| "Ranma's Hour of Darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 32 ] |
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Reviewed By: Formus On: March 26, 2006 18:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good stuff, but reminds me a bit of an old Ranma 1/2 lemon with a succubus or two in it. Maybe it was Lemonade Punch? I can't remember... Anyway, good work, first lemon I could be bnothered to read in quite a while. Keep the story coming however, don't get lost in thise little flings on the side.
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Title: AWaC
Reviewed By: Waruiko On: March 26, 2006 00:48 CST
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I won't go into much depth, as there isn't much to go into when most of the chapter is smut, but I like how Cindy didn't guess the value of Ranma's first time properly. The way you originaly had that set up kinda rubed me the wrong way, but this is better. Also if Ranma never has sex in his girl form with anyone, including Cindy, then Cindy will allways have a "virgin" form to take since she seems to enjoy the fealing so much.
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Reviewed By: dogbertcarroll [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2006 21:26 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Much better. Strange and perverted in a good way.
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Reviewed By: Howard Russell On: March 24, 2006 11:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa, that's so much hotter than the first one. And much, much more in character for Ranma. If Ranma's girl-side's virginity was a surprise to Cindy, was his guy-side's? Is his virginity still valuable to her?
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Reviewed By: JohnnyG [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2006 20:50 CST
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Very nice job so far. It looks like this will be a lot of fun. Keep up the good work. Best, ~JohnnyG
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Reviewed By: badgerwolf On: March 19, 2006 13:55 CST
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what happened to your other chapters? this is a good fic, i hope you aren't taking it down...
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Title: AWaC
Reviewed By: Waruiko On: March 19, 2006 02:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL! Nice job! The crouption of Kasumi is bound to be good if it happens. I do wonder if weding your lord removes debt on grounds that you can't owe your spouch anything of material value.
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Reviewed By: Cyclonus On: March 18, 2006 04:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your story is really good. Keep it up and please pair ranma with anyone except the fiancee squad. I think that theme is already overused ... no matter how most writers try to vary their style.
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Title: AWaC
Reviewed By: Waruiko On: March 18, 2006 02:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have improved in such a short time. I also like the way you are pumping out these chapters. While I might wish for something longer I, like most people, thank you for updateing regularly. Knowing that there will be more every day is something small, but plesent, to look forward to.
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Title: Great
Reviewed By: Rowinr [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2006 22:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the story is great so far i cant wait to see where you are going with it i just hope you dont make him end up with akane it appears your hooking him up with cindy which i think is great i never really like his fiancees they always treated him badly.
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Reviewed By: mimizukujin [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2006 22:23 CST
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Title: Formatting
Reviewed By: mimizukujin [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2006 22:22 CST
Comment/Review:
Unfortunately, the conversion engine isn't handling anything properly except plain text, which strips out all of the italics. It's marginally better than having it strip out words, but everyone reading still has my apologies.
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Title: Missing words
Reviewed By: mimizukujin [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2006 10:56 CST
Comment/Review:
Yeah, I looked over the version on this site, and it looks like it's not handling conversion from .rtf properly. I'll be trying other formats.
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Title: AWaC
Reviewed By: Waruiko On: March 17, 2006 09:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are missing parts of some words. You might want to fix that at some point. Other then that... I HEART DIS FIC!!!!!! HEART DISGAEA!!!!! HEART RANMA!!!!! HEART GRATUITIS SEX!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: goku_90504 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2006 00:43 CST
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One of the best stories i have seen so far keep up the good work
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