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| "Love Potion # Kyuu" Reviews/Comments [ 29 ] | Title: Perfect
Reviewed By: InuKaglover69 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2024 21:07 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gosh, I just love this story so much. I've read it multiple times
now, and I just know I'll read it again in the future. SO GOOD!!!
| Reviewed By: Reader in Disguise On: September 28, 2011 09:13 PDT
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As mentioned before, it really is a pleasure to re-read your stories! Everything about this one was the perfect faerie tale! Thank you again for writing and sharing! | Reviewed By: Sesshoumaru'sPriestess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2011 20:05 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY!!! That was lovely and I will add it to my favs list. Very sweet and enjoyable. | Reviewed By: mystmoon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2011 18:07 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one of my favorite Inu stories. I'm glad to see you update/repost it. | Reviewed By: ananova [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2011 04:22 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you so much for updating this. You definitely brought it up to your current excellent standards. I liked all of the changes and added details, especially the mating mark and soul bond. Other than a few minor typos the only thing I found to be a downside was that some of the paragraphs were really long. (Though I can't really complain about that as I know I've been guilty of that in the past.) But overall I loved the story. Are you going to be doing this to your other older stories as well? If so, I can't wait to reread them. | Reviewed By: King Baka [MediaMiner Member] On: March 08, 2011 12:23 PST
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I liked the original story, but this is a definite improvement. And what, pray tell, does ‘come fuck me’ odor smell like? And where can I get some? (Though if you listen to Axe body spray, they’ve already patented it) That whole scene was awesome; you really brought out the humor of the situation. And yet, we still get reason to worry toward the end of the chapter. Poor, poor, honorable Inuyasha. No red-blooded male could reasonably be expected to resist that. I give him major kudos for lasting as long as he did. Interesting take on mating rituals; it makes sense that there’d be gender inequality built into the system. Of course, Inuyasha doesn’t buy into that garbage. Chapter 3 was so touching; you took your time and really drew out the emotion. I liked how they took the time to sit and tell each other about their pasts. It seems like a smart thing to do, especially if Inuyasha is as old as people seem to think. Kikyou comes off a little too evil for my tastes, but I recognize that you just wanted to keep the original character of the story. Early in the series, she could probably sink to something close to this level. And…I think I agree with youkaineko. In the future, could you try to break down your huge paragraphs a little more? When so many lines get bunched together like that, I sometimes have a hard time finding the next one. Note – review notifications aren’t working for me either. I saw your review for SoC (and a bunch of other new ones on several stories) the other day. I tried de-favoriting you and then adding you, and also clicking “update profile” to reset things. We’ll see if that works. I’ll have to remember to check out the other stories you updated while I wasn’t looking. :) | Reviewed By: youkaineko [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2011 14:57 PST
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I never know when an author decides to update if they actually changed anything other then spelling, grammar, etc, or if they actually did an overhaul of the story. It can be frustrating to discover that the changes are so slight it wasn't worth the notification. However in this case, I am very glad that MM let me know you had updated. I am also very pleased that you put an authors note explaining that you did major changes. I liked the modified drunk scene, it definitely made it more of a mutual thing although I kinda liked that in the previous version they never made it further than the road outside Kaede's hut. I very much liked how you changed the mating marks, and the better understand that they had of each other that prevented the previous version misunderstanding when she went into heat. Although again I liked that previous misunderstanding. I guess what I would have really liked to have seen is that with so many changed it would have been nice for it to be posted as its own story while leaving up the old version as well. The one major drawback I see with this newest version is that in many of the sections were the biggest overhaul had occurred the reader is hit with a wall of text. Many of your paragraphs could have benefited from hitting the carriage return a few times. Other than that I have always liked this story and this version is also wonderful. | Reviewed By: RubyJewel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2011 18:11 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love this original story. Glad to see that you've brought it up again. (; | Reviewed By: LadyCash, not logged in On: March 06, 2011 12:21 PST
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Love this, all your work leaves me with a smile. Thanks so much for bringing this one up again! | Reviewed By: ananova [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2010 07:14 PDT
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I liked this story. It is definitely original. It is easy to see that it is one of your earlier works as it is not up to same level as your other stories, but I still enjoyed reading it.
| Reviewed By: inuyashaxkagomeforever [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2007 19:37 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! i luv this story! *shakes head* mirkou mirkou even thought ur tea didnt work it made inuyasha and kagome finally does something! gr8 story! i luv it its akward, funny, romance, hentai, and action all in 1! gr8 work! =^.^= ^^
| Title: "Thumbs Up"
Reviewed By: ObsessedInuyashaFan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2007 23:32 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
your story was well written and kept me on my toes. although the basic "whats gonna happen" was shown early on in the story, there were still alot of unexpected happenings. and overall, i really enjoyed it. i have read a few of your other works as well in the past such as: divine intervention, message in a bottle, watching her sleep, basic instinct, the tempest, the diary, blindness makes the heart grow fonder, fallen, submission, and mating season. let me say, that you havent lost your touch what-so-ever over all this time. and i hope to catch another new one of yours soon. your fan, rachel
| Reviewed By: InusGurl4 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2007 01:14 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!!!! Awesome job with the plot, I honestly don't think I could have made one half as good as that if I tried. :D Ending was kinda bittersweet, but you managed to end it with a laugh...just...argh its so GOOD!!! (ego boost much? ;) :P)
| Reviewed By: xlawwendy [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2006 03:42 PST
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nice job it was funny to
| Reviewed By: appelcline [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2006 21:28 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the second time I've read this fic, and I've enjoyed it both times. I particularly like the initial premise of the love potion, though you cleared up the resulting misunderstandings more quickly than I would have. But, then, I tend to like to torture the characters before they get to exchange their "I love you"s. Hee. Oh, and one other thing: the paragraph about the battle with Naraku is *incredibly* long and would have read better if it were divided up into a few separate paragraphs. Other than those picky details (and quite a few spelling errors), though, I really like the story. I liked IY's response to Kagome's heat -- and the resulting misunderstandings (can you tell I like misunderstandings?) -- particularly much. But my favorite is still the first couple of chapters. Excellent work.
