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| "Once More, With Pirates" Reviews/Comments [ 42 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 › » ] | Title: Kicks Butt!!!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2006 03:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I gota say, I love Edward's little song about static, it was perfect!!! And you gotta know I nearly died with happy joy during the scene with Spike and Faye- it was perfectly in character, yet delightfully subtle/romantic! Their's is definately going to be a slow coming together, they just irk eachother so much that a relationship is really gonna be a loss for both sides until they work through it enough to make it benefit them! LOL! And I love the emotional upheaval you wrote for Al, he is just so sweet, and you portrayed is terror at being dislodged so very aptly! Another fabulous chapter!
| Title: Yay!!!!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 05:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ed's back!!! Woot!!!!! Quite the return from the dead! Man, and Havoc is really gonna have to fight for this one! Every time you're thinking "finally", something happens to him! I love the interaction between the Enterprise officers and Mustang, and the dressing down by Picard was very well written, he such a wonderful character, and you handle him with respect and dignity. This story is just so good! And the layers and layers of meaning and "story arc" are fabulous! Just keeping track of all the characters must require a compass and a PDA! You've done an excellent job though, attending to all the various characters, while at the same time- regularly returning the story to its main plot. It needs a masterful hand to manage it all, and you have just such a gift!
| Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2006 04:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man, about all I could think to say about that chapter was it was damn cool! Of course I also want to note that the excrutiatingly intense conversation between Faye and Spike was something I've been dying to read since you started this story! And, of course, the whole aspect of the chess game is beyond brilliant! It totally lifts this story out of the world of crossover and into the land of PURE GENIOUS!!!!
| Title: Back in the game
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2006 01:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
These regular updates really are a treat, as I'm sure I've mentioned before! And SWEET! I have a day off tomorrow, so I think it's time for another drawing! I think Havoc deserves some attention, he really is a hottie after all, and after the great scene between him and Faye, my mental pictures are bellowing to manifest themselves! So keep an eye out, you only get one warning! LOL!
| Title: Double The Pleasure!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2006 05:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yahoo! Another chapter!!!!! This deserves some more comments from our good friends from the cast: Faye: "Gah! Oh great, I'm finally back and the first thing you do is slice up my hand! That better not leave a scar!" Scar: "Is there a problem with scars? They are a guidepost to your past, you should wear them with pride." Riker: "A noble statement, but fortunately our medical staff is highly proficient at eliminating any traces of wounds." Jet: "Really? Do you think they can.... well... eliminate older scars... in more *cough* uh, sensitive areas?" Spike: "I told you we should have gone to a real doctor after that dog bit you in the..." Jet: "CAN IT!" Ed: "Geez, all of you quit yelling, I'm getting a headache! Besides, I have more right to complain than all of you, being stuck in the hospital wing is no picnic!" Al: "But Ed, you told me you thought the doctor was cute..." Winry: "He did, did he?" Ed: "AL!!!" Havok: "Does nobody care that I haven't gotten laid yet?"
| Title: Thank you!!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2006 21:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it! The Ship Creek note was very funny! I love that Faye is back, and I have a feeling the next chapter is gonna be a doozy!!! The way you've built up the tension and anticipation is fantastic, and I'm incredibly eager to see the next part!
| Title: NOOOOOO!!!!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2005 03:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor poor Havok!!!!! He definately needs a full body hug after that one!
| Title: Sweet!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2005 03:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah yes, and now we remember why we're all here! Q: "Not a bad piece of work, considering a human created it. I suppose it was inevitable I would show up- and I see you've shown my good side, though it was unfortunate you had to include that brutish Klingon primate as well." Worf: "grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr" Spike: "I get thrown in the brig? As if! Though I gotta admit, even their jail is more comfortable than the Bebop." Jet: "Excuse me, did I just hear you say something about my ship? Listen pal, you don't like it, you can sleep on the Swordfish!" Faye: "Hey, when do I get more screen time!" Ed: (ulp- don't think of her naked, don't think of her naked!) "Heh-hey, am I gona get my ass kicked in every chapter? Al has it easy, no transporters and he has a new girlfriend!" Al: "Ed! She's not my girlfriend!" Edward: "HAHAHAHA! BOYFRIEND BOYFRIEND ED HAS A BOYFRIEND!!" McKenna: "At least you aren't on trial." Sorry, no time to hear from the rest of you. Mustang: "But!" Scar: "So what." Armstrong: "Hmm.." Hawkeye: "Hear what?" Havok: "But I DO have a girlfiend!!!!!"
