| "Forced Beginnings - Black Flowers" Reviews/Comments [ 103 ] |
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Title: ch11
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2008 17:28 CST
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Aww Tristian is so cute and adorable.
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Title: CH 8
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2008 16:49 CST
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That was a very poignant chapter, watching Goku with his desparate relentless heroism being crushed, and the lingering sadness. Very emotive chapter, poOr Goku.
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Title: CH 3 CH 4
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2008 16:10 CST
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Gohan really tried to be a gentleman about the whole thing, even though it was sad, it was still sweet Gohan's concern and consideration. I thought it was interesting the way Bra acted, taking control, maybe by taking control of the situation she can deal with it better, she will be able to block out the fact that her world is falling apart. Interesting to compare to Vegeta's and Pan's which seemed much colder and distant.
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Title: CH2 and CH3
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2008 16:03 CST
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I thought they would have put up more of a fight, they gave in a bit too easily.
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Title: ch1
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2008 15:50 CST
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Wow what a revelation. You really build the suspense very well, as I was left eagerly anticipating each paragraph, in the hopes that they would reveal further clues to this puzzle. A very dramatic opening.
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Title: Forced Beginnings - Black Flowers
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2005 19:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: wynter89 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2005 20:26 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this has got to be one of the most amazing fic i have ever read in my life. the relationships is complex and the situation is so unbelievible yet believible. i cant seem to stop thinking of this, it has stayed in my mind for more then a week. i am hoping pan gets the love she desveres eihter from Vegeta or Goten, mostly Goten forget Trunks. good luck may kami-sama be with you
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Title: Forced Beginnings - Black Flowers
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2005 20:29 CDT
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I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters? Can you write this story on www.adultfanfiction.net
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Reviewed By: bighu On: April 12, 2005 18:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow... that was really good! but i didnt really understand the ending and im not really sure if your going to write more but i think you should because im curious to see what happens to everyone. keep up the good work
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Title: Hmmm....Interesting.
Reviewed By: StealthDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2005 13:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an extremely well written and thought out fanfic. I have read a few db/z/gt fanfics, but this is one of the best I've ever read. It has a good plot, the original characters are good, and the chapters aren't too long. Overall, this is a good read and an enjoyable fic. My congrats to you and I hope you write more fanfics in the future.
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Title: Correction
Reviewed By: harmony23 On: January 28, 2005 22:57 CST
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I meant to say that i hope you keep writing for the DBZ version but again the original is really good writing. You have talent and you make the reader have to think ;)
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Title: YES!!!
Reviewed By: harmony_22 On: January 28, 2005 22:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have been waiting so long for you to update or atleast post something. The original story seems interesting but it got confusing w/ the characters that were not DBZ but still a good piece of writing. I hope u continue and finish the original version if you are planning to do so. I absolutely luv it and have read it several times since i found it on MM. Keep up the good writing and hope you can update soon.
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Reviewed By: The Attacker On: October 07, 2004 09:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story shows technical skills in writing. However it's basis and it's events are well... full of it. I mean do they always wear those collars if not why would they just stand there and let the girls be taken to be screwed?! That's not the way they are! Unless all the characters are supposed to be Out Of Character. Anyway nice writing.
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Reviewed By: fishyfishy On: September 14, 2004 19:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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this is an awesome story r u going to finish it!
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Reviewed By: thavnchick [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2004 19:14 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
its been almost a year wen r u gonna update?>_
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