| "A Sad Live Deserves More" Reviews/Comments [ 49 ] |
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Reviewed By: Chaoswizkid [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2007 19:38 EDT
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40-50 chapters of THIS!? I do believe I'll hang around for quite some time. Please, keep posting. This is probably the best story I've read in a long time, and will definately become a Hentai epic. With so many chapters, not even Home/Bodies, A Boy Who Loves His Work, or A Girl Called Anna could stand to that, and they are as much if not less immersive than this story.
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2007 16:46 EDT
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I liked this chapter and cool a new member of the fox clan also know as the orgy clan lol sorry had to say it so what is going to happen with Sasuke sorry I just don`t like him bt will he be made another member of the fox clan oh yeah and I agree with Soul of the Phoenix Temari would make a good addition to the harem so would Tenten,Ino,Kurenai I guess Sakura would be ok and Shizune when she comes into the picture bt thats just me and what I think would also be a good addition to the harem anyways keep up the great work and update soon please
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Reviewed By: Soul of the Phoenix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2007 21:54 EDT
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I think more girls should be added to this little harem. Temari might make a good addition.
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Reviewed By: Chaoswizkid [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2007 19:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well done! This may turn out to be a hentai epic. Please continue, as your unique look on both plot and the hentai factor flows well together, and that is what great hentai stories need to have. I'll be waiting.
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2007 03:43 EDT
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Damn. That was hot. VERY hot. Actually, it was so hot, it caused my computer to burst into flames *points to CPU, that now is adorned with scorch marks* but I digress. I loved the latest chapter (and the update was quick, so that rocked!) and I see some possibilities. Still, do you want Hinata to become the third member of their team, or is The Aki kid gonna remain on, or die or get transfered? I don't really know, and to be honest, I'm not sure. Still, the scene with Haku here has made me rethink things a little with my own Naruto story at this point. Hmmm, what do I want to do with little Haku-chan? Anyway, lets just see where the story goes from here, shall we? Later
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2007 19:02 EDT
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WOW I got to say that again WOW I loved that Hinata the horny little devil she is taking it DP I was wodering what is going to happen now with the 3 and will Haku share Naruto with another girl if so I hope its with either Ino,Anko or Miko I really hopw it would be Miko and Ino but thats just me and hell no with Naruto sharing Haku with another guy oh yeah by the way I cann`t stand there teammate in my opinion he is an ass who could be killed off for his cockiness I kindadoubt about would care well I wouldn`t anyways update soon and keep up the great work
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Reviewed By: Soul of the Phoenix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2007 16:49 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You want to know what I think of this story? Well, I'll admit that this story is interesting, though your writing style needs a little polishing. The lemons are top notch too, especially that threesome at the end of chapter in this latest chapter. I hope to see more of those, but maybe with some variations. Good work so far. Keep it up!
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Reviewed By: Soul of the Phoenix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2007 08:36 EDT
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You know, it just occured to me, but if Haku is so ashamed of her "other parts" why doesn't she just use that real transformation technique Naruto learned from the forbidden scroll. One poof and she'd be all girl. And since her demonic chakra is so potent, the energy requirement shouldn't be an issue.
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2007 01:12 EDT
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I thought this Chapter was pretty good but when you said something about making a pairig of Anko and Miko I hate to say it but I don`t think much of that I would rather see Haku share Naruto with both Miko and Anko or maybe just share him with Miko only or maybe Naruto could share Haku with Miko since she knows but just having Anko and Miko as a pair because they both know how it feels to be betrayed by someone they love OH WELL I guess I should just shut up since everytime I review to other authors stories about pairing where it seems everybody and I mean everybody would rather see Naruto paired up with only Hinata than anybody else so I will just shut up and keep my suggestions to myself and only review so keep up the good work and update soon please
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2007 15:58 EDT
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Oh yeah will there be anymore lemons in your story I hope so
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2007 15:57 EDT
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Wow that was a cool chapter and you should have Miko take what Haku said as and offer to join them or maybe have Miko and Haku or Naruto go at it why I say with Haku since Miko knows about her oh well I cann`t wait till you update again and by the way I am wolf when I review stories on AFF.net
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 19:12 EDT
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I really like this story and I cann`t wait to read more oh yeahand I am sorryto rush you but you said the next chapter would be up in a day or two and it has been 5 days now heck you could have 2 chapters up by now oh well I guess update whenever and sorry again for rushing you
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Reviewed By: Kai3anime [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2007 20:59 EDT
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This is awesome please UPDATE soon.
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2007 14:39 EDT
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I really like this story I am just wondering who will be there teammate and also your saying Naruto is related to Sasuke so will that get out or will it e kept quiet meaning Sasuke won`t know I guess it would be cool if he finds out just to see what he does and what Sakura thinks about it oh well I just hope that you will update real soon because I cann`t wait to read more so update soon and keep up the good work
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2007 14:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
well, I guess you put this story up somewhere else first (Fanfic.net I guess first). Whatever. I definitely thought this story was pretty cool when I read through it (and Haku as a true Hermaphrodite is pretty awesome to me; point though, it's pretty rare to be a hermaphrodite to some degree and still be fertile. In fact, it's under one in a billion odds I think) Still, it's too COOL! Plus Naruto not being such an idiot, goes automatically. In canon, Naruto doesn't like guy on guy action (note manga issue 347, Naruto looks Horrified when he sees Konohamaru doing his Double Knockout guys jutsu), though I do think it's more akin to how he acted earlier in the series, what you have. Point is, to me, Naruto seems quite intelligent, but he always holds back so people don't get hurt because of him. And you show this quite well. If he shows his true skills at any time, the council would think it's because of Kyuubi taking over, and order his execution. So, I love your characterization of Naruto. Still, there's more to Haku than what you've shown. Please, think about Haku's personality, and how you think he/she would act, think, that sort of thing. Show some natural fears and more of his/her sweet personality. It's there, and it is honest. Alright, I'm out of ideas for suggestions, so All I got to say is this story rocks. Later man.
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