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| "Cursed" Reviews/Comments [ 228 ] | | Pages (16): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 › » ] | Reviewed By: AngelsRebellion [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2006 03:18 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sesshy oh Sesshy, when are you going to kiss the woman already?
| Reviewed By: White Luna(offline) On: June 05, 2006 23:40 EDT
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I'm so happy with this story... it's so romantic... I love it! ^_^!
| Reviewed By: Lamb [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2006 22:32 EDT
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hmm...quite an interesting chapter for character develompent...although, I guess that your whole story is almost entirely about charactr development....lol, anyway, it was pretty goodchapter. I really hate it when there are such huge misunderstandings between two people that they simply can't get by it because they refuse to TALK to each other ( you see it a LOT in inu/kag fics) and it's kind of the same with what happened with Takana believing that she was worthless, except that you didn't do it in a way that I hated, and you didn't have pag after page based on that misunderstanding, you cleared it up right away, so major kudos! and although I think that you may have gone just a little overboard with sesshomaru's emotions when he was telling her that she was not worthless, I don't think that there was an better way that you could have done that scene and everything. also, I was kind of wondering early on in your story, when we first learned of Takana's rape and again after reading this chapter, who the youkai was that raped her....is it just a random youkai, or was it maybe....someone we are familiar with...? I also wonder, whichever of the two it was, what kind of youkai it was? will you be touching on that more, later on in the story, or is it just something for us to be left guessing about? can't wait for more, but hope that the next chapter is a little longer (I tried, I REALLY tried not to say aynything, I didn't for the last two chapters, but I just couldn't not say anything anymore, it was killing me...)as I - how shall I say this - am not a lover of short chapters... I much much prefer longer ones. ah, well, I guess, you being the author and all that I will just have t live with whatever you put out there. as I said, I hope what you put out there next is soon, and jsut as good!
| Reviewed By: angelsfalltearfully [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2006 21:42 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aw, I really liked this chapter. Very nice to see him still being Sesshy but getting his point across. I really do enjoy their interaction with one another. Great chapter, can't wait to read more.
| Reviewed By: angelsfalltearfully [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2006 22:35 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
And the plot thickens... I love how deep down he's still so Sesshy, but I am hoping he'll lighten up just a tad, which I see happening already. I love their interaction, but update soon short chapters make me ancy.
| Reviewed By: AngelsRebellion_lo On: June 04, 2006 21:52 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"This Sesshoumaru very much appreciated seeing you almost naked." emmm...yeah, that was my impression of what Sesshoumaur/Shin MIGHT have been about to say there.
| Reviewed By: Lamb [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2006 17:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, some more really good chapters! they are excellent additions to the story! I think I may have already mentioned along this line, but I really like the way you have the chapters placed, as in day on hundred, and then day one hundred forty(??)It makes the story move so much more smoothly, I htink, than if you had decided to write every little detail that happened in the time that they stayed in the hut for the winter, etc. etc. and it also fits in with the style of your story perfectly. I think it is quite a brilliant way for you to have done this story!
| Reviewed By: angelsfalltearfully [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2006 16:41 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Banter does seem difficult especially thinking up good things. But you do it quite well, amazingly actually. I loved this chapter, I knew Sess would win. Its just in his nature. But you pulled this chapter off amazingly well. I can't wait for more!
| Title: We can start the party now...I'm here
Reviewed By: entropy9 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2006 12:47 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
OKay...So I've just finished. I like this story so far... I just finished caged so I'm expecting an epic missy! so about my ratings...all 9's because I feel like your style is really good, though maybe it feels a little more rushed than your other two? umm there are a few mistakes in spelling not much though, and again, the same kind I told you about before, the kind spellcheck won't point out. for this story I saw role vs roll and nothing vs noting. So yeah nothing too bad. gave you a nine for orignality because yes i've seen the sess/human thing before, BUT you are doing an OC fic and you don't fall into the cliches so easily...I am enjoying this, but I feel...apprehensive...I'm not sure...You know I love you, I do. so this is all constructive criticism, trust me, if I didn't like it I'd rate accordingly...I don't fool around with rating people I tell the truth. so, you can't please everyone, but i will be a good reviewer and let you know how to move me to all tens; ready? okay. style: I'd like maybe some more descriptions...I know you don't want your oc's to be mary sues so i realize you leave them fairly ordinary. i love this fact, it makes takana so human and real...but i want to know more about her...but don't get too flowery (heh heh, this is difficult huh?) spelling: you have perfect grammar, i haven't read any awkward sentences...so basically it just doing the run-through and catching those homophones you get mixed up...but again, i love that you get the chapters out so fast...and they aren't that big of a deal either, i always understand what you are trying to say. so...just do a quick run-through or ask your beta to look out for those. originality: I think you are doing a good job here...I gave you a 9 because while i've seen this type of situation before, you've made it your own completely...so i'll just hang in there, i'm sure you'll keep me guessing and this will prolly move itself up to a ten in a matter of time..unless you go all cliche on me (you know, the stuff you'll find in EVERY sesshoumaru/Kagome fic...blech) as for enjoyment, it's the same concept. I think i will enjoy this more as it moves along. you are an excellent writer and i have faith in you. besides i don't ususally enjoy beginnings that much...i just love when you get to the heart of the conflict (whatever that may be) and I start biting my nails over the anxiety... so yeah, don't worry about pleasing everyone, but i'd be a jerk if i gave you all 9's (when i usually rate you much higher) and didn't give you an explanation or a way to improve. but it's all just my opinion...I like you alot anyway and if you thikn my advice is crap, it doesn't matter...9's still equal an A in my gradebook. sorry this was long, but i've gotten all the core stuff off my chest, so from now on, i'm gonna review each chapter as you put it out...just how it mae me fell and all that, so it won't be as complicated. thanks for writing great fics! i'll talk to you again soon. entropy9
| Reviewed By: White Luna(offline) On: June 02, 2006 22:42 EDT
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I'm not worried about it, take your time. ^_^. Anyway, still wonderful. Getting a little romantic now, aren't they? He hasn't remembered yet... what to do when he does? When he's a youkai again? Goodness, I'm curious. 264 more days to go...
| Reviewed By: Nikkie23534 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2006 22:40 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this story, its great! Yes, my sister and I are keeping up with it(I had to read it to her over the phone as I was reading it).We seem to sense a little sexual tension- Its getting hot in here! B reading U! Next chapter please we're dying, the wait is killing! B reading U!
| Reviewed By: Puddle [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2006 20:27 EDT
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Ha! I bet Sess loves her. Or he will atleast. And it's funny reading about him kicking butt as a human, with the instincts of a youkai.
| Reviewed By: Vickey On: June 01, 2006 19:00 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is awesome. Please hurry and update. I come everyday to see the next chapter. The perfect life lesson for a snob such as Sesshomaru. Refreshing.
| Reviewed By: angelsfalltearfully [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2006 13:13 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your writing never ceases to amaze me. You truly are very talented. I loved this chapter, so pleased that Sess, even though injured, laid some real ass kickin's on those two guys. And yes, I really do like Takana, and that must mean I really love your writing because Sess pairs make me a bit twitchy, but you master it quite beautifully. I love their banter, its so Sess.
| Reviewed By: DYquem NSI On: June 01, 2006 01:24 EDT
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Very interesting. You are off to a good start. Sess as human, with amnesia, but with his usual instincts and attitudes. You are right that it can be hard to get into OC, but you have fleshed her out, so she seems more real than the usual OC.
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