| "Flowers in the Sand" Reviews/Comments [ 75 ] |
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Reviewed By: InuWolfie On: October 24, 2006 21:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Although I loved your story, I happen to agree with LdyVegeta610 about the childrens' ages. At the time Akina was 4, Teiru was 3, Chouichi was almost 1 year, and Kohaku was born. In the epilogue, I'm assuming that Akina is about 11 or 12, Teiru is 10 or 11, and Chouichi is 7 or 8, which would make Kohaku about 6 or 7. And I believe that Shikazu, Mimi, Inoko, and Haishen would be the same age as Haru, give or take a few months. Other than that, the transition of the story was excellent. I did not get bored one bit while reading it (I liken it to reading the DaVinci Code-once I was so into it, I couldn't take my eyes off of it and stop reading!) Also, I was wondering if you were going to draw the other character couples: Neji, TenTen, and Haishen; Gaara, Safaia, Haru, and Aikou; Chouji, Ino, Chouichi, and Inoko; and the addition of Mimi to the Inuzuka drawing. (What ever came of the child of Kankuro and Niira?) Last but not least, are you going to elaborate more on Gaara's and Safaia's wedding night, aka the smex scene? =X Sorry, I have a hentai mind at times, but it's what makes some stories interesting. =) Sorry I'm ranting but when a story is as good as yours, I can't help but pay attention to detail. Hope this helps your critique, and I look forward to a sequel.
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Reviewed By: narusaku4eva [MediaMiner Member] On: October 08, 2006 05:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWSOME!!!!! really REALLY enjoyed that pls make a sequel
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Reviewed By: LdyVegeta610 On: October 07, 2006 15:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent story! However, I was perplexed by the age of the children. Maybe I missed it somewhere in the story, but you mentioned in the Epilogue that Chouichi was the same age as Akina and Teiru. If I remember from a previous chapter, he was mentioned as being 7 months old, when Akina and Teiru were 4 and 3, respectively.
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Reviewed By: srt4reddragon On: October 04, 2006 00:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
One word: Awesome!! Looking forward to a sequel. =)
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Reviewed By: DarkestDragon102894 On: October 02, 2006 14:05 CDT
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YOU'VE DONE SUCH A GREAT JOB! Make the sequel!!!!!!!
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Title: yes yes it is me again!
Reviewed By: nejiten4ever!! On: September 25, 2006 19:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
once again you have shown you true greatness. as expected for my presently fav fan fic writer!! though i can't picture this fanfic coming to an end :( but then angain all great things come to an end. i would like to thank you for the best fanfic so far and for the great kissing scene!!!XD XD XD now all you need is tenten to have TWINS!!!!!^.^ a little disapointed about the lemon thing but oh well :( :) well i hope you update very soon looking forward to the next few chappies. YES I did say chappIES you must write your @$$ off!!!! XD well talk to you later!!Ja ne!
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Reviewed By: djohnson [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2006 20:42 CDT
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Aww come on, forbidden? He's not the boss of you. Plus, I really looking forward to a hilarious scene where Gaara's sand throws Saraia off of him. Pretty please...
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Title: its me again!!!!
Reviewed By: nejiten4ever!! On: September 24, 2006 20:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEKKKKKKKKKKKKKK!!!! LOVED IT LOVED IT !!! XD Anyways you are a great fanfic writer. you managed to keep the 'enjoyment factor' going and an overly protective neji totally showing his true love for her!!!!! SO HOT!!!!! YOU MUST MUST WRITE ANOTHER FOR TOMORROW!!!! AND ANYONE WHO GIVES YOU FLAMES...... SHREW THEM TO HELLLLLL!!! ^.^ Ja ne!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Conformiste On: September 24, 2006 11:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I would just like to say that this is one of the best fanfics i've ever read. You're brilliant! ^_^ Best of all is how the characters stay (quite)loyal to their original personalities, which is something few fanfics are able to achieve. (except that, of course, we've never really seen Gaara in love o_o;;) It's so sweet though!! You have my eternal gratitude for coming up with this!!
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Reviewed By: djohnson [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2006 01:47 CDT
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Crazy love sick Gaara is funny to read. I've said this a bunch of times already, but I love how you keep all of the characters mostly acting like they do in the anime/manga. Can't wait to read more.
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Reviewed By: narusaku4eva [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2006 14:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
m8 i cant beleve how good these are have read em like 4 times and i only found this 2 days ago cant stop re-reading it your a fantastic writer you got me hooked, it might not mean much to u but you'v made a fan outta me =) p.s pls hurry and add next chapter goin on holiday soon and dont want to wait a week to read it =P
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Reviewed By: Japhy On: September 22, 2006 23:15 CDT
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Excellent, as expected! Your writing is really consistent and you have done a great job of setting up and maintaining the angst. Keep up the great work!
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Title: ILUVTHISFANFIC!!!!
Reviewed By: nejiten4ever!! On: September 22, 2006 15:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
as expected a great chappy!!! but needs a lot more love action!! and PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE VERY SOON I DON'T THINK I COULD LIVE A WEEK WITHOUT THIS FAN FIC!!!!!AARRRGGG!!!!IF YOU DON'T I CRY!!!!:(
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Reviewed By: DarkestDragon102894 On: September 20, 2006 18:20 CDT
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Still doing great! ^___^
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Reviewed By: Ryugenkotsu [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2006 17:09 CDT
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few but faithful fans? Ha! you have plenty of fans. Another good chapter...as expected.
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