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Title: chapter 13
Reviewed By: chibigoku [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2006 13:32 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great chapter! that was looonng chapter... which is good cause i love reading long chapters... but now i have to wait for another update *starts pouting* i want to read more... ~.~ ok, i've stopped my ranting, heh ~ this chapter made me laugh many times, i really like the bit when vegeta phone gohan XD that was a classic, ha ha! ~ hope you do update soon and sorry if this reviews kind of crap, i'm feeling a bit crappy so that's my excuse i guess ^_^;;
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Reviewed By: CrimsonSin On: October 11, 2006 19:00 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the update Bulma is being a real Bitch!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I hope that she gets it in the end and that Goku friends are stand by his side update soon.
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Reviewed By: Bdegrees (not logged in) On: October 07, 2006 20:38 CDT
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Another great chapter! It seems Goku is warming up to the new relationship. :) Nice lemon at the end of the chapter. Nice to see Vegeta's softer side, very sensual! Great job!!
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Title: chapter 1-12
Reviewed By: chibigoku [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2006 07:01 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
woow, this is a very cool fic *nods* ~ i thought i reviewed this before but, it seems that i haven't so, i'm reviewin' now ^_^;; ~ i can see that your writing is improvin' every chapter and the story line keeps on gettin' better and better ~ i also like the way you potrayed (sp?) goku, cause in other stories he's... uhh... less of a warrior, more of the 'motherin' type... i think that's what it is.... anywayz, yeah, you keep goku's warrior spirit in this one... but i guess that's to do with the saiyan instincts (sp??) and moods swings (which i love and hate at the same time ¬¬,) ~ anywayz, i hope you update again soon ^-^
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Title: Bad Bulma!!
Reviewed By: Bdegrees (not logged in) On: September 17, 2006 19:55 CDT
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Wow! Bulma is a real bitch! I hope she sees the error of her ways before she loses Goku as a friend. Can't she see that Trunks is adjusting quite well to this? Anyway, great chapter! I'm worried about what the selfish genius will come up with to get back at them. And thank you for the thanks in your note! ^-^
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Reviewed By: Dana 2 On: September 16, 2006 09:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are doing a great job with this story, I especially like the way you make interact the characters and how real they seem. And I adore how tender is Vegeta with Goku. I can't wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: bdegrees [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2006 00:28 CDT
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Great chapter! Trunks telling Goten about Vegeta and Goku kissing was so funny. I also like the sweet note that the chapter ended on. Again, I can tell you have put alot of thought into the Saiyans and their history/biology. I can't wait to see the baby!! ^-^
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Reviewed By: shivalatina [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2006 07:16 CDT
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I forgot to say that you should also take into consideration that a soul could have passed on so the dragon can refuse to grant the wish.
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Reviewed By: shivalatina [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2006 15:56 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I really like this story. You're doing a great job with it. As for the reasoning with the Saiyan biology, thats a really good way of thinking of it. As for Porounga, I think he's limited to the one year time limit. The only thing that he had that made him different was how many people he could bring back. But that limitation was removed when the dragonballs of namek were remade. So, given that logic you can give him other perks as you see fit. ^_^ enjoy
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Title: Great!
Reviewed By: Bdegrees [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2006 03:27 CDT
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So many great things about this chapter! First, I like Vegeta's nickname for Goku. Very Cute. Second, LOVE Goten! Exactly how I remember him from DBZ. Very energetic and adorable! Third, LOVED Gohan's reaction to hearing about the pregnancy! The fish out of water part was brilliant!! And last...Vegeta licking Goku's earlobe: HOT. Thanks for a great update! Keep up the good work and I am looking for an answer to you Porunga question. You might stop by the DBZ Fanfic Salon. Lots of great people and resources there! -B *crosses fingers and hopes her review gets through*
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Reviewed By: Bdegrees(not logged in) On: August 03, 2006 22:17 CDT
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Great update! You're doing a really good job with this. I can tell you put alot of thought into the biology. I think that your reasoning behing the mpreg is fine. It is fiction after all! Have fun with it! I look foreward to the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: hopelesslyinlove On: July 25, 2006 01:04 CDT
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You've done a great job so far. Please keep up the good work. Oh and for baby names i always thought 'Sei' would be a good one. As in Vegeta-'Sei' the planet. Oh well update soon *-*
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Title: Yay!!
Reviewed By: Bdegrees (not logged in) On: July 23, 2006 01:52 CDT
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I am certainly not one to shy from mpreg stories! LOL! Poor Goku. For the scene with Chi Chi, that was not nice of her, but I liked that Goku had the courage to apologise for what he felt were his shortcomings as a husband and father. I liked this chapter alot. I like to see different characters from DBZ and not just Vegeta and Goku. You are doing great, but you might want to get a beta reader to help with minor corrections. I would offer, but I stink at it. I need my own beta! I don't have any suggestions for baby names right now...I usually use a Japanese/English dictionary when looking for names! Saiyans always have vegetable names, but I try to stick with organic words (plants, flowers, etc.) when I run oyut of veggies. Good luck and keep it up! -B°
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Reviewed By: Tyrana [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2006 12:11 CDT
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Thanks! I'm glad you like it.I will update soon, I've almost finished chapter six,so I hope you will read it and won't get disappointed with it.
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Reviewed By: The B On: July 14, 2006 03:09 CDT
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For English not being your first language, this was really great! Keep working on it, you are doing a great job. :)
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