| "Once Upon a Time" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Cricket42 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2006 01:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it write a squel plz~Cricket42
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Reviewed By: Cricket42 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2006 18:21 CST
Comment/Review:
love it love it love it love it:D~Cricket42
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Reviewed By: Cricket42 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2006 21:33 CST
Comment/Review:
wonderful wonderful just wonderful. keep writing or i will have to lock you up and make you finish the story .jk. i love the story and if you do stop writing i'll go crazy :D~Cricket42
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Reviewed By: ladygeri [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2006 14:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one DYNAMITE story. I can't wait for the other chapters
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Reviewed By: Angelica_Pierce [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2006 07:43 CST
Comment/Review:
You seem to have a good plotline developing here. I'm rather enjoying trying to guess where the fic might be headed. You've also set up some nice tension between the characters and also laid a foundation for their respective problems and insecurities. Your writing style is good and keeps the reader interested. The major thing I think you could work on is less recap of the basic canon. Chances are that those of us reading the fic are familiar with the IY series. Thus, you don't *need* to explain to your audience all about how Kirara has two forms, the Sango is a demon slayer, Miroku is a perverted monk, etc... Some recap is fine, especially when dealing with the later episodes that people may not have seen. But most people reading will know that Sesshoumaru is Inuyasha's brother and what their relationship (or lack thereof) is like. Another small piece of advice would be that you modify your summary of the fic - I think more people would be reading it if it didn't mention your original characters right off. Focus on the turmoil between the group and the showdown with Naraku draws near. I almost skipped the fic, but I was curious about the 'resolution' for Kikyou and Naraku. Maybe add to that list Kohaku, and advertise the pairings you intend to write for? It may help you draw some more attention. I certainly do hope you post more soon. Take care and good luck!
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