Title: ???
Reviewed By: D-Reaper Originalle [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2007 21:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was really hard to tell what was going on. Everything was all smashed together. Honestly, Shakespeare is easier. I don't know, maybe this was one of those things where you had an idea and you had to spill it out really quickly before you forgot it (been there, done that) but afterwards you should really try to look over it and make sure your meaning is clear. The story could have been really intriguing, I can tell, but it was a real pain to read. It's formatted really neatly so I know you know what you're doing, but like I said, the dialogue is smushed together. Space things out, implement italics and asterisks if needed, just do something to make this a better read and you'll probably get more people to stop and read the fic long enough to review it.
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