| "When Snow Falls" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] |
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Reviewed By: Kix [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2007 02:42 CST
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wahhh..two clifhangers in one day..naughty you!
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Reviewed By: Kix [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2007 11:33 CST
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*hugs and cuddles* thankyou for updating, it's looking totaly awsome@!
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Title: Lovin it 4eva!
Reviewed By: Rainy_Dream [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2006 09:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I like this Hatori and this Tohru in this fanfic! Though I prefer TohruxYuki . . . But, it is still a great fanfic! I fell in love wif it. Write More, pppllleeeuuuzzzz!
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Reviewed By: Kix [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2006 14:55 CDT
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I realy realy realy realy wish you keep writing this..pweeeeseeee!! I mean you ended just as i was gettin into it!~
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Reviewed By: Belle ange [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2005 13:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE!!!!! I really like this story and I think you are doing a wonderful job at writing it and i hope that you continue and write many others. I just feel bad for poor yuki. oh well. you rock!!
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Title: Chapter 3
Reviewed By: blessed_love15 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2005 11:43 CDT
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Now that I think about it, Yuki would probably do a lot more than slide a door shut if he saw someone (anyone!) kissing Tohru. Just a thought... I'm not going to read this anymore, there isn't enough conflict. Don't take it personally, I just don't like it.
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Title: Chapter 2
Reviewed By: blessed_love15 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2005 11:37 CDT
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Aha~! Caught in the act! Hatori is way OOC, but hey, it's all good. The kissing scene was detailed, but what of everything else? What's the weather like? What does the frame look like? What is Hatori exactly feeling besides confused and angsty?
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Title: Chapter 1
Reviewed By: blessed_love15 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2005 11:31 CDT
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You bounce around alot. I'm reminded of that creepy video in that movie "The Ring". Slow down, girl! Take your time, there's no rush. The begining was a bit pointless with the Yuki fanclub and Kyo getting in trouble in gym. Instead, why not start off the chapter with Tohru in the grocery store? More imagry would be nice. Hatori could be hyper-aware about Tohru's looks and what she's wearing. He's in love with her, but what about Tohru? This all just seems too discombobulated (sc?) to be a chapter, it's more like a rough draft. Great idea, however. Some revision is all it needs.
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Title: Prologue
Reviewed By: blessed_love15 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2005 11:20 CDT
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I love how you state the emotions rather than going into depth on the imagry, since nightmares a generally built on intense emotions. Why did Tohru say that? I guess I'll just have to read on...
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Reviewed By: Kyoru Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2005 19:52 CDT
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like what these smart people said ^^ i like the shocking hatoriru (shit, i don't know), pairing. please continue on, i think it's pretty good ^^
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Title: Love it!
Reviewed By: Myst_Lady [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2005 23:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I quite like the pairing. Very interesting.
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Reviewed By: stargazer starluver On: September 02, 2005 23:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice job! i love hatori's character in this fic. though i don't like the way you made yuki seem the bad guy coz i have this calm polite yuki in mind most fo the time and it sort of distorts my view of him. check you some of your spelling. it's well-written though.
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Reviewed By: RiSa LuLu15 RhYmE2 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2005 18:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yaya i loved it plz continue i really liked it pl update soon ok well bye and Update soon if you an ok well bye!
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Reviewed By: Dingbat On: August 30, 2005 16:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well I love a bit of romance you could say I'm a softy at heart, plus it is the shock of the pairing. I've read a mound of Kyo and tohru or Yuki and Tohru pairings but never a Hatori and Tohru pairing. You have to continue or I will scream I need to know.
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Reviewed By: RiSa LuLu15 RhYmE2 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2005 22:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh plz plz continue i really like this story its wonderful hehehe ok well updatye soon i really want 2 know what happens next ok well bye and no preasure and update soon! Plz dont leave me hanging!^-^
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