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| "Collective Sighs" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Yuugi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2006 19:15 CST
Comment/Review:
This poem confused me a bit because it seemed to do some jumping around the main point of it. Also, the rhythm also seems a tad bit awkward as well. The stanza that contains the words "really real" seems to be a bit repetitive as it is sort of stating the same thing as the word before or after it (depending on which word you choose). Also, all the stanzas rhyme or have a near rhyme while the stanza containing "And plead with someone to put out the flames of my hell" does not make a similar sound as the line above it. Overall, I did like the feel of this poem and its dark theme, and I applaud you on having no typos (as far as I can see). Thank you for submitting your poem to the FFARG!
| Title: Parallels
Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2005 22:38 CDT
Comment/Review:
Beautiful, albeit a dark poem. Two thumbs up. I'll tell you a story that parallels this poem in the future ^_^ d('')b
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