| "Love, Sex, and Rock 'n' Role" Reviews/Comments [ 46 ] |
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Reviewed By: RadioActiveRedhead [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2008 15:21 CST
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I don't know if you meant to put "role" in the title or "roll" as in "Rock and Roll***" Role means like you're playing a 'role' in a play. Also in your summary you said "Shockenly" its actually "Shockingly". Also in the summary, you said "Pactient" its "patient". Also its "Shikon no Tama" and the man driving the bus or whatever...if he's a grandpa the correct spelling is "Ojiisan" or "Jiisan", in Japanese "Jiji" isn't a word. I'm not trying to be nit-picky, or maybe I am I'm not sure. But don't worry, it's not just you who I give corrections to, I'm not trying to be rude or bitchy so please do not think that this is a flame. (If it was a flame I would be using harsher words than I am) I'm doing it for -your- benefit. You know what the high school teacher's say: "As long as your grammar and spelling is good, you will never be thought of as unintelligent." I stopped reading after chapter 2 so I don't know what else might be wrong. You might want to think of getting a beta-reader to correct mistakes. Make sure your beta-reader is semi-fluent in Japanese if you plan on still using Japanese in your stories and make sure their English is up to par. :) Happy writing!
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Reviewed By: future author On: November 16, 2007 18:41 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, just found your story again and was depressed to find no new upates. :( I hope you will update the story one day. I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of the story. Until the next udpate, good luck.
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Reviewed By: alexus [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2007 12:20 CDT
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please update again soon. Please please please
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Reviewed By: Vampireluver [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2007 20:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG y did you stop? I love this story already!!! Please continue to write it!!!!!!! PLEASE!!!Bold
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Reviewed By: dreamer789 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2007 14:43 CDT
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aw i like it! keep up the great work but just one question, isnt inuyasha still seeing kikyo?
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Reviewed By: EP On: July 23, 2007 10:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
NOOO!!!! you really need to right more. i was readin then BAM there weren't any more chapters. pleaz write more.
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Title: i love it
Reviewed By: biglaugher113 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2007 15:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh my god i love this story. i love stories when kags is a hanyou. PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ update i wanna see whats gonna happen in the month that they can't see each other. i'm begging u update.
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Title: Io
Reviewed By: GateySan On: March 18, 2007 14:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it! Spectacular, and amazing, please do not neglect this, and keep on writing. I hope to see more. Gateboy.
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Reviewed By: Inu_Kagome_4Life [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2007 16:12 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good to hve u back...aww u hve da flu...get well soon!! then upodate as soon as u can feel BETTER
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Reviewed By: Inu_Kagome_4Life [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2006 15:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
plz update soon
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Reviewed By: InuyashasBiggestFan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2006 21:05 CDT
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Your story is really good and if I have to wait for an update then I will, break ups can be hard!!! Be strong!
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Reviewed By: Nathanlvr [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2006 17:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story. I seriously do. and I cant wait for your update. I hope I got the rating system right.. 10 is good right?
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Reviewed By: Koyomi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2006 19:43 CDT
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That was oh so very mean of you to stop there...so ppllllleeeeeaaaaaaassssssseeeeee as soon as you can update. THANK YOU!!!! :)
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Reviewed By: twin_star_of_suzaku [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2006 18:03 CDT
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just a couple of thoughts and stuff: * in Chapter 1 - You need to give kudos and credit to the band whose song lyrics you used, as well as maybe makeing it more clear that you don't own the series or the song. * in chapter 2 - Kagome would have just said "Baka" or "Inu-yasha no Baka" NOT "Baka no desu". "baka no desu" just doesn't make any grammical sence - litterally translated it would say "Stupid's Is" (('no' in Japanese, when used as a conjuncture, acts as a possessor. "Inu-yasha no Baka" == "Inu-yasha's stupid")) * a question that arrises to me is "Is Kagome just an old friend of the Takahashi's?" as well as "Is Kagome a Youkai? A hanyou?" Neither of these are very clear in the early chapters... * another question between 1 & 3 - in the 1st chapter you'd said that Kags & Houjou were going out, but in the 3rd it seems like they broke up before Kags moved back to Tokyo. So I'm curious which is the case... * lastly - you make it seem that Kags & Inu have known each other (and considering the rating, i'm guessing intimately) for a long time - but if she grew up in the country: how did she and Inu meet? have they been lovers before or is this just how they act around each other regardless of either of them being in a relationship with someone else (IE: Houjou & Kikyou) it's an interesting story and I hope you continue with it - but please try fixing these things before you continue, ne?
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Reviewed By: Kagome-sama9 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2006 18:02 CDT
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LOL, I'll keep that in mind. Its gonna be the same names, just tring to decide on the title. LOL.
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