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| "Released to Destroy" Reviews/Comments [ 21 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] | Title: Too bad this is so ooooold~!
Reviewed By: FakerFace On: October 01, 2011 10:43 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely loved reading this... it's too bad that it hasnt been updated in about 4 years. Still though, it was well written and had a good balance of drama and light hearted fun. :) | Reviewed By: SuperPichu On: June 13, 2011 19:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woah! I've been looking all over the internet for this story! I thought I'd never find it until I, by some random chance, looked up something on releasing a pokemon and whether or not Missingno really destroys your file! I'm SOOOO glad I've found this again! | Title: Good, no?
Reviewed By: Fox_of_red_fire [MediaMiner Member] On: December 07, 2007 14:10 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this story, lots. it's way better then mine. ok, style = 8 for... uh... your cool, i'll go with that. Spelling and stuff= 9, you spell everything right, but I take one point away, since uh... i did? 10 for originality, since i said, you paired my favorite two characters together, and enjoyment Factor = 10, cuz I enjoy anything Tails is in (and doesn't die) overall= 10, because 10s are fun! ok, please, do continue! i'm on standby! o_o
| Title: Hallo
Reviewed By: Fox_of_red_fire [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2007 14:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Saaaay, thanks for reviewing on my story... I have to retaliate for your actions against me, so bwa ha ha ha ha! here's a review, do what you please with it, I don't mind. I gave you a 7 for style of writing, it's always good to use different POVs! gooo different POVs! Spelling and grammer, you said you use spell check, and it's rare to find someone willng to use it, of what spelling errors I have... I don't use spell check, I don't have a writing program that has it, note pad is all I got -_-;;, so you deserve a good rating in there. Originality/Creativity, awesome, you took my two favorite characters from Sonic and paired em up! Enjoyment factor... I enjoy any reading material that has Tails in it. (As long as he doen't die x_X) Mmkay, thanks again for reviewing my story, Bye now!
| Reviewed By: Tails_Worship14 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2007 17:14 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just so you know, I don't write huge reviews. I have to be honest, normally I can't even read yaoi, don't know why, but this is one that I can actually get into. It's well written, the romance between Tails and Shadow seems legit, and I love the plotline. Please add another chapter as soon as possible
| Title: Shadow in the Dark
Reviewed By: Shadow in the Dark [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2007 23:25 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hiya! SD here, you responded to my fic: Lost Memories, Reborn Evil (thanks so much! I agree with you completely; it is SO HARD to get reviews on this site! Also, it's hard to upload new chapters and stuff, which is probably why I spend most of my efforts on FF.net) Anyway, I like this story! I admit, I'm not a really big yoai fan, but Shadow and Tails are just too cute together :P Also I have to say that I enjoy your crazy, sociopathic Shadow (Although I don't know HOW that's possible, I mean he keeps kiling people, and I STILL like him!) And that joke about Sonic looking like a toothpaste add was funny! And also the "Oh darn!" thing. Imagining Shadow looking at teh GUN people, with his crazy incisors and bloodstained form saying: "Oh darn!" had me cracking up XD To explain my rating, well there are a few spelling mistakes here and there, but I'm sure I did the same thing in my fic (they're unavoidable, even with spell check!) But I still definitely am enjoying this fic! The only thing I have to say is that I wish Sonic was a little... well more... He's a bit pathetic, and although I agree that he totally isn't as strong as Shadow, I still think he should be able to do a LITTLE damage...maybe Oh and one thing I was wondering is why Shadow doesn't like Sonic?? (You explained it the other way around) I hope you tell us soon! Great fic, update soon! I'm wondering now what's going to happen to Shadow and the mayor....:D -SD (a.k.a Sholay)
| Title: Chapter 1 Review
Reviewed By: Miashin [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2007 22:58 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The first review in a long series to come. Some grammar errors, and repetitious words really detracted from the writing and kept you from getting a perfect score. That said, I like your style of writing, a little more descriptiveness would help get the mood across better. The way you bold thoughts is distracting and jars the eye too much, causing the story not to flow as well. Changing the bolds to italics would make reading smoother. On a last style note, changing POV (POW is 'prisoner of war' which caused me to have to stop for a second) mid-story, or even near the end of the story, is one of the worst things a writer can do. Not only does it make the flow of the story stagger, in this particular instance it doesn't seem necessary because the story is being presented in the same way as before. I don't see a reason to separate the pre-POV switch and post-POV switch sections. Merge them and it'll flow better. Lastly, if you want to switch POVs don't announce it with 'Tails POV' or 'Shadow POV,' it's distracting. Just throw in a line, or a couple of centered stars, and keep writing. This, once again, improves the flow of the story. All of that nitpicking aside, you write pretty well. All hail Spellchecker I suppose. Now onto plot discussion. I thought Robotnik's first name was 'Ivo,' although I have absolutely no problem with you changing it around. For a first, kind of prequel, chapter this is very good and gets me interested in seeing what will happen when Shadow is finally released. Not to mention finding out how Tails ends up being the one to do it. 50 years of perfect lucidity with nothing to do. Shadow is going to have some serious issues when he finally gets out. I'm thinking sensory overload. And yes, I plan to review on every chapter before reading the next. I'm fully aware that most of the stuff I'm speculating on has already been written up and published. Hey, I like to help peoples review count, it helps them get more readers sooooo. Bah, I've run out of time. I'll get to the next chapter when.....well we'll see. XD Happy writings till then. *waves*
| Reviewed By: Lunarian [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2007 17:26 EDT
Comment/Review:
Eeh I finally am getting around to reading this. Heh Tails is lucky and already has 1000x the amount of memorabilia I do. Tails has his own porn bin like scrooge mcducks money bin, they probably use them for the same reasons as well, sploogey. Not much to comment on, and im being distracted by father belly aching in the other room so its hard to focus. Did you rush when you wrote this? I'm seeing alot of grammar errors or wording that just hurts the eye. And then we reach the hot hedgehog on fox man sex and the quality of writing shoots up. Nice scene though. Hah metal sonic acting like sonic, hehe. The more of Sally you show the more I grow to hate her, she's like nabiki from ranma 1/2, manipulating others for her own benefit. She needs a good smack down courtesy of shadow, show him who was in charge later indeed hmmph. Interesting little insulting game there, I liked the part about being a walking toothpaste add, creative. I look forward to more Shails and GUN destruction.
