| "the thief, lord and priestess" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Title: The Thief, lord
Reviewed By: kagome-Iam [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2006 01:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story and was almost going to write one alongo the same lines but it was going to be both sess and inuyasha (both of them mating kagome). I do wish you would go into the detail a bit more. and the spacing kinda drives me crazy but I want MORE!
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Title: the theif,lord,priestess
Reviewed By: princess of the western lands [MediaMiner Member] On: March 08, 2006 12:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
so now the tables have turned on our sexy as hell and hotter them hell demon lovers. hmmm i can\'t wait to see what kind of torture kagome has in store for our kurama and sesshomaru. hmmm i wonder if kagome will torture them by arousing them beyond controll like they did to her or if she will pleasure herself in front of them showing kurama and sesshomaru that she didn\'t need them to give her pleasure and that she can do that herself or either to pleasure herself and let them see her in her hight of passion but unable to join her or pleasure her letting there mate be setaited another way and they will both be aroused by kagome\'s display ne? maybe kagome could relight the red and purple candels and have sesshomaru and kurama in a very aroused and sleepy state and kagome could take shippou and rin and return back to the well and they could go to kagome\'s era but just before kagome goes down the well kurama and sesshomaru show up and she yells for rin to follow shippou down and that she will be there in a moment. rin agrees and goes down the well and now she has to deal with two very angry and very very aroused demon mates. there eyes are blood red and both are growling loadly at kagome. sesshomaru speaks\"why did you run away mate?\" \"yes kagome why did you run?\" kagome struggles trying to get out of there steele like grips but unable\"kagome i won\'t ask you again why did you run away from us?\" \"i wanted to go home and i wanted to leave and get back at you for doing what you did to me\" sesshomaru and kurama push kagome to the ground and say\"no you will not leave us\"\"you will never run away again\" there eyes blood red and angry.they strip kagome of her clothes and push her pack aside and begin there ministrations on her body as kagome struggles in there grasp but in vain. kurama starts at her nether lips and bigins to taste her esence,while sesshomaru slows pumps two fingers into her puckerd anus,slwoly bringing her to the peak and then they quicken there pace bringing kagome to her peak but just before the releases they stop,kagome wimpers in frustration as they continue to denigh her release. \"please\"kagome begs,begging for sesshomaru and kurama to stop punishing her.\"no mat you tried to leave us and for that you will be suvearly punished\"kagome\'s eyes widen and she wimpers and begs for them to let her release\"no mate\"and they continue to make her peak but denigh her release.finally kagome collapses from exaustion and falls into a fitfull sleep still aroused. the next morning,kagome awakens in the middle of her mates but they are still alseep so kagome queitly lights a purple candel making them sleep,she gets up and bathes and since she is still very aroused finds her release,now feeling much better heads back to camp and sees that the candel is already half way gone so kagome quickly grabs her pack and kisses her mates good bye for she will never return to sengoku jiidai agian and jumps through the well. three hours later kurama and sesshomaru wake from there sleep kurama seeing kagome\'s abscence wakes sesshomaru and become enraged that there mate would leave them again. they search for and find that her scent ends at the well both angry for letting kagome slip away from them jump through the well but land at the bottom seeing only bones and sand. both still in a rage kurama says\"kagome said that she came from 500 years into the future right?\"\"yes she did\"\"we will wait and take back out mate when the time comes and when the time is right ne?\"\"hmm we will take kagome by surprise and take her back\"\"yes soon we will have our mate back in our arms and in our bed\"\"sesshomaru,what if kagome should tkae another mate or a human mate?\"\"i don\'t know about a demon because our mark will ward them off but a human it will not and she could take a human mate if she choose to\"\"i will despose of the human or demon if they dare touch our mate\"\"i agree\"\"soon aite soon\" kurama and sesshomaru wait for that |
Title: Wonderful!
Reviewed By: pyrokitten68 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2006 15:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! this is such a great story! Despite some spelling error..(sorry just being honest!) This is the best threesome fic I have ever read! Are they ever going to stop 'punishing' Kagome :) I hope that you continue writing...I would love to see how things turn out and what Sesshomaru and Karama do about Inuyasha when Kagome has to go back to the group...(if she goes back)
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Reviewed By: little mouse1 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 16:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update
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Title: The Theif, Lord, And Priestess
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2006 13:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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