| "A Series of Impromptu Affairs" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: Mic123 On: October 06, 2017 16:10 PDT
Comment/Review:
Would love to see more of this.
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Reviewed By: ShadowFox0 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2007 01:01 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Let's see, originality seems to be your strongest point if your writing says anything. You came up with a great idea and ran with it with rather terrifyingly great results. Honestly this is a great piece of writing that could probably use another chapter at least to expand on a few points you skimmed over, and of course add to the obvious hentai. Ahem, that aside you worked the story together in a fluid way but thankfully not too fast, you let things develop and come into itself. You also allowed Keitaro to keep a degree of his kind heart by going rather lenient at first and only progressing farther at Sarah's acceptance. I also enjoy how you don't try to avoid the scenarios you write about, you accept the fact Sarah is young completely unlike a lot of writers who would tend to push that fact into the backdrop even if they don't realize. You made sure the audience knew what was happening at all times, congrads. Well i suppose you really didn't need all this analasis if you just wanted to write hentai buuut i couldn't help myself. All in all, a wonderful read.
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Reviewed By: RAW19 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2006 19:12 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn. you know, i've waited a long time for a kei/sarah fic and you certainly delivered. how you set the mood. how you weaved in humor. how it didn't seem too rushed. i'm impressed. i hope you continue future writing.
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Reviewed By: Godslayer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2006 09:35 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed the read, and I hope you continue it.
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Title: Tryst
Reviewed By: WarpWizard [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2006 07:22 PDT
Comment/Review:
Good stuff. Nice senseless lemon. :)
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Title: Sarah?
Reviewed By: blue7zone On: September 15, 2006 11:41 PDT
Comment/Review:
Pretty good initial development,though Sarah being a few years older would have made this a little stronger[at least Keitaro would have had more time to develop an authoritative personality].A little better understanding of the K/N relaionship is necessary IMO
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Title: Keitaro/Sarah, eh?
Reviewed By: A-Z Mark II [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2006 07:15 PDT
Comment/Review:
Not bad; not bad at all. A little sketchy on the support for the behavior displayed and the set-up, but nothing that detracts from the enjoyment of the fic. Good job.
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