| Title: Skull Monkey
Reviewed By: SkullMonkey [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2007 00:52 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
More! More! More! Monkey wants more! =P And yeah, I read the entire fiction... a few times. You should do more with Shadow's leads. I liked those bits. Have him smack some sence into Sonic with them. *lightbulb* Robotnik catching him and loading a computer virus into him would suck. T_T poor widdo Shadow. 6-Year-Old PSYCHO! Question for you tho... your idea for Terios' colouring, was that borrowed from Shadow the Hedgehog's 2-player mode? (I finally bothered to check out that mode of the game and discovered an orange shadow and various versions of "Metal Shadow" so I was curious). Anyway, time for this Monkey to take over the world! TTFN!
| Reviewed By: Skull Monkey On: May 25, 2007 19:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I'm usualy just a Shadow and Rouge fan, but this fic had me hooked and reeling in by the first chapter! Great job! I love the memories you made for Shadow on how he was created. And the quote:"...if you learn one thing after being trapped in your own mind for so long it is this: Either get very patient or go insane" Brilliant! Only complaint I have is your confusion between "there" and "their" (Lunarian beat me on the seamen part, but that had some funny mental images). Anyway, keep writing this one. I can't wait to read more! *Thumbs up*
| Reviewed By: Lunarian Unlogged On: May 08, 2007 12:51 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hehe a disclaimer finally lol, better late then never. I always have trouble getting behind the oflacatory part of the relationships in stories, the abundance of smells and thier strength are usually emphasized yet I cant imagine it well. Thanks largely to my own sub standard sense of smell no doubt, unless it is garbage or a skunk I rarely distinguish smells. Haha putting on a show for them, Shadow and Tails seem to be quite shameless suddenly, either that or Tails is so in bliss he isnt catching what he is saying. Ugh with the addition of Snively now I can only picture this Robotnik as that fatass version of that series, could have done without that. Just where was Snively looking that he was so quick to point out it wasa 'he'. Oh my, I wonder if that wasnt a little foreshadowing there, he is seeming interested in this new being. I hope this new OC doesnt follow the addage of too many cooks spoiling the soup or some such hash. Thats my bias talking that wants to scream in anger whenever Shadow doesnt get his airtime. Hah Sally thinking Shadow and Tails relationship would conform to the bunk they put in 'novels', what a silly princess she is. Yes! Go shadow tear her apart for trying to beat around the bush instead of just speaking her mind, less subtlety can be nice. Is it accepted info that Tails is Sally's son? Nice insinuation of Shadow and Maria's relationship hehe kinky. HAHA I love that flip-turn Shadow pulls on Sally, now Tails is a pedophile hehehe. Servers the princess right, her being too hypocritical and nosy. Good for tails getting his own revenge on nosy sally as well. Ah now we get to the intrigue. Eggman actually comes off as semi competent... hmm strange. LOL it seems MS had the same reaction I did. Hehe social life, thats still light years beyond me. Im holdin off lookin at your other fic yet, ill w8t till u got bit more. Still nice chapter, no actual sex yet the innuendo came off splendidly making it heavily lime.
| Title: Bucketters
Reviewed By: Bucketbrain On: May 03, 2007 19:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not too bad at all. So far anyway. I originally wasn't going to review it (I'm strange that way!), but, seeing how eager you are to wanting one... here it is! The aspect of a ShadowxTails fiction was somewhat misplaced and I figured it wouldn't fit with the situation to begin with. However, I seem to have been proved wrongly once again! I have however noticed a couple of minor errors you made (For example, I do remember seeing 'Aunt Sally' wearing an unbuttoned jacket of some kind at some points in the Anime.... may be confusing that with someone else though...) But overall, nothing to seriously under-mine this fiction. Energetic, thrilling, and at the beginning, some heart-stopping stuff! Tails being locked in Shadow's Pod Room was quite an interesting addition to the fiction that not only fitted with the situation, it would more than likely be the case if it was set-out as an Anime or in a re-make of Sonic Adventure 2! If I may make a suggestion, I wouldn't mind another one of those kind of moments, keep the fiction interesting that way. (However, I've been known to giving poor advice, so feel free to ignore me on that one...) Another one is maybe showing a bit more of what Shadow can do when destroying or killing something/one. (Chaos Blast springs to mind, but I'll go for pretty much anything....) Overall, nice fiction! Keep up the good work mate! And be sure to give Lunarian my regards....
