| "What You See Is Not What You Get" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: fightingpheonix36 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2007 11:55 CST
Comment/Review:
This is really awesome so far. I'm glad I didn't start reading until after Akiko told off her dad because it would have been driving me crazy otherwise. Please post more soon.
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Reviewed By: SurfingSango On: November 15, 2006 16:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update ^^!!, your story is really good - i think the whole tezuka/aiko pairing would be awesome... you don't really get to see the stone-cold buchou express his feelings often
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Title: chapter 4
Reviewed By: Taya On: September 17, 2006 21:21 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great!! shes out of the clutches of her father. good for her
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Title: Re: all 3 chapters
Reviewed By: keket [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2006 18:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
hey, Sindy-chan. Thank you for the review and advice, I ahve changed a few things. My intention was not to make it seem like Tazuka and Akiko were falling so fast, but I was rushed when I was typing the third chapter and just wanted to get it up. Thank you for your advice.
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Title: all 3 chapters
Reviewed By: Sindy-chan On: September 06, 2006 22:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok, great first chapter. that was a good way of introducing the OC. The second chapter was fine. but momo would not do that. he has too much respect for the opposite gender to do that. he might do that in private with the other guys but not in front of a girl like that. the third chapter was going too fast. tezuka does not fall for a girl that fast. his mind is always on tennis. also most people call him tezuka not kunimitsu. unless you watched the english version. it is a nice beginning. i encourage you to continue. you have potential. never give up. yudan sezuni ikou!
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