the apartment, feeling satisfied with what he found. The apartment was fully equipped with a kitchen, two bedrooms, a living room and a dining area. He felt like a weight had been lifted from his heart. Intially, he'd been worrying over whether Hikaru would manage to find a decent apartment. He had even almost offered his own house, but then he remembered how uncomfortable Hikaru always got around his parents.
Hikaru broke into his thoughts by offering a can of Oolong tea, which Akira accepted gratefully. "Thanks," he said.
He felt warmth engulfing his heart as he looked down at the can of Oolong tea in his hands, glad that Hikaru had remembered his fondness of tea in any flavor. Placing the canned tea by the side of the table, he said, "Shindou, let me help you unpack."
Without waiting for a reply, he separated all the empty boxes lying around with those that had yet to be unpacked. Next, he took the empty boxes out front to the main garbage dump while Hikaru opened those that remained. They spend the next hour busily unpacking and decorating the apartment, stopping only for lunch. In the end it took them three whole hours before the apartment was presentable.
Silence permeated the air as both of them took in their new surroundings, and Akira spied for Hikaru's reaction from the corner of his eye. He was relieved to see Hikaru grinning down at the new Go board sitting on the table in the center of the living room, a contribution Akira had snuck in while they were working. He watched as Hikaru inspected the Go board in detail and smiled in response when Hikaru beamed up at him. When Hikaru reached for his hands, thanking him enthusiastically for the house-warming gift, Akira had to fight against the blush that slowly crept across his face.
He slowly pulled his hands from Hikaru's grasp. It wasn't that Akira disliked physical contact from Hikaru. On the contrary, he didn't trust himself not to take things further, something that was sure to confuse the other boy if not scare him off altogether. Darting a quick glance at the time on Hikaru's kitchen clock, he realised he was going to be late.
Shooting Hikaru an apologetic look, he said "I'll have to go now. I have a game with my father this evening."
"Oh... sure! Say hi to your parents for me," Hikaru answered with a smile.
Akira smiled back. "I'll see you tomorrow. Thanks for having me over."
With that, he left Hikaru's new apartment and went home.
~ to be continued ~
date completed: 01/04/05
date revised: 21/04/05
Notes to Jgal--
Very good. :) The transition works well, as does Akira's curiosity over Hikaru's hesitation. Just made a few grammatical corrections here and there and rewording a couple other things. When writing in English, it's generally a good idea to avoid repitition when you can (for example, using a character's name several times within two sentences). You might want to give it a quick run through the spell-checker, though. I have a migraine, so it's a little hard to focus . . .