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| "Minoue" Reviews/Comments [ 521 ] | | Pages (35): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] | Reviewed By: Milareppa [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2008 07:18 EDT
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Apologies for the length of this! It was good to see that Kagura's standing her ground. I don't blame her for wondering about Sesshoumaru's commitment - everything he's said, both to Inuyasha and Kagura, suggests he's still fighting it. Despite its unexpectedness, she's embraced it. Kagura's right to send a message she will not be used, he has to resolve his reservations. It seems they trust each other, but not yet enough - and that makes them vulnerable. Naraku could yet make Sesshoumaru's fear of being attacked through a mate a reality. I like the way Sango and Miroku are reaching for a thread of sanity. It seems like they feel out-of-control right now but are level-headed and strong enough to hang onto a lifeline so they're not overwhelmed by the situation. They both realise the potential they've found in each other is too important to throw away with stupidity. It's good to see that while Inuyasha and Kagome reached a decision on how to approach the problem, they know agreeing on a course of action is only the first half of the battle - sticking to the agreement is the harder half. I'm sure they'll get there in the end. I notice a similarity in these three relationships - the woman is not afraid to stand her ground to ensure the relationship doesn't ruin her self-respect thus keeping the man involved respectful of her. Kikyou doesn't seem to have this self-confidence. She appears to be willing to give up her very self for a man. If she cannot respect herself then men won't either. I know that so far she hasn't indicated she's after love, just money, but the fact that she's willing to demean her own sense of self for money, does suggest her self-respect can only be measured in terms of physical wealth. The fact that she has some idea of what Naraku is after and planning puts her into an interesting position. At the moment, she's clearly driven by selfishness - she appears to only see a person who's interested in someone she has a strong desire to hurt. But I'm interested to see what she ultimately ends up doing with her unique position - could things go too far for her to stomach or will she remain bitter to the end? I've not enjoyed Kikyou's portrayal in this story, but this chapter makes her interesting. She's such a contrast to Kagome, Sango and Kagura. They're the women who are truly strong - they don't compromise who they are to get what they want. Kikyou is tragic. It's nice to see Jii-chan learnt his lesson, but he's easily flustered when caught on the spot. That's very human. He's not built for intrigue and he's not a liar. He's very vulnerable but he's trying to do the right thing. After his mistakes, it does feel like too little, too late. Hopefully, Sesshoumaru's put some good men on guard at the shrine to help out - although I fear they may be no match for Naraku. Hopefully, Myouga's information will help the gang - unless Bankotsu's scratching means that Myouga was there on the wrong night to the really good information (if Myouga's the cause at all). Confirmation that they're definitely interested in the Higurashi shrine might be enough to begin a strategy against Naraku, especially if Myouga's successful in locating Naraku's base of operations. It feels like the Higurashi shrine will soon be in for a rough ride.
| Reviewed By: kitty008 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2008 04:58 EDT
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Wow, things are starting to turn... i wonder what will happen next. This is a great AU! Please keep up the good work! :3
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2008 21:34 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter. And Sesshoumaru is deservedly in the doghouse with Kagura. Arrogance and power aside, it still would have to hurt a woman to have her mate deny theur relationship, even in private to his own brother. As for Inuyasha and Kagome, I'm glad that they cleared the air. It's just sad that it had to go to that extreme before Inuyasha would admit what he needed. Hopefully, though, after all this, it won't happen again. But, finally, as for Kikyo, what an utter slut. Her two partners are almost as nasty as she is, but she gets extra filth points for allowing herself to be demeaned that way. I just hope that Inuyasha and company are ready for the storm coming their way. I look forward to reading the next one.
