| "Shikon School" Reviews/Comments [ 82 ] |
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Reviewed By: Punkrock_grl92 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2007 00:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Luved it!! Just some advise.. I really think that you should space the paragraphs out a little more.(just press 'ENTER' twice after each paragraph instead of just once.) Another thing, at the beginning, you had great detail with Kagome and Sango and what they were wearing, but it took away from the rest of the story. That should be something that should be discribed, but in fewer words and not take up the whole chapter. If you discribe their outfits in every chapter, it will eventually get boring to the readers. Also, the way you had Sango and kagome complimenting each other made them seem as though they were in LOVE with each other. (As in the way they shouldn't..) Don't get me wrong, I'm not an expert. I was just giving you some advise and tryin to tell ya somethin useful that you could use to improve. Your first fic is usually a little rough, but with practice, you can improve. Overall, it was good though!! PS: Sorry for such a long review!! & update ASAP!!
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Reviewed By: miley On: February 11, 2007 17:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey it's me again.your first reviewer.still love the story.can't wait til the next one.can u hurry up.please not tryin to be mean here.i just can NOT wait.wish u luck bye bye.
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Title: inyo
Reviewed By: inyo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2007 16:13 CST
Comment/Review:
ya know how u said that u would update 2 times a week well ch atleast 2 more ch should of been made im not tryin to insult ya and juss ta prove it herres ur compliment:awesome gurl keep up the work and update soon
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Reviewed By: R. S. On: January 31, 2007 15:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome job! I really like this fanfic! can you update a little faster? Sorry, it's just that I cannot wait! Keep up the good work! *winks*
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Title: great job!
Reviewed By: Sarah K. On: January 30, 2007 21:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice job! i love it so far! i also love the song far away! plz update asap!!!
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Reviewed By: l.o. On: January 23, 2007 21:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
kagome + inuyasha sitting in a tree K.I.S.S.I.N.G (you probably know the rest of the song) update asap
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Reviewed By: miley On: January 20, 2007 21:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was a pretty good start.and just to let you know the begining wasnt that boring.it was pretty interesting and funny to say the least.please update soon becuase i can't wait to see what happens next.
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