| "Not the Last Time" Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] |
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Reviewed By: Jess *not in* On: July 09, 2005 13:10 PDT
Comment/Review:
I liked that oneshot... I liked the interaction between bulma and vegeta and the relationship that you showed. I like how you saw they're emotions and how a situation like that would affect them... very good job
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2005 11:07 PDT
Comment/Review:
It's very good. I liked the interplay of emotion. I also liked how you described Vegeta's depression, allowing him to be both sad and strong at the same time. I also liked seeing Bulma at a loss for what to do or say for a chamge. Sometimes she is so smart and know it allish that we tend to forget that she still as human as the rest of us.
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Reviewed By: AltairKaosu [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2005 09:43 PDT
Comment/Review:
I really like how this is written. You portray Vegeta as vulnerable without turning him into a huge steaming pile of Saiyanmush. Great job on that. I also liked how he referenced Yamcha: "that Yamcha creature". It made me giggle. Fantastic work overall.
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Reviewed By: Subu [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2005 09:26 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa. that was the first word I said after I read this. I never have read a good story that portrated his vunerable side so good. you really are a talented writer.
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