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| "Trial By Fire" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Not to be a dick or anything.........
Reviewed By: Korisovra [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2008 16:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't really mean to be a dick about it or anything, but......let's face it, I'm a dick. Sophomoric and amateur writing style, the plot is severely lacking, the layout of each paragraph is pretty damned irritating, spelling is decent, (from the little I skimmed)and overall: it's boring and unrealistic. Have a nice day!
| Title: Thank you
Reviewed By: crolynx [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2006 22:54 CST
Comment/Review:
Thanks for finally putting up a new chapter. I have been enjoying this story immensely. I do have one question though, Why are you writing this in the style of a play or product for performance, why not simple write it as a story? Just curious. Anyways good work. Glad to see you're still writing. Hope this encourages you to write more. Ja ne, Ceolynx ;p
| Title: Pretty good, keep going
Reviewed By: Neon Ronin [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2005 20:45 CST
Comment/Review:
I read Darkmoon's 'Resolution' some time back; it was part of what inspired me to start working on my own Ranma fic. As far as continuations go, this one is pretty darn good. I hadn't thought much about Ranko being a loose end when Resolution ended, but the way you're dealing with it and your bits of character development are quite enjoyable. The script format irks me a tiny bit, but since Resolution was written the same way it's not that big a deal. One bit of advice- try making the chapters longer, maybe add a little more action. One thing I am curious about- will the penitent Genma show up any time soon, on break from his 'debt repayment trip'? Might he even attempt to redeem himself in an unexpected way? I remember how he was cast out of the clan in the original story, was curious how that might be dealt with 2 years later. Anyway, keep it up, and don't worry too much about slow updates- I'm no speed demon myself in that department. Good job, and if you could spare my work a glance or review I'd appreciate it. Us fanfic writers gotta stick together. ^_^
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