| "Finding What is Lost" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Kichi [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2007 00:45 CDT
Comment/Review:
Oh no! Mugen left! Damnit
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Reviewed By: haiku_amarante [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2006 18:02 CST
Comment/Review:
I really like how they're all somehow finding each other; very cool!
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Title: FFRG review Ch 8
Reviewed By: White_Winged_Atlantian [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2005 00:27 CST
Comment/Review:
You've got some nice grammar there, thank you for submitting to the FFRG, and I'll also note that while you have spaces between your paragraphs, sometimes there are double or triple spaces, between your paragraphs. Unfortunately, I don't know anything about Samurai Champloo. It's a short chapter so it's a short review, what I've noticed, is that while you have a good dialogue, the story doesn't draw me in. This might be a different thing if I knew anything of the series, but more insight into the characters, what makes them tick, and what's happened to them and how it affected them would help in this.
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Title: Interresting
Reviewed By: TMcCaine [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2005 22:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
My points may be a little harsh, but I want to in know way offend your intuitive writing style. When I first started reading your story I was a little taken by the alien nature from my perspective of the story line of samurai shamploo. Shamploo in Japanese means a mixture and the story line is a mix of hip hop samurai culture in the late feudal era. That is very hard to translate in a fan fic and I applaud your effort. I would like to also say that after the inner monologue we get into actual speech it transforms into a familiar rhetoric of samurai shamploo. Now I am only talking about chapter 8. I looked at your other works and see a theme. You have a good bit of intuition that makes me curious about you as a writer. Intuition is the first step and the second is expression. I will insist your expression is familiar but needs work to be better. This where I see your work fall short on but I do like what I did read and look forward for more.
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Title: Stuff-ed
Reviewed By: LishaLou32 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2005 02:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
woo nice to hear something like this although im wondering what youll do about the 3-some...and who will end up with whom...update soon!
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Reviewed By: DeJaVooo [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2005 21:12 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I reallylike this story! Can't wait for you to update ^_^ ...so... update SOON!
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