| "Kyo" Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] |
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Title: u still alive?
Reviewed By: Inu_inu_luvluv [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2006 09:34 CST
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uh...update...please? you have to!!
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Reviewed By: freakyducky [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2006 09:57 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg this is so good .. kyo is so cute .. can't wait till u update on this ..
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Title: GinaCat
Reviewed By: GinaCat [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2006 19:34 CST
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I love this story it is so cute I can't wait till you update
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Title: u gotta write more!
Reviewed By: Inu_inu_luvluv [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2006 16:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you've got a really cute story here and i totally love it^^, you are a good writer too (I'm sorry for the nine, but you're being compared to a few reeeeally good ones, so it's very good with a nine and stuff^^=) The personality of Kyo is very cute. PLEASE WRITE MORE !! and regularily! I miss this story a lot at times, and... I don't know... I LOVE IT!!
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Title: EEEEEEEEEE
Reviewed By: ADarkNightsObsession [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2006 20:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update! I loce your story! I NEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEED MOOOOOOOOORE! Please? I love you forever? I'll give you chocolates?
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2006 16:08 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update ASAP!!! GREAT STORY!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Calera [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2006 11:25 CST
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i really like this fic. i just wish you would write longer chapters. The chapters over before you know it =(
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Reviewed By: mm-reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2006 10:25 CST
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I gave up and sent the rest of my review in an email.
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Reviewed By: mm-reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2006 10:23 CST
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(Continued again since I can't get MediaMiner to work right and I apologize for these repeated attempts) Sure, the reviews that say, "i
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Reviewed By: mm-reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2006 10:21 CST
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(Continued again since I can't get MediaMiner to work right) (Continued) Sure, the reviews that say, "i
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Reviewed By: mm-reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2006 10:20 CST
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(Continued) Sure, the reviews that say, "i
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Reviewed By: mm-reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2006 10:13 CST
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Your story is interesting but you have serious grammar issues. Two people should never speak in the same paragraph. You are not writing dialogue correctly. This is not a flame. I think your story is good, but you need to get help with your paragraph structure. A new paragraph should be started when a different person speaks, when a new action occurs, when a different person thinks about the current situation or the point of view changes, when the setting changes or time passes, or when one person reacts to what another person says. Pick up a paperback novel and study how the paragraphs are structured. Or go to a good fanfic writer's story and see how the paragraphs are structured. Here is a story with good paragraph structure: http://www.mediaminer.org/fanfic/view_st.php/54993 (although it is not necessary to indent the first sentence in each paragraph as long as a blank line is between them). Blank lines between paragraphs actually help the reader follow the sentences better on a computer screen. Keep the paragraphs fairly short, no more than five to ten lines long and it will make it easier for the reader to read your story. Again, this is not a flame. I hope this information helps you. More people will read and review your story if you use correct grammar and paragraph structure. Sure, the reviews that say, "i
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Reviewed By: kagomerocks241 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2006 21:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you have to update this story I want ot know what inuyasha will say about kyo
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Reviewed By: angel_of_hope [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2006 17:10 CST
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It ws good, but chapters need to be a little longer.
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Title: Great Story
Reviewed By: Woobaby [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2006 10:05 CST
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This is sooo good. I can't wait to read more. Little Kyo is cute and I love the way Kagome takes care of people.
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