Title: FFRG
Reviewed By: Rini Saiyan-jin [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2007 10:16 CST
Comment/Review:
This is a really sweet one-shot. You have utilized the use of beta-readers as evidenced in your end note. To be quite honest, I didn't really notice that many flaws to pick at in this one-shot. The feelings that the writer of the letter is conveyed very well. I also did not notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is also good. I like how he described how things are going with him, with his friends (if thats what Cale and Sekhmet are as I don't know the series), and characterization in that sense is captured nicely. I can sense what each of the person's personality is like. As for the last part of the story, it is also very sweet. Nice job on writing the one-shot. =)
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