| "The one promised to me" Reviews/Comments [ 23 ] |
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Reviewed By: dreamer789 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2006 12:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I LIKE IT! please udpate soon i cant wai to see what happens next this is a great story!
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Reviewed By: InuyashasBiggestFan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2006 01:31 CDT
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YEAH!!! Inuyasha has calmed down! Update soon!
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Reviewed By: madosie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2006 06:04 CDT
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I really enjoyed this chappie for a few reasons. First I think Inuyasha's inner dialogue really created insight into the character with his dicussion of lacking friends and his being scared of being punished. Also, I enjoyed the bond that they are creating. Him and Kagome are beginning to take one another on as equals. But now they have TWO beds...I have a feeling it won't be used... ;) Great chappie, thanks!
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Reviewed By: inudewaruika [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2006 22:18 CDT
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Great!!!!
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Reviewed By: madosie [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2006 22:03 CDT
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Haha, love it! Those two sure know how to blush and I have to say I couldn't be more jealous of Kagome waking up with a delicious, warm Inuyasha laying in her bed. Life is truly cruel...nice chappie! Thanks.
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Reviewed By: InuyashasBiggestFan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2006 18:17 CDT
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Well that was kind of short but full of awkwardness all the same. Love it!!! ^_^ Update soon!!!
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Reviewed By: InuyashasBiggestFan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2006 23:06 CDT
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omg!! I so love this story so far, please update!!!!
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Reviewed By: madosie [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2006 16:34 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed that last chapter. It's nice to see Kagome displaying her power like that to save him. Even more so I think it is going to be interesting to see how things develop between them since they obviously don't have a traditional slave/master relationship as he in used to. Gods I love his inner dialogue, he cracks me up. Great job!
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Reviewed By: Maloy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2006 06:21 CDT
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You know, I haven't read your story yet. And I cannot say anything about the plot or the style, but I do want to give you a piece of advice- when a person sees a spelling mistake in the summary all the intention of reading the story in gone in one second. The word "throw" is used in phases as "throw me the ball" and it's a verb. The word you were going for was "trough" or "thru" as Americans sometimes spell it. THAT'S an adverb and you use in the phrase "to go through something" (normally bad). I don't know if that was just a typo or maybe you're not a native speaker but in any case I suggest you to correct that and get a beta-reader, since even the professional writers have them. I think it shows respect for the reader. I'm sorry if I sounded rude but it really freaks me out when people make spelling/grammar mistakes in their fanfics. And not that I'm all smart and don't do that, cause I'm from Russia myself and I know that's it's impossible to write everything perfect. But 1-beta-reader 2-when the mistake is in the summary, it kinda gives you an idea about the whole story…
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Reviewed By: inudewaruika [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2006 01:14 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is actually a different story....i like the change...it doesn't have the typical senerio that the others have....it's fresh....by the way is she's going to meet 'Uncle' and sesshomaru wouldn't they recogonize inuyasha's scent on her? i mean they are full blooded inu demons.....anyway its a really good story and i can't wait for the next update. p.s i normally only do the two, enjoyment factor and overall rating because i would hate to be judged on my writing so i don't do it to others....so its not like it sucks...grammer wise anyway...love the story can't wait for the next update.
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Title: The one promised to me
Reviewed By: GoddessofImaginaryLight [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2006 23:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
so far i like it very much, cant wait to see what you do with the next chapter, hope you up date very soon!
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Reviewed By: Koski [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2006 18:49 CDT
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Your story is awesome!
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Reviewed By: Daiksuki121 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2006 08:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thus far i like the story, creativity, and style and i hope u update soon
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Reviewed By: fluffykirara not logged in On: July 05, 2006 23:40 CDT
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ohh i really like ur story!!! im adding you to my favs....^^ just keep it going!!! and i love how kags is not the slave this time... oki i dont like that inu's a slave but still he can be my slave... kukukukuku...
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Reviewed By: madosie [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2006 21:16 CDT
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Ooo well I'll be your first! I think you have a nice little plot line going so far. I'm interested to see where it will be going. I'm also curious about the whole Kagome/Kikyo dynamic you have going...sister who don't get along...sounds like it could be fiery. I can't wait until Inuyasha is in Kagome's presence. Good writing so far ;) I await your next update!
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