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Title: Chapter 3
Reviewed By: HopelesslyEscaflowne [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2006 01:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is so cute! ^^ I love the Inu/Kag moments especially when you have their emotions bared to each other. That's when it gets passionate and you're good at writing passion. The cute moments though are enjoyable too! hehe I have a feeling something is going to go terribly wrong soon since the summarry suggested something would go horribly wrong and Inuyasha will forget Kags. :( I can't wait to find out what happens next. It was adorable when he was looking into her eyes silently asking the question and she nodded! Kawaii!! ^^ Keep up the good work and I love the level of description you're using so far. Your chapter length is perfect btw. ;)
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Reviewed By: joey77 On: August 31, 2006 19:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's so serious, but there's comedy in it too! You fit it in at the funniest places and it just WORKS. I love how real this seems, and how possible it could be. Inuyasha is just so indecisive...angry..happy..brooding..more brooding, lol! It totally fits him! Awesome! I've read some of your other fics, and lets just say, i'm really looking forward to the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha_luvs_kagome_forever [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2006 18:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOVE IT! i've given up on fanfic because too many people have forgotten how nice regular, fuedal era fics are ^^
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Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2006 18:33 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent chapter. Kagome and Inuyasha play off each other so well in this story. I'll be looking forward to your next update. Great job.
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Reviewed By: Teddy Bear [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2006 00:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story is wonderful and the fighting scene was well written. The way you make the characters out to be are very believable to how they would turn out in the future. Your story was rivetting and I couldnt get enough of it. I hope you update soon as Im looking forward to it.
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Reviewed By: axel721 On: August 18, 2006 23:11 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
ah sad ; ; You can go dark with this one =p keep Just A Break happy!!!! please keep it happy XD
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Reviewed By: LostInSiberia_14 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2006 08:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely LOVE this fic. It's descriptive, well thought out, and written almost as good as Rumiko herself! It's the kind of story that I could actually see (and would like to see) happen in the Anime. Kudos! And update soon!
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Reviewed By: amhor56 On: August 18, 2006 05:13 CDT
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I love the two chapters you've put up! They are very good and are not out of character at all. Please update soon
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Title: Danny Girl
Reviewed By: badgirl093 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2006 01:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story it's great. please update soon.
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Reviewed By: KenYasha [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2006 09:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That's such a great story, I couldn't stop reading! And I really would love to read more of it :))
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Reviewed By: kagome313 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2006 07:03 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is alot different from 'Just A Break.' I love this new story your writing. Does kagome n inuyasha have a relationship more than friendship? Or, did he just kiss her 'cuz he thought he wouldn't live; or something? *sigh* I'll get my answer next chapter, ne? Oh, ok....pwease hurry n update. *puppy eyes* pwease?!?!lol. I truly love this very much. I also hope you'll hurry up n update 'Just A Break', I really am looking forward to that scene with Inuyasha and kags. ^.^ really....:D. So what if i'm a hentai :p sue me.lol. Great job!
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Reviewed By: Piett6 On: July 05, 2006 00:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is excellent work! Your written dialogue and your description of the action is top-notch, and the story is intruiging as well. Please write more!
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Reviewed By: Lynz (AKA:pipe wrench kid) On: July 04, 2006 04:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, great start to this fic. the best one I've seen in a long time that will end up being a great overall story as well as winning many awards in the future. you seem to have the skills to take this story along ways. I LOVE WHAT YOU HAVE SO FAR. I was a little worried about the whole 'human/weak inuyasha; but you have found a very happy medium in my mind if how they would all act.The only thing I think you need to work on is your action. other than that is all good. If you are looking for a beta for this fic and others, I would be willing to help. just email me.. pipe_wrench_kid@yahoo.com LYNZ
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Title: Great characterization and style!
Reviewed By: HopelesslyEscaflowne [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2006 19:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love how you've kept all the characters like themselves while adding your own unique touch to the story. It gives it the Inuyasha feel and at the same time opens it to yoru own creativity. You did a great job so far! ^^ The cliffhanger was very well done. Your style is excellent too, flowing with very few spelling or grammatical errors, which really does make a story more appealing and enjoyable to read. Please keep up the good work and quality! :) I hope to read more of this story in the future.
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Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2006 10:35 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was an excellent, action-packed chapter. I can't wait to read more!
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