| "Kidnappers Kiss" Reviews/Comments [ 81 ] |
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2005 23:36 CDT
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I was going to email you back but my server said that your address didn't exist! so here's the link to the site! http://www.freedict.com/onldict/jap.html
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Reviewed By: shinimegami82 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2005 22:34 CDT
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This is okay but there are a few grammer errors and such. I would like to read more. Hopefully it will get better as it goes along. Anyway, pretty good so far.
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Reviewed By: miaa_hiaa [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2005 20:59 CDT
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oh joy be good now and update soon or else! *takes out pillow and hits you on the head* ^_^
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2005 23:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the idea. But there are a few things I would like to give you a critique on. Inuyasha is OOC but I don't see anything wrong with it if it helps the story and has a reason behind it. Another thing is clothing. Really when you write you don't want to touch on clothing. By giving descriptions on what the characters are wearing you could accidently make them OOC. Then the next thing you know you've got people flaming you saying "Kagome would never wear that!". When I write it's rare for me to go into clothing. Miroku was OOC also because I can't see him just smiling and saying hey while Inuyasha has one of his friends over his shuolder and is trying to kidnap her. I would expect him say something or try to stop him. And he was way too "okay" with the fact that Inuyasha had went to prison and had escaped. The final thing is Sango's last name. You went so far as to give the Japanese version of "McDonald's" but gave Sango an American last name. Before I figured out this trick I would have to invent OC characters names off the top of my head so I know how hard it is. But all you have to do is find a good website with a English to Japanese Dictionary and you take any word and turn it into a Japanese word and use it as a name! If you want a link to a good site then you can e-mail me! I hope you continue writing.
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2005 07:05 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOVE the story so far!!!! so please update SOON!!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Angel_4_life [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2005 19:18 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
off to a great start, i think i am really going to like this story, please email me when you update, my emails on my profile page
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