| Reviewed By: paju_13 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2006 20:45 PDT
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LOVED the story! Really good and enjoyable to read!!
| Reviewed By: DragongirlCV [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2006 17:19 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was amazingly done!! very well written.
| Reviewed By: Ayame/Paradise On: June 30, 2006 10:50 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woops! Sorry. I meant to say enjoyment factor 10 out of 10. My bad. Once again great job. I loved the way you helped me understand more about the anime. For ex. Why Kikyo gave Naraku the shards. I only understood to an extent. Thankx!
| Reviewed By: Ayame/Paradise On: June 30, 2006 10:46 PDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! I loved this story! You did a great job! ^^
| Reviewed By: silverwolf halfbeast [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2006 00:06 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a good story funny, loving, lemone,and everything eles. And I liked the work that you put into it.
| Reviewed By: InuyashasBiggestFan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2006 06:02 PDT
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i love it!!!!!!!!!!! it was so awsome!!! ESPECIALLY how Kagome was all drunk and seduced Inuyasha.^_^ The story is really good and I hope you come up with some more stories.
| Reviewed By: dudekiller [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2006 05:19 PDT
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i liked this story. good job.
| Title: Very Nice
Reviewed By: Azelle [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2006 00:06 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a rather original story that had me smiling at almost every turn. Really, it's hard to find quality Inuyasha fan fiction since it's such a huge fandom with so many young writers who contribute to the plotless porn, out of character, and - for the most part - terribly written stories. But every once in a while you stumble upon either a gem of a story or an author who regularly publishes plausible, interesting works. Once a notion like youkai mating marks/rituals and other frequently used plot devices come into play, it can feel like your reading variations of the same story, but thankfully, you managed to escape that fate even when using a common "mating practice." You really put your own mark on it, so to speak, and I enjoyed it despite my own thoughts about the subject, so kudos to you! Anyway, I think you fall into the latter category (gem), since what I've read of your work is incredibly entertaining with fresh situations, but I have to agree with Hazelwitch and say that it could be so much better if it was just polished up a bit so that it shines that much brighter. The verb tense changes, easily spotted spelling errors, grammar, syntax, and other things do tend to distract the reader, not to the point of incomprehensibility, but it does scream "un-betaed." I'm not trying to be harsh, since I really have enjoyed your stories thus far - this one in particular -, but a little editing would push them from being good stories into great stories. :D If you'd like, I'd be willing to edit/proof/beta your past/future works for the Inuyasha fandom. That's not saying I'm perfect or necessarily the most wonderful beta who'd catch every single little error (we're all human, and that's why most authors use at least two betas), but I'd love to help out if it was wanted. Again, I hope that didn't come across as anything more than constructive criticism, but, again, like Hazelwitch said, I think that with your talent, you deserve an honest review. Sorry for being so long-winded! This review would look so much cleaner if MM allowed separate paragraph spacing in reviews, but alas... :D Again, good job!
| Title: Now then...
Reviewed By: Hazelwitch [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2006 13:18 PST
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I've spent the last day or so reading all of your stories, and I like them all. You have a good grasp of the InuYasha universe, you write good Kagome and InuYasha, your lemons are pretty hot and you throw in some amusing details and unexpected plotlines. Your fics are fun and creative. However, you seriously need a beta. You've got some major spelling and grammar issues that detract from the overall readability of your stories. I know you probably do this for fun, and because you love InuYasha and love to write, and that's wonderful! But your fics could be easily lifted up several degrees by some correction and editing. I wouldn't have even bothered to leave this post if I didn't feel that you deserve to have everyone appreciate your work at its highest possible quality. Keep writing - you have the talent, now you need the discipline! Good luck with all that you do.
| Reviewed By: Charmander [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2006 08:29 PST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked the story. It fits the characters so well. I could really see Kagome confusing Miroku's motives and thinking the drug was a date rape drug. and you can see the how close to charactor all of them seem. good job! I hope you get more reviews for this story because its good.
| Reviewed By: Anime Lady PIMP [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2006 06:16 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it!
| Title: excellent
Reviewed By: angeluswilliam [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2006 06:42 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thoughly enjoyed this fic you are one of my favorite writers.
| Reviewed By: Kitsune_Magic_1 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 14:51 PST
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I just saw that i was the FIRST one to review this story!!! Awesome! I feel so special! ^-^
| Reviewed By: Kitsune_Magic_1 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 14:49 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. I never thought a story like this would come up. the beginning was very interesting. I LOVED it.
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