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| "Traumatized" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: Thank you so much
Reviewed By: utopian dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2006 12:54 CDT
Comment/Review:
I so appreciate your review! The "he lost it" part, that's a good question. I initially started writing it to be a longer segment, bringing things into a current year with Inuyasha having nighmares about his mother's death. I was going to develope it where it explains why Inuyasha has such a hard time with his feelings towards women. It is, after I go back and read it, out of place. I believe i should have written he 'cried out' or 'he ran till he lost feeling in his legs, every muscle ached yet he pushed on.' SOmething that explains how a child would react to his mother's death with no explanation. I will attempt to develope the story further unearthing some rather dark emotions from our favorite Hanyou. As far as how Inutashio reacted to his older son's actions, I didn't really attempt to work on that scenario becuase I felt it would deminish from the main plot of the story. Shesshomaru's relationship with his father could be an entirely new story. And I didn't really want to incorporate Sesshomaru much becuase we already know that they have an astranged relationship and felt it wasn't necessary to divulge further into it. No offense to Kagome, but I have my own character that I would rather he be paired with. So, in answer to your question on my next direction, yes i will change the whole outcome of his life. I am not sure if I will keep it Fuedal Era or if I will bring it to "present time" situations. Thank you again for the great review!
| Reviewed By: The Assasin [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2006 13:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was amazing! the way u piece the story together it just is captivating. i think u should continue on it. What do u mean by he lost it? How can a four year old 'lose it'? How did Inu no Tashio respond to his youngest's behavior? How did Sesshomaru? Is Sesshomaru always going to hate Inu? R u going to fast forward it to his feudal era life with Kags? Or r u going to change the story of his life? I would rather the last part. the biggest question i can think of is the first one: In what way did the four year old Inuyasha 'lose it'? I would really love to see that answered. Ja Ne, ~Musique~
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