| Title: Chapter Twenty Two
Reviewed By: FarAwayEyes [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2008 14:52 EDT
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I'm not surprised that the Chinese translator was targeting Inuyasha personally in his mistranslations. What a disgusting thing for him to do to ruin the exhibition and insult Sesshomaru that way. It seems that people will take cheap shots at Inuyasha no matter where they're from. It's pretty foolish on his part, if you ask me. Just because Inuyasha is a "half-breed" it doesn't mean he's stupid. It's amazing how people think that about those different them from them. I suppose it's easier. I have a funny feeling Sesshomaru won't tolerate such behavior, if those guards herding him away means anything. Poor Miroku. He must feel so guilty now for going off on his own and now this happens. I'm glad he punched that guy in the face for being such a prick, though. He deserved it. I feel so bad for Sango. She's so private about her scar and the circumstances around it and now she's stuck in a public place with no way out. It's horrible what that man said to her, considering that he's wrong about her and has no idea why she has such a terrible scar. I do hope Miroku will find her, even though she's locked herself away from everyone. Sango's going to have to learn to trust him and her new friends because it'll be vital down the road. I'd also say that at this point she really doesn't have much of a choice in the matter if she'd like to ever go home again. I was right. Miroku does feel guilty for Sango's mishap. He's getting to that panicked stage as he can't find her and has no idea where she might have gone. It's a far cry from the man we were first introduced to that spent his time womanizing and hopping from one bed to the next. His care and concern is starting to shine through here. Poor Miroku. I'm not surprised that Sesshomaru trusted him over the drunk man, though. Considering that man was a party crasher, Sesshomaru really didn't have any obligation to him. It's nice to see him rely on his brother, too, for the Chinese translations that way. It certainly averted any long term damage the other guy could have caused between them. I get the feeling that Sesshomaru takes his position very seriously, be it just an art curator rather than a mighty lord. He doesn't sluff off or treat it disparagingly as some might think he would. I do hope that Kagome and Miroku will be able to convince Sango out of her bathroom so they can help her out. It sounds like it'll only be a longer night before it's all over. Leave it to Kagome to reassure Sango that they wouldn't stop being her friend because of a scar. It's terrible that Sango has it, but it's not her fault and it doesn't make her a monster by any means. I'm glad Kagome handled the situation. It's just like her to take charge of a situation like that and tell people what to do. I'm glad Sesshomaru listened, too. He's not big on taking orders from others, although he is much more mellow in this story. If anything, this situation should let Sango know that she has dear friends who will do anything to help and won't judge. After all the bad things that happened that night, it'll only strengthen their friendship, I'm sure. And despite letting the guy go that attacked her, I have a funny feeling that he won't get away with it for long. He shouldn't, either. It was so sweet of Miroku to pick Sango up---and so trusting of Sango to let him. I look forward to catching up on the rest!
| Title: THE ULTIMATE SMACK DOWN!
Reviewed By: TAJE [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2008 11:54 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
DING, DING, DING! Ladies & Gentleman, eyes on the center ring. Loved this chapter!Knew that Kaguara could hold her own especially against the ice queen. You wrote this famously. Great!
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2008 11:36 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love that confrontation with Sesshomaru's mother. It sounds so hilarious and Kagura is the perfect one to confront her. The only better one would be having Sesshomaru's mother trying to attack Inuyasha in Kagome's presence, after Kagome lost her temper the bitch would be motes of purified light. It was a good idea to have Myouga to check the place out first with the help of Kirara. I hope nothing happens to Myouga during this reconnaissance or Inuyasha will never forgive himself, he bad mouths the flea but he does really care about him too. I can't wait to see how this all works out.
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2008 11:36 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love that confrontation with Sesshomaru's mother. It sounds so hilarious and Kagura is the perfect one to confront her. The only better one would be having Sesshomaru's mother trying to attack Inuyasha in Kagome's presence, after Kagome lost her temper the bitch would be motes of purified light. It was a good idea to have Myouga to check the place out first with the help of Kirara. I hope nothing happens to Myouga during this reconnaissance or Inuyasha will never forgive himself, he bad mouths the flea but he does really care about him too. I can't wait to see how this all works out.
| Reviewed By: Darknessdawns [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2008 05:59 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Loved this chapter especially the conversation about Kagura and Sesshy's mom. Now that was creative and hillarious. ^_^
| Reviewed By: Milareppa [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2008 15:56 EDT
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I've followed this story, so far, mainly for the Miroku and Sango storyline, and the growing danger for the Higurashi shrine - but I think this chapter belongs to Kagura. She stole the show. I like how you understated the power Sesshoumaru's mother must surely have - "nearly equal in rank to him" says it all. We know how powerful Dad was, for a woman to be nearly his equal, she must be formidable. And, of course, with a son like Sesshoumaru, there must surely be no doubt. Which makes Kagura's success a novel on just what she's capable of, when freed from all restraints. Which sounds just about right to me. Kagura was a force of nature in the manga, and it feels right that a creature so connected to elemental wind would be capable of being so dangerous (which itself speaks volumes on Naraku for being able to enslave her). It makes perfect sense that a woman could only hold Sesshoumaru's interest if she herself was strong, powerful and willfil. Nothing like a challenge to keep a relationship interesting! It would seem they've got a very good understanding of each other already - Kagura can read his moods, he understands her jealousy. Given the comment in the previous chapter when Kagura included Sesshoumaru in her sweeping statement about dog-youkai being possessive about mates and in this chapter, where Sesshoumaru restrains her jealousy, it makes me wonder if they've already dealt with "interferences". There's an equally understated understanding between Sesshoumaru and Inuyasha as well - Sesshoumaru knew what the subject of Kikyou can do to