Reviewed By: artchic [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2007 21:33 CST
Comment/Review:
Well, by all means, I'll be the first to review! :) From your summary it seems like an intriguing plot will develop. Although I don't know the reason for Trunks' actions as of yet, I think it's cool to explore those possbilities of him "embracing" his more Saiyan side. I mean, I know the kids are half human, but a lot of authors seem not to address their Saiyan side unless it's in their fighting. They tend to let the human side water down the Saiyan instincts a little too much at times. I think it would be cool to play around with that. As for your question about Vegeta's OOCness in chapter 2 I'm a little torn. Vegeta seemed a bit softer in the GT era (to me) than you have portrayed him. And I'm sure you get what I mean by soft, not a punk or anything. Your Vegeta sounded more like a Vegeta from Z when he was still struggling with family, love, emotion, etc. like he still hasn't come to terms with it. To me (especially by the end of GT) Vegeta was much more "mellowed" and "open" about his children and how he treated them. I don't know, it just seems like for the era you're writing in Vegeta is a little too "hard." Having said all that I could always be convinced of this Vegeta through further explanation, but that was just my initial reaction to the material. Anyways, just my opinion, you take it and do with it what you will. I know you'll do a fine job with it. As the plot develops I hope to provide you with more of a review towards the story. That's the only reason I didn't do a rating with this review. Until then É
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