Reviewed By:Hideto-Sama [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2006 15:10 CDT Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 5 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10 Overall Rating: 7 of 10
Comment/Review: Your story it's okay... The idea is good but the way the plot is developing seems rushed. Also the extensive use of dialog, wears out the reader. You could try to maybe develop more narration and add a little description so it won't seem so rushed.