| "The Tales of Hierakon's Empire" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: InkEnchantress On: November 29, 2008 14:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, poor Touya! This fanfic is seriously one of the best fanfics I've ever read. It isn't rushed and the storyline is original and it's full of great details. Only one problem, I'm dying to know what happens next! No worries though, I understand that you have your own lives.
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Reviewed By: Shants On: August 18, 2008 12:36 CDT
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i'm glad you guys were finally able to write another chapter. it was awesome!!& i can't wait till you guys make another chapter so please hurry as fast as you possibly can!(i'm to lazy to log in)
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Reviewed By: Berry_Rose [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2008 13:27 CDT
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this is one of the best fanfics i've read in a LONG time. some call me a critic because i do critic my friends, but that's only because i've got expirince writing because i've done over 10, but that's beside the point. putting an egytian twist on things is something i haven't seen on ANY site i've been to(unless i just didn't see it) & it's nice to know at least some people can still think outside the box. although, i do have one complaint, it's actually more of a suggestion i guess you could say. well, not to sound rude, but i think the story's moving to slow, which is a new one for me because usually a story seems rushed. & i don't mean by the time between your updating because i understand we all have lives outside the computer zone. but what i'm saying is that the plot in the story seems to be dragging a little bit. although it might just be me. well either way you two don't have to take my advice, just thought i'd give it & actually be nice about it.(i've been on SO many sites & within 2 or 3 chapters of my story people decide to chew me out & i HATE that) so i thought i'd bring it up nicely so some (insert cuss word) doesn't bring it up & just insult you two. well either way, do with my advice as you see fit, after all it is your story(& sry 4 rambeling but i do it often & can't seem 2 ever stop no matter wat i do)although i DO hope u continue soon!!! ^_^
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Title: To be continued?
Reviewed By: KaosuMusouka [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2008 20:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am enamored with your works! And so far, this as been my favorite one. I am an Egypt freak ^^; so I have noticed some mistakes in dealing with the setting and workings of your Egyptian empire, but I shan't bother you with them, I'm just a a spazz. one thing that brings me despair though, Is it's not finished! I sincerely hope you two get around to finishing this one day. Hopefully soon ^^ if you need anything at all, please don't hesitate to contact me!
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Title: delightful :)
Reviewed By: Aralyn [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2007 01:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've been wondering if this story would be updated soon. I'm in suspense now wondering what is going to happen to her kingdom. wonderful chapter as usual. ~Aaralyn~
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Reviewed By: Aralyn [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2007 23:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omfg! I did not want that chapter to end because I want to know whats going to happen now that he's dead. I mean he did deserve it.. but um with the Prince about to take over. sooo much drama. hope you have time to update soon!
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Title: what?!
Reviewed By: Aralyn [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2007 18:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
He just murdered the pharaoh?..... wtf?... Omg if that is true I feel hella bad for Omorose.... Ew that would suck sooo much to be his husband. EWWWWWW!!! update!!!!!!! .. ~Aaralyn~
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Reviewed By: Aralyn [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2006 15:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
uh oh. wow she had better figure out some way to get that prince away from her or bad things are going to happen. so much drama! update soon!!!
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Title: amazing
Reviewed By: Aralyn [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2006 15:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The prince is such a coldhearted bastard. I hate him but hahah he so deserved to get drugged. I would have pushed him off a cliff while he was drugged and been like..oops: now how did that happen? Love this story!
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Reviewed By: Saiyazon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2006 15:20 CST
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Ooo I am interested to see how this plot is going to pull together for once I have few to no theories on this. And good job with the imagery. Normally I'm not into the Egyptian scene, but your imagery is very convincing. Keep up the good work.
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Title: stunning
Reviewed By: Aralyn [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2006 13:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am absolutely in LOVE with this story!!! Aww Jin is such a sweetie~ I hate the prince push him off of a cliff because he is so horrible and i HATE HIM!! ~Aaralyn~
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Title: Ch3!
Reviewed By: yodaihiro [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2006 11:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just love Benu even more in this chapter...aye but anyway...you two have once again amazed me with the awesomeness of this story! The passion is a big thing I feel from reading this, but I'm also impressed with the painstaking length you both go to write such beautiful, moving description for this fic. And the characters are so...just wow!!! I love how the plot is going, and I can't wait to read another amazing chapter of Jin and Touya in ancient Egypt! ~Yo~
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Reviewed By: yodaihiro [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2006 19:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This IS sooooooooooooooooooooooo awesome! I should've reviewed earlier. >.< But anyway this has got to be one of your best works to date...perhaps it's because you and Raist are working on it together. There's just so much passion woven into each and every word. You both painted ancient Egypt in such a vivid way...and them emotions are soooooo deep. Omorose is my favorite character so far...she seems so serious but her heart is kind. And she has to deal with that prince she's betrothed against her will to. There's something about him that sets me on edge...I really hop she won't end up with that guy. -shudders- And Omorose's little sister is just sooooo cute! It was so terrible that she had to see Touya getting whipped! I know I was in tears when I read that part...how can the Pharaoh be so heartles?! I don't like him anymore than I like the prince dude. I like Bennu, though. She's just cool like that I guess. She's got a sassy nature about her. But I love your characterizations on everyone...and Jin's the light as usual. And Touya...-bursts into tears- Can't wait for the next chapter! -sniffles into a tissue-
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Title: I luv this story!!
Reviewed By: Aaralyn On: June 21, 2006 00:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Omarose...I would be scarred for life too if i saw some poor (and hot :_) slave being beaten.. and wow her fiance is insensitive.. he's so stuck up, even if he seems nice he thinks that everyone below him deserves his contempt.. no wonder she doesnt want to marry him.. id want to push him off a cliff personally, but i suppose that would complicate things.. Wonderful chapter!!!!!! ~Aaralyn~ p.s. ignore the stupid reviews. they're all just jealous because you're amazing writers and they suck.
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Title: that was soooo good
Reviewed By: Aaralyn On: May 19, 2006 17:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! I get to be your first reviewer; how interesting. I certainly hope that Este gives her husband a piece of her mind, since he deserves a very severe scolding for behaving in such a coldhearted manner. And i thought it was fantastic that she slapped the guard, because thats exactly what i would have done. Especially because he was soo rude, all like "ur not the pharaoh" i would have Smacked him too!!!!! Can't wait to find out what's gonna happen next!! ~Aaralyn~
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