| "To Shed a Little Light" Reviews/Comments [ 141 ] |
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Reviewed By: White Luna(offline) On: March 27, 2006 14:38 EST
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I'm SO FUCKING EXCITED YOU DECIDED TO CONTINUE THIS STORY!! I'm so fucking HAPPY! Whoo hoo!! *does happy dance* Update soon, beautiful, I'm so freaking thrilled I've got the tingles.
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Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2006 01:45 EST
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If Sesshomaru had said anything Im sure she would have realized just who her secret lover was. ;) Love the story ^-^ PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!
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Title: Chapter 2
Reviewed By: thyme_cat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2006 16:37 EST
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Yay! Chapter 2! Is good. Looking forward to Chapter 3 ^_^
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Reviewed By: docbevculver [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2006 00:39 EST
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Wow... I like the direction this is starting to take. Excellent chapter, can't wait to see more. Bravo!
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Title: Chapter 1
Reviewed By: thyme_cat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2006 09:12 EST
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Yay, this was great! Something to look at: you said "Stomping over to her backpack, she pulled out her history book and crawled into her sleeping bag" but then said, "Nothing was more of a turn-off than quadratic equations." Is her book a history of math? ^_^ Another thing: "The headman of village" you might want to add a "the" or switch the word order. And another thing: "and then turning her head to pressing his lips with a needy kiss." Maybe I'm uneducated, but this seems awkward. "Fangs scraped against the arch her of throat" um, "of her"? "push her into to the upper stratosphere" you don't need the "to"? I only made these suggestions because I think this story is worth it. There are so many ways to go with this! Why can"t Inuyasha smell Sesshoumaru? Or can he but is in denial? Will Inuyasha start thinking that Kagome dreams of him? Will her sexually stimulated smell get to him and ignite passion within the hanyou? Keeping Sesshoumaru's thoughts and feeling mostly unknown is great, he can be really hard to write though you were doing just that wonderfully in "The Journey to the City of Endless Nights" (are you going to write more on that?). Did Sesshoumaru revive Rin as he did just after losing his arm in the series? Not that it is important for this story, just wondering. What is Sesshoumaru going to do if Inuyasha never lets Kagome out of his sight? Are they going to meet Shippo and the others in this story? Has Sesshoumaru given up on getting the Tetsusaiga? I would think he would still want it until he realizes that Inuyasha needs it, which took a while in the series. Heh, I'm rambling on as if you're going to write this long story when I'm just happy for the stuff you have already. Ah, smut. I look forward to more!
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Reviewed By: ashimi On: March 19, 2006 16:00 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was better than the last one!!!!!!!!!!!!!! u kept me guessing the whole time about what was going to happen next! that was awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: coldTenshieyes [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2006 22:15 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!! I loooooooooooooooooooove it you don't understand!! Oh Kami, I love this 'fanfiction' or one-shot or whatever, it's great! You should continue it! L8RZ! (^O ^)/~
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Reviewed By: mspotts (not logged in) On: March 18, 2006 09:23 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you gotta review soon, all your fics are soo good! i loved darkness and this one looks really promising!
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Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2006 19:31 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved Darkness & I cant wait to read more on this one. One of the most original Sess/Kag pairings Ive read!!! I L-O-V-E IT!!! Whats gonna happen when Kagome has to go back to her era though. Surely Sesshomaru would notice if she just vanished. LOVE IT PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!
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Title: To Shed A Little Light
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2006 20:36 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
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Title: WOW
Reviewed By: Too lazy to sign in On: March 13, 2006 16:55 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A very unique Ses/Kag pairing. There are so many out there but you managed to do something original and VERY entertaining (at least for a hetia minded person like me.) If you really want plot ideas, I'll be more than happy to supply potential ones if it keeps you going! Your talented and I'd love to see more. Good luck and have fun. brower47
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Reviewed By: dk1022 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2006 13:29 EST
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Wow!!!! Deliciously sexy and mysterious! Darkness and the continuation are my most favorite fanfics ever. I can't wait to read more.
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Reviewed By: shadowwolf_02 (nsi) On: March 13, 2006 11:15 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Nice work! Very nice way to continue on with this. I'll be sitting around impatiently waiting for the next update, lol. :)
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Reviewed By: Amoraluv [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2006 23:36 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is to hot, WANT MORE!!!!!
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Reviewed By: docbevculver [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2006 22:57 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, I enjoyed "Darkness" and I loved this one just as much. I hope that you can continue with this story line. I would love to read more!!! Excellent!
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