| "Flight of Innocence" Reviews/Comments [ 39 ] |
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Reviewed By: Lacquestar On: April 13, 2002 16:07 CDT
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Very well done, not as sour and tasteless as other lemons usually are. It was sweet too, and I am glad they got together, FINALLY. And you did write it so well, might sound a little perverted, but I could literally picture the scene in my mind, so vivid was the imagery and detail you used.
Ahh, you must write more. |
Reviewed By: IceJin On: April 12, 2002 14:11 CDT
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Excellent Lemon...still some spelling errors, but you seem to know what you're saying so I'll let them slide. :) |
Reviewed By: Lacquestar On: April 06, 2002 12:11 CST
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Oh that was sad. A pretty good reason for why Furiiza is so screwed up, don't you think? Good job as always. I am looking forward to the next chapter, so hurry up! |
Reviewed By: Frieza Fan On: April 01, 2002 19:27 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was so sad
I hope things work out for them
I like the part about the mating flight, but I thought (and i might be wrong because i haven't read any of the Pern stories in a while) that when a dragon was mating its rider was too.
Continue, continue
Cant wait for next chapter |
Reviewed By: Anime 88 On: March 27, 2002 16:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Write more! Write more! and work on spelling |
Reviewed By: Lacquestar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2002 16:25 CST
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I like where this is going, seems like it is going to be an epic in the making. I like how you give every character so much depth (I tried and couldn't do it in my story),such as even though the main focus in on Suicuine and Furiiza you also give time to Kold, Koola and Susuika. I also like the hints of history and legends you have provided, it really makes me want to read this story just so I can see what is going to happen.
As a side note, sorry such a terrible thing has happened to you. Sadly enough, we all go through our share of bad times and senseless trauma, and whoever said that time heals all wounds is full of bullshit. When you lose someone close to you it will always hurt =( But I am glad you are not stopping the story. Writing is a good way to deal with sadness, and healing, and is a much better way to deal with problems than the alternatives. I do hope you feel better. |
Reviewed By: The White Namek [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2002 10:13 CST
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Fascinating story, I must say. You do seem to have a problem with mis-spelling, however. Do you use spell-check?
Regardless, I really like the interaction between Freeza and Suicune. I hope they really get serious together. There just aren't enough Freeza romances out there. |
Reviewed By: michelle aka arianah On: March 21, 2002 20:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey heather whats a "fash back"?? ^_^ MMMAAAAAAAWAWWWAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!! good job and all that crap see yah in english were you will say a bunch of ums and likes during your book report of all the weyrs of pern *starts mocking her* and like the people like took um along time to um find the little tools to upen up the um like the thread eggs and like they needed to like carry these big like machines .......^^ |
Reviewed By: Anime 88 On: March 21, 2002 20:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Greta fid! I usually hate Frieza fics, but I love this one. Please update soon! Oh, and work on your spelling. |
Reviewed By: piccolos1girl On: March 15, 2002 08:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
bad spelling but the rest good. |
Reviewed By: ********** On: March 14, 2002 19:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's a great fanfic!! |
Reviewed By: Cowgirl_6_26_87 On: March 13, 2002 19:47 CST
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I don't usually read the Frieza stories, but this one takes the cake! But, I hate cliffhangers, so hurry up and continue the story. Oh, and work on your spelling and grammar a little bit. |
Reviewed By: Lacquestar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2002 11:32 CST
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In my opinion, your story keeps on getting better, as well as the writing style. I think you had the emotion perfect for that chapter and as usual your cliffhangers made me want to read the nonexistent next chapter.
p.s. i wouldn't have really hurt Furiiza. I like the little bastard too much ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Michelle On: March 07, 2002 20:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey "**freizas girl**" otherwise known as heather i finally got to read the famous "Seicune" epics you have been drawing those great pics of durning algebra > (so thats why i have better grade than you!!) to all the others out there who read heather's work > i know whats gonna happen mmmmawwwwwwwwwwaaaaaaahhhhhhaaaaaa!!!!!! > i except bribes. any way i luv your fic and you readers are gonna luv whats gonna happen next. HEATHER HAD BETTER FINISH THIS OR SHES GONNA DIE A VERY PAINFUL DEATH.hmmmm.......... what else will i do while freizas girl sits in english class trying (unsucessfully) to accually learn how to spell, > MY HOMEWORK?!?!?!?!?!?!?! |
Reviewed By: Lacquestar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2002 00:18 CST
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Your writing style justs gets better with every chapter, in my own opinion, as does the storyline. Well I'm going to tell you again that I love this story, but I think you already know that ^_^ So please put out the next chapter soon, cause I want to know how the hell something (someone) could beat up Koola! I also love the romance aspects of this story, but you also already knew that*_* The scene with Frieza cuddling with Suicuine, that was just adorable.
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