| "Kagome's Turn To Shine" Reviews/Comments [ 61 ] |
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Title: Critique
Reviewed By: fanfic fan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2009 19:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fanfic is... not good. It isn't bad, but from a writer with OCD's standpoint, the writing is bad. The story is good, but the grammar and writing style is both confusing and hard to understand. I'm not bashing the fanfic, as I think any kind of creativeness is impressive in this day and age. But I had a hard time reading past chapter one, because I had no clue who was talking, what they were talking about, or even what tense the speech was in. Just thought I should bring this to your attention.
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Reviewed By: Kurai-kitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2009 02:16 CDT
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wow this is great plz update when you have the chance I really want to know what happens
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Reviewed By: Roze On: November 23, 2008 15:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story. I love that your so creative. I cant wait till the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Jaisa Rael [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2008 09:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like this story, keep it up. are u going to give hei a break anytime soon?
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Reviewed By: anon375 On: November 13, 2007 15:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Im not trying to flame but hear me out. You have a good story going but it seems a bit unrealistic to me and that makes it hard to get into the story. When Kagome got the gifts I thought she got too many to keep track of. Another thing was when she got a call from the CIA and compleated 10,000 jobs in a week. Like I said thats too unrealistic. Not to mention (correct me if im wrong) but isnt the CIA only in America? I am assuming this is taking place in Japan so that doesnt really go with the story. I have only read the first few chapters and will continue to read the story. Just thought I would put in my two cents. good luck
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Reviewed By: grrrr.... On: August 03, 2007 00:09 CDT
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Sorry, I just think this is a bit difficult to understand. Dont delete cuz it isnt a flame, I suppose you want flamers to go away and bother others, but I'm just saying, its just hard for me to follow....I suppose it has somthing to do with the story line...or how it was written. Anyways.....um....nope thats pretty much all I have........Buy buy.
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Reviewed By: loopy911 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2007 22:56 CDT
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y so many gifts? and wats a core catcher?
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Title: Guess what you gota another person addicted you your fic....I am not alone right........am I the only one how is addicted....*sigh* such is my life....taking in a title....hehe
Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2007 19:12 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hola....this is a very good story....No I realy mean it its realy good, I was just kinda skiming over cross overs between Inuyasha and Yu Yu Hakusho...and I started reading this one....at first I was realy sad for Kagome....that wasn't koo what they did to her......but she sure showed them.....Normaly Im for a Kagome and Inuyasha paring but this is good to I actrully am starting to hate Kagome's gang (in this story).....I know you don't like flames and this isn't one I just want you to know some of my complaints....but remember I really love this story and I wouldn't want you to stop writing it for the world but any way I noticed since I read it all at once insted of broken up, that there is alot of stuff that didn't make since....I one thing that realy stood out for me was that you said that Kikyo was controlling the Inu gang....so wouln't they have been release when she did the with Kagomes arrow??...and like you said that Kagome made it to where Naraku could never be reincarnated or broght back to life yet he was...that confusses me...and when Kagome was tell the Yu Yu gang her story they were all like "those trador..Im going to kill them if I when I see them"....but later when they over heard what she and Sesshoumaru where talking about they acted as if they never heard it and vowed practicly the same thing...again..........well those are some thing that I could distincly remember....and another thing that bother me...I think it would only me me though because of my rediculouse attention span...was the very long and elaberate explanations of each and every little thing...*twich*....I though that is was realy koo that you were tring to paint the picture in my mind and stuff and I totaly got that I just wish it wasn't so much all at once I realy over whelmed my brain a couple of times....hehe...*sigh*...Im an idout....*sigh*.....but I would never ask you to change how you do things for my sake....this story is too good and if it that, that is makeing the rest realy good then so be it....hehe.............any ways back to the prase of your work...*glint*....I didn't think I could ever bring my self to hate the inu gang....Kikyo yes...but the rest nope...but you sure changed that my blood boils when I read about what they have did and stuff.....I mean what reason did they have to do that non thats what its soo stuped what kind of 'friends' do that.....any way I hope that some wonds can be heald and some of my questions can me answerd.....you are a realy great athor and I am hombled when I read your work.....when you discribe things its as if you have a picture of the object if frunt of you and are explaining what you see...(soooooo what did Kagome do with Inuyasha's blood??....I just remembered)....I realy hope I didn't affend you in any way that would me most terrible....PLEASE UPDATE SOON I REALY DO LOVE THIS FIC........O.O....PRITY PLEASE....PLEASE AND THANKYOU......NYUKA
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Reviewed By: squeefan On: July 19, 2007 16:08 CDT
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awwwww when are you gonna update? it's a great story.
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Reviewed By: Brightshadow4494 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2007 01:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your story is awesome! please update soon!
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Reviewed By: kikyo hater28 On: June 05, 2007 19:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like the part when asango, miroku,inuyasha & the clay pot died if you make another one post it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111
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Reviewed By: kikyo hater28 On: June 05, 2007 18:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really liked it when you said i feel so bad for her ...not it weas awesome!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: kikyo hater28 On: June 05, 2007 18:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is really good !!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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Reviewed By: kikyo hater28 On: June 04, 2007 19:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i freaking love you you freaking rock!!! if you kill kikyo i swear to god i will scream you are a awesome writter !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: kikyo hater28 On: June 04, 2007 19:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i am a kikyo hater to thank you so much for making a story like this !!!!! 1,000,000, thank yous!!!!!
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