| Reviewed By: Lunarian Unlogged On: April 29, 2007 19:53 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hehe wondering if maybe you abuse the readers a little more they may review. Not a bad thought, sometimes they do. It just cant be explained. Aha I love it, you have Shadow being so methodical and calm about the whole thing, letting no room for embaressment or awkward. Aww Tails what a wuss, he disapoints me there. At least Shadow can take it easier then most anyone. Seems like your puttin Tails in the female role, the kind of kiss by mistake and run away cryn without sayin why thing, the kind that had it been anyone but Shadow theyd probably feel that they had done something wrong or bad. LoL Sally's upset with the prudish humans hehe. Gah I spoke too soon... Shadow did play that role to the hilt. Sally's annoyin me more with addin to that 'you dont need to know' deal. Heh interesting psychological thoughts about seeking darkness when upset, Sally seems to think bout humans alot. Very VERY nice backstory work with Shadows thoughts. Rarely does Shadow express how he feels about Gerald and its usually not too positive. Here he assumes he was tampered with and still likes the old guy. Destruction of GUN? I'm all for that! *Rubs hands evilly* Haha that bit about caring voice w/out throwin up is great, shows he cant cross a certain line b4 its just sick to himself. Well well they certainly are starting things off with a bang. Hehe who would ever think Tails would be the irresponsible one in a relationship, so flooded with lust is he. I wonder, is that bit of fox biology true or just thought up? Watch and be amazed at Sonics oblivity. Niceness the two seem be reaching an equality fairly well here. I'll pretend I didnt see that last piece of author notes. Heh I did think you were maybe goin further then suggested at first, I think Tails libido is a hard thing to control especially when it is as raging as here.
| Reviewed By: Lunarian Unlogged On: April 24, 2007 18:20 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Heh cheesier, how are you watching these shows? Torrents? My review may be a little subpar today, I'm feeling lethargic and hot. Good imagery with the chaos emeralds glow. I don't think Sonic has ever told Tails to shut up before, has he? Sounded harsh coming from him... which is fine by me. It always amuses me in these stories where the so-called hero (Sonic) develops hate and anger to the bad guy (Shadow) for killing and then goes around vowing to kill Shadow anyway, that faulty logic is so littered in stories. Definitely a showdown coming on here, insults and all. This fight scene is cool, its like a mix of STH and mortal kombat. Sonic's so outclassed that Shadow feels like a bully still fighting him haha... giving Shadow ultimate healing powers too? Nice, he could beat someone to near death, heal them and do it again! Also for a more hentai use maybe he can regenerate a persons sex drive heh, multiple orgasms with no refractory period. Multicolored side affects lol nice. I wonder how long before Tails starts getting pissed off at Sally for seeing Shadow as a simple weapon. And bunnie's perversion starts showing itself again.. so yeah how far into the series are you anyway? I read somewhere Bunnie and Antione married? Heh is this you practicing for assasin shadow, his gloves of death? I'm still not sure exactly what the 'magic hand' is? Ooooh quite the sweet scene there, Shadow holding Tails downn helplessly so he leans up and gives little, 'chu' kiss.
| Reviewed By: Lunarian-unlogged On: April 20, 2007 23:00 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Heh moochings what I do. The Shadow and Rouge interaction feels a little like something is off, but I still like it. Throwing her come-ons back in her face, and saying he overestimated her heh good jabs. Lol I had to laugh at Tails dietary habits, wonder if that was influenced by vorish thoughts. I have trouble imagining Tails actually eating Rabbit. Heh Tails is in big denial, 'I won't do it', two seconds later hes trying to jam it in. If I was Tails I'd be worried about tearin sumthin from pushin that monster in, he's just too horny lol. Yes I can see your spellin is fine. Lucky little fox seems to be highly sensitive. Hah Shadows got so much $$$ the banks need days to collect the info on it, if Rouge finds that out then she'd really be tryn to snag him. Geh? Blaze and Big? Wow talk about outta nowhere. I dont even kno any bout Blaze cept her looks in the first place, but thats gotta some story for her to fall to Big. Interesting, he's softening already.. Shadow that is. Aha that bastard general of GUN, I hated that guy. Heh shadows gotta stop being absent minded when he teleports... then again he dont mind much. That chapter actually ended on a cute note, with Tails wrapping his namesakes around Shadow and cuddling all possesive like. Aye, I enjoyed it. And also agree it was done well, it flowed very well with the dialogue. Heh if Bunnie tries to force sex on the two, they can each start snacking on Rabbit, that should deter any agression nicely... unless she is even MORE depraved and kinky then advertised.
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