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Title: Experiment
Reviewed By: fluffy's cutiepie On: June 27, 2006 09:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love the story. it was just short but other than that it was great. its so good a story a actually reviewed. plz update. P.S. i love runaway puppy as well.
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Reviewed By: RedHerring (not logged in) On: June 22, 2006 21:05 CDT
Comment/Review:
The potion idea, the way you presented it, doesn't make sense. Heating sperm will kill it. End of story. If you really want to go that direction, have Naraku use some other ingredients to make sperm cells survive. You know how egg white cooks when you heat it? Imagine that in a pot, and that's what you did. It's useless. It's protein. Also, I'm not a fan of your introduction. It was rather abrupt and unimaginative. There was no setting, there were grammar mistakes, and your choice of words was elementary. So basically, it's like every other regurgitated piece of cow droppings on this site. Now I'm going to sort through more of this "wonderful" drivel to find a true gem.
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Reviewed By: sesshys numba1 gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2006 15:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
now im interested lol update soon!
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Title: ^^
Reviewed By: Musa On: June 13, 2006 23:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it pleasepleasepleasepleasePLEASE write more^^
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Reviewed By: Mitsuri-chan On: June 11, 2006 21:38 CDT
Comment/Review:
Not bad. You got a good plot going there. You could touch up your grammar a bit, but other than that, this is a very good start of a fic. ^__^
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Reviewed By: prettykittycat123 On: June 08, 2006 06:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i loved it. plz update soon. i beg you. so exiting. i wonder what they will do when they find out that they are all pregnant with narakus baby. this is gonna be a big hit in my book. plz update soon.
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Title: ~_~
Reviewed By: Jaden_Birdie_Blythe [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2006 23:45 CDT
Comment/Review:
Oh...I get to write the first review! Well...that's a first. Mpreg by way of vile potion. It's got promise... and I find the thought of Sesshoumaru pregnant freaking great. Upadte soon.
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