| Title: Hahaha!!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2005 05:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The chapter ending was brilliant!! I did not expect that in any way! And I love that- even though Spike lost it- he was STILL so much in character! His thoughts as he worked towards the eventual realization that Edward HAD to survive was beautifully written, and the interplay between him and Q was a joy to read! And take your time- I let weeks go by sometimes between updates! Hahaha! (Uuhh, I shouldn't have told ya that...)
| Title: *gasp*
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 00:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was the chapter of torment, no doubt about it! The way you write Al's anguish is heartbreaking! The deep sorrow he feels is only hightened by the fact that he is incapable of recieving real comfort. And the awesome contrast is Mustang, capable of emotion, but unwilling to express it. So, basically, you end up with a character who can't feel comfort, being comforted by someone who won't show his emotions! The only thing that could make it more ironic would be to throw Data into the mix! As it is, it was an incredibly poingiant scene, and beautifully portrayed! As to the other part I loved so much- the chess conversation at the beginning! I thought that was particularly clever, and an excellent addition to the already running drama! Oh, and thank you for not killing Ed..... yet! LOL
| Title: eep!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2005 23:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'd run, I think I saw a lynch mob forming outside. That really was fantastic though! You write fabulous cliffhangers! (I'll let you in on a secret- I actually like cliffhangers!) The action is wonderfully portrayed, and the emotions of all the characters are fabulous! The only part (pretty much in the entire story) that I wondered about was the part with Deanna Troi- right after she discovered McKenna sick in her quarters with Scar. After being informed that McKenna was gravely ill- she decides to go have lunch. Now, I know she isn't a doctor- but even so- she would often accompany people to sick bay- escpecially someone for whom the events they are experiencing is centered on. Also, though I know she more or less trusts Scar- I don't think Mustang does- but then, she's also an empath, and can probably sense if McKenna is as bad off as all that. Anyhow- it was a minor thing, and totally based on my intrpretation of the scene. So, with that tiny nonsense tucked away, I once more want to expound on the juicy goodness of your story as it burnes ever forward with fabulous interplay and drama! The next chapter, as ever, is eagerly awaited! I also look forward to hearing from some semi-absent cast members; Faye and Winrey!
| Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2005 14:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Once more, you've shown your exceptional skill with even a shorter chapter! The moments were not wasted, and the action was nail-biting in its intensity! I worried for Ed, even though I knew he would logically HAVE to survive if the timeline was to remain intact. As well;, I truly felt Al's concern and fear for his older brother as he was forced to remain apart from him. The Star Trek characters are also perfectly portrayed- and I love the friendships that have arisen so naturally! Jet and Riker are so much of a similar mind- and the odd play between Picard and Mustang is also fascinating to watch unfold. I also think it was great that you made mention of McKenna in this chapter as it reminds us of why we're all here. I definately need to reaquaint myself with her character though- as she has become so cold and distant (understandable considering her circumstances). Also, I still can't wait to see what Q has to do with this- and why he feels another trial is so important. The interplay (I also want to mention) between Al and Radical Edward is just too adorable! The oddness of the pairing makes a strange sort of sense simply because both characters are so peculiar! In all, you've kept it satisfying while maintaining interest in the story! The only other story that's done that for me lately is Harry Potter!
| Title: Wooooaaah!!!!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2005 00:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW OH WOW!!!!!!!!! This is so intense I'm gonna split in half!!! How can I comment when my mouth is hanging open and my hands are nearly shaking?? That was so incredibly good! I love the scenes with Spike and Ed, they are too perfect! The commentary between the two had me absolutely rolling with laughter! And I really felt the fear in Ed with the tightness of the space, I've had nightmares of being buried in a pipe underground, so I know where he's coming from! And the introduction of the red water, like I said before, was brilliant! I like how it just keeps building! When the climax finally comes it will probably cause the site to explode! LOL
| Title: Better Than Broomsticks!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2005 02:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
And I thought the highlight of my day was going to see Harry Potter! I was so wrong!! I am just so happy when you update, which means I'm happy almost every day! The introduction of the red water- brilliant! And your explaination of how Ed's alchemy would cause heat was also brilliant and insightful! This is definately a thinking person's fic, and you write it well! I'm curious to see how everything ties back into Q and his trial of McKenna- and I have absolute faith that it will come together wonderfully! Thanks for this latest update!!
| Title: Intrigue!
Reviewed By: dragonnan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 23:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your ability to write such an exciting mystery gets me!!! I love that! You keep me going, yet leave me desiring more with every update, that is a remarkable gift! I will never tire of reading this!!
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