| "Riazen's Story" Reviews/Comments [ 28 ] |
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Reviewed By: Chaos Blade [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2006 08:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa, what a ending. Not what I expected but I definately like it!!! It's a good story. Glad you finished it instead of leaving it undone like so many others. Good luck if you decide to write more.
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Reviewed By: SoarMore_FlyHigher [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2006 08:27 CDT
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Awwww!!! Cute ending. Aha, Yusuke is old. But anyway, good story! I really enjoyed it.
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Reviewed By: Chaos Blade [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2006 16:12 CDT
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Holy, two more new charaters. Probably got fifty of them in your head uh? That's good, you may need them. Getting to more action, can't wait. Keep up the imagination!
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Reviewed By: Chaos Blade [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2006 21:12 CDT
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Yeah!! It gets back on track!! And to where more things can happen. After all this is Raizen's Story !!!! Can't wait to know wo the voices are!!
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Reviewed By: SoarMore_FlyHigher [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2006 09:42 CDT
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Aww, don't apologize. I'm in quite a pickle. You dislike my story (and you seem to be the only one reading it at this point on here) and everyone on Fnafiction loves it. T.T Enough about me, lets talk about you. Awesome update. I don't really mind how they spent a month there, but I would have thought it would be harder to get Youko to tell anyone anything. Yet, this is a long time ago. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: SoarMore_FlyHigher [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2006 17:46 CDT
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Oooh! Now Raizen appears. Goodie! Sorry I haven't reviewed sooner. I was away with no internet! DX So, will they become friends, or more like acquaintences?
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Reviewed By: Chaos Blade [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2006 20:46 CDT
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He's no suicidal is he?! Now the story's going to confuse me being from Raizen's point of veiw. Or well. Gotta wait for the next cha[ter, sure to e a dozey!
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Reviewed By: Chaos Blade [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2006 17:11 CDT
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Well, isn't that nice!!! Lila, Kuronue and Leslie saving Youko from death, though they are dead themselves. Although I have to say, a body usually donesn't contain GALLONS of blood, I think....but anyways, nice chapter
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Reviewed By: SoarMore_FlyHigher [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2006 12:52 CDT
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My word! Kuro, Leslie and Lila to the rescue! I'm happy they showed up, even if it was only in spirit. Why did they neat and hate Youko though? (His parents I mean) There has to be somthing behind all that hatred. Maybe he wasn't really their child and they had no chose but to take care of him (Kinda like Harry and his aunt and uncle!) Or, maybe because of how he looked... I've read plenty of stories where golden eyes were cursed, but maybe you could have Yusuke ask why his parents were so cruel and you coyuld give a story behind it all. Anyway, good job!
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Reviewed By: SoarMore_FlyHigher [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2006 08:19 CDT
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I love it when Youko Kurama goes through both physical and mental torment. He is my favorite character, but I love to see him in pain.. Woah, I sound like Karasu.. Oo;;; Anyway, good update. Will Youko win or lose, but survive? I don't know, I'm not you. So update damnit! Quickly!
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Reviewed By: Chaos Blade [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2006 08:03 CDT
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Dang, now what?! Funky little boy attacking Youko and hurting him!!! I have no idea where this could be heading and I like that!!! Can't wait to see what you have in store!!
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Reviewed By: Chaos Blade [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2006 14:19 CDT
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Oh so sad!!! That leaves Youko a wreck... so now what? Can't wait for your next chapter!! (I tried sending this the day I got the email saying this was out but it would send!!)
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Reviewed By: Chaos Blade [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2006 11:00 CDT
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Leave, u-huh, right...now what's gonna happen? Interesting plot going here, can't wait to read more.
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Reviewed By: Chaos Blade [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2006 08:43 CDT
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Now what's gonna happen? And 'friendship will be the end of you'? Okay, the chapter title fits, it really is a mind game, and I'm confused. Can't wait for the next part so I can figure this out!!
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Reviewed By: SoarMore_FlyHigher [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2006 14:24 CDT
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Yeah, more goodness! Well, atleast they didn't completely fall for the illusions. Like I said, work on your description a lot. I stress this because when you read a story, you want to be able to see what you are reading. What are they doing besides walking around? What are they thinking? How do they feel? Why do they feel it? You are good with most of these questions, but I can't see the maze they are in. -takes a blow up bat with words on it that say 'more description and update soon on it and hits you on the head- Exactly as the balloon says. ^.^
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