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Reviewed By: Bdegrees(not logged in) On: August 03, 2006 22:17 CDT
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Great update! You're doing a really good job with this. I can tell you put alot of thought into the biology. I think that your reasoning behing the mpreg is fine. It is fiction after all! Have fun with it! I look foreward to the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: hopelesslyinlove On: July 25, 2006 01:04 CDT
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You've done a great job so far. Please keep up the good work. Oh and for baby names i always thought 'Sei' would be a good one. As in Vegeta-'Sei' the planet. Oh well update soon *-*
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Title: Yay!!
Reviewed By: Bdegrees (not logged in) On: July 23, 2006 01:52 CDT
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I am certainly not one to shy from mpreg stories! LOL! Poor Goku. For the scene with Chi Chi, that was not nice of her, but I liked that Goku had the courage to apologise for what he felt were his shortcomings as a husband and father. I liked this chapter alot. I like to see different characters from DBZ and not just Vegeta and Goku. You are doing great, but you might want to get a beta reader to help with minor corrections. I would offer, but I stink at it. I need my own beta! I don't have any suggestions for baby names right now...I usually use a Japanese/English dictionary when looking for names! Saiyans always have vegetable names, but I try to stick with organic words (plants, flowers, etc.) when I run oyut of veggies. Good luck and keep it up! -B°
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Reviewed By: Tyrana [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2006 12:11 CDT
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Thanks! I'm glad you like it.I will update soon, I've almost finished chapter six,so I hope you will read it and won't get disappointed with it.
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Reviewed By: The B On: July 14, 2006 03:09 CDT
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For English not being your first language, this was really great! Keep working on it, you are doing a great job. :)
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