| "The Sous-Chef" Reviews/Comments [ 151 ] |
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Reviewed By: LittleBear On: March 30, 2006 20:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've enjoyed this story so far. It is well written and different from many other WK fics I've read. But I have to say I was incredibly disappointed in this chapter. It started off well, very hot and steamy with the shower scene. But then you ended it so shallowly with Yohji and Schu saying they don't want Aya as part of them and it's only sex. I mean, that's completely at odds with the way you have had them acting towards Aya up to this point. And it's a bit cold in my opinion - it shows that the two of them don't really care about Aya at all, or rather care about him only for sex. I guess I should have expected it. You did say in an earlier chapter that the plan was to make this a Farf/Aya fic, a pairing that doesn't appeal to me at all. And while it's much appreciated that you decided to give something to the reviewers begging for a threesome between Schu/Yohji/Aya, in the end you've made it a hollow and, frankly, sad gift. I plan to continue reading this fic - as I said I believe it's very well written and entertaining (at least until the end of this chapter). But, I just felt I needed to express my extreme disappointment in what you did with this chapter.
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Reviewed By: Blythe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2006 22:13 CST
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I'm sorry if I gave you the impression that you're doing anything wrong. I'm quite certain that this is a reader issue, not a writer one. I don't understand things because I am relationship retarded. Pay no attention to the Bly behind the curtain. Chapter 13 was, again, a little heart-wrenching, but lovely. An excellently excecuted lemon. It'll be interesting to see how things go with the re-introduction of Aya's imouto. I'm looking forward to more, as always.
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Reviewed By: glinwulf On: March 29, 2006 19:44 CST
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I shall never look at another dead fish again without bursting into hysterical laughter.
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Reviewed By: bewsbud [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2006 17:29 CST
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Hm, was Troutie cooperative in his cameo, or did he try to smack your muses into bending to his will? *g* No doubt about it, this chapter was hot. However, you also managed to use it to bring a lot of emotional issues to the front. Well done!
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Title: Chapter 13
Reviewed By: Omni-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2006 13:46 CST
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Did I like this chapter? Did I? You really have to ask? Holy shit. I like the way Aya thinks. You should let him spring things on your more often. Yes.
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Reviewed By: darkephoenix nsi On: March 29, 2006 11:15 CST
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Gotta love shower smut. The fish fight with Farf was hysterical. Awesome as always.
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Title: ^^cool
Reviewed By: Vana On: March 26, 2006 16:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ya know, I'm tempted to stop reading this fic because for the last few chapters where Farfarello and Aya have been talking about all the food... the names are enough to keep my mouth watering. I'm afraid that my drool is going to spazz out my keyboard and harddrive. ^^ I like how everything is turning out in this story. It's very awesome, delicious (in more ways than one ^^-) and... damn, I'm hungry. Can't wait to read your next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Yotan On: March 25, 2006 14:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, holy god. That...was just about the -best- bit of fanfiction I've read in a -long- time. *applaudes* Your descriptions were just amazing and the character development is just...augh, I'm STILL blown away! You just did an -excellent- job. ^-^ Thanks you sooo much for such an awesome fic.
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Reviewed By: eva84 On: March 22, 2006 05:34 CST
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Aya/Ran in the Kitchen scene was just what (and as) was hoping for. I loved all the details, they made it very vivid.
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Reviewed By: Misty of the Dark On: March 20, 2006 22:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
All I can say I Beautiful. This fic Is Beautifully writtin and it is so fresh and new. I just love farfarello in this one. He is unlike how I have ever read Him Before And Aya/Ran well i love him at all times and He's depressed in alot of fics but you managed to add and air to it that makes it unique well i will stop rambling and let you get back to writing I hope to read more soon. this is one of the best fics I've read since "GLASS HOUSES" keep up the good work. Misty GO FARFARELLO AND AYA YESSSSSS
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Reviewed By: Blythe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2006 19:34 CST
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Another excellent chapter. Nice little cliff-hanger at the end. Looking forward to more, as always! Also, I didn't mean to say that I don't understand all of the characters, only that some of the reactions seem incongruent, but that may be intentional and come to be explained later. Nevertheless, it won't stop me reading!
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Reviewed By: mm-chan On: March 18, 2006 09:18 CST
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back and better than ever! (but no yohji you meanie :P)....it's a good thing i love your work...ahem i mean you :)
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Reviewed By: KD nsi On: March 18, 2006 00:15 CST
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wow. /loved/ your description of Aya's appreciation of the music. Not that the rest of it wasn't good, but--wow. You're terrific, RQ.
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Reviewed By: Omni-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2006 21:57 CST
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Hah, no I can't take the credit for ot3. A friend of mine once used the term. I loved it and adopted it as well. And no, like I said, Farf in this fic doesn't squick me. Which is...surprising. So, yeah, I'm torn with this fic. I want him to have an incredibly hot threesome with Yohji and Schu, and I also think he and Farf would make a nice couple (I never thought I'd say that...). As for Shadows/Light, no, I've not heard of it... But I shall most certainly look into it now! Anyway, you're doing a fantabulous job.
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Reviewed By: darkephoenix nsi On: March 17, 2006 10:20 CST
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Well, wasn't that just a blast. I like Farf showing off his intelligence in subtle ways. I also like him referring to the kitchen as a pirate ship, which is oddly appropriate. Excellent, as always.
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