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| "A Killer On The Run" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: bettychan On: January 25, 2007 14:47 CST
Comment/Review:
That was much, much better. Keep it up. Now, I can't wait to see what happens next.
| Reviewed By: Devil_May_Cry10276 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2007 15:59 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like it keep writing it! What going to happend to Kagome?
| Reviewed By: bettychan On: January 23, 2007 09:28 CST
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Not bad. But could be better. Every time somebody speaks should be a paragraph. If the speaker changes, a new paragraph. Capitalize the first letter of the first word in a new sentence, always. Slow down on your typing. Several sentences seem to have a word or two missing. Example: "Inuyasha don't her bout the man in black." I'm sure that was supposed to be "Inuyasha, don't tell her about the man in black." "spit second" should really be "split second". When Kagome told her mother she would answer the door, she should have said "I'll get it" or "I got it". This story shows promise. Iron out the details and it will be a great story.
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