| "Blood Runs Thicker Than Water" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: tenshi of hikari -- not logged in On: August 26, 2006 09:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
oooh! That was really good! ^_^ I want more!
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Reviewed By: devilsincarnate [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2006 11:25 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gets down on knees* Pleasee update I really like this story
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Reviewed By: tenshi of hikari - not logged in On: April 18, 2006 07:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
I get that way a lot too. ya know where ideas just pour out random. That's why most my stories are late, (they are all on ff.net) cuz sometimes my ideas go with diff stories or other fanfics sometimes they go with mine, but oh well. even if this was a "forced" chapter by you, it was still good and that makes you an awesome writer.
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Reviewed By: HER - Not Logged In On: March 20, 2006 18:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
damn tht was cool! lol ^^, sry not a very creative comment, o well, i liked it & tht's all i have 2 say rite now *wink* ;)
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Reviewed By: Neko Of The Dark [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2006 13:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my gosh!!!!! That was so amazing!!!!! I love it!! Keep up the work!! ^ ^ Kioko.
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Reviewed By: TheThiefKuronue [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2006 11:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*whistles* Great job! There is a definite difference in your writing and it's superb! It's good to know that you are thinking about the characters thoughts and feelings at every given time. That's what makes a writer. I especially enjoyed Tohma's philosophy about taboo. That really blew my mind! You're doing a great job! Keep going at it. -- Thief P.s Constructive critisim of the chapter: (Note:Some writers don't like this so it will be fine if you don't. Just tell me so and I won't do it any more! ^_~) When writing a paragraph avoid using the same word in two back-to-back sentences. Even if it there is only one word for it, make up a description. Example: ...blahblah lamp. I need to grab that electrical device. Okay, hehe that was a bad example. Here's another one then: I've been tired for so long all I want to do is sleep. He closed his eyes and went to sleep. It's awkward, so you can play with it. He closed his eyes and let the darkness consume him, he closed his eyes and instantly lost consciousness, he closed his eyes and faded out of coherent thought, etc. P.S.S You've done a marvelous job! I normally don't read on mediaminer, so this is a definate exception!
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Reviewed By: TheThiefKuronue [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2006 03:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is amazing! The reactions from Suguru from situation to situation were very plausable. I love how you've incorporated his mind and how it's always thinking about consquences and the future. Tohma was superb too. That questionable feeling of his true personality is definatly there. Since so many fans cannot determine if he is good or bad, seeing as how he is so complex, they often get his character wrong, but I think you've portayed him nicely. Great job! Keep it up! -- Thief P.S For future refrence Suguru's last name is spelt Fujisaki. ^__~ Just thought you might wanna know.
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