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Reviewed By: Ro0tin4Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2007 17:43 CST
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U r mean! ..lol okay no ur not... i just didnt notice that u only had 2 chapters u r killin me update! lik now ..lol jk please! Me begin now! r4k =]
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Reviewed By: Ro0tin4Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2007 17:16 CST
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Lol sry .. u can just call her a ceral box.. flat chested, no ass, hips or ne thing= Ceral box =] luv it so far..lol boney inu
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Title: PLEASE WRITE MORE
Reviewed By: inuhanyouraerae(not logged in) On: March 05, 2007 20:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
PLEASE WRITE MORE!!! aND MAKE IT SO SESSHOMARU WAS THE ONE WHO KIDNAPPED RIN. PLLZLLZLZLZLZLLZ!!!!! I LOVE THAT PAIRING. RIN/FLUFFY INU/KAG AND SAN/ROKU. PLEASE!!!! I'M DIEING OF BOREDOM AND I LOVE THIS!!!!
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Reviewed By: Niqahlove [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2006 16:28 CDT
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this story is so great you should seriously think about updating because I would definetly continue reading
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Reviewed By: dudekiller [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2006 11:15 CDT
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this is a cool story so far. good job. please update soon.
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Reviewed By: nicole chich On: July 24, 2006 22:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love it and i would really like it if you would update soon!
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Reviewed By: aznangelstarQT [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2006 17:58 CDT
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OoOoO i like ur story please update!
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Reviewed By: alissa On: April 08, 2006 15:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: sakura1001 On: April 08, 2006 12:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
your story is soo good please keep wrighting!!!
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Reviewed By: sublimetrickster [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2006 12:37 CDT
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hey, read your story. It seems interesting and has a lot of potential. You mentioned in your authors notes that this is your first story and that you would like constructive criticism so I'm gonna give you some. First, it's probably best not to put author comments inside the body of the narrative, it kind of breaks the reader from the world you are trying to create in their mind. Second, don't be afraid of exposition. Use the narrative to explain characters reasons for their actions, thoughts and words as well as their background. You shouldn't need to use the characters words to tell the reader something. For example, Kagome saying that Rin had disappeard a month ago has nothing to do with what was happening at the time, but it is aparent that it was important to you to get that info out. Instead of her saying it, you could have her wonder what her brother and childhood friend have gotten into, wonder if they could have any connection with Rin's disappearance. That's just an example of how to use narrative, I'm saying you should change it or anything, that's completely up to you. I'm curious about the reasoning for Sota and Inuyasha leaving in the first place and why they think it's so important for Kagome to come with them. Did they grow up in a bad part of Tokyo and wanted to get out? Tokyo is a huge city, but it sounds like they didn't stay there. Did they move to the west and live in Osaka? What kind of gang are they part of that they've made a lot of money? This is a really good start for you first piece. I look forward to the next chapter. :D
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Reviewed By: ezaangel [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2006 04:58 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey this is really great, I really love the story line. Keep up the good work
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Title: interesting
Reviewed By: Rock Lobster57 On: April 06, 2006 22:07 CDT
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Its a really interesting story. Hope that you udate soon. :D (don't wait to long to update. :D Cant stand the wait. lol.)
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Title: Wuv It!
Reviewed By: orange44 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2006 22:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Weeeeeeeeeeeee!!!! I wuv it! keep going pwease? *sad face, and im really really REALLY cute and sad face* love it! UPDATE SOON! :D huggles!^.^ haha i always say that, its my new fav word;)
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Title: thanks
Reviewed By: angle54 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2006 18:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
thanks for the quick update and i understand about the wait and everything i got to update my fic today to so if you want you can read it just look up angle54
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Title: good
Reviewed By: angle54 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2006 21:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is good i will be looking for more i even just put you on my fav list so please update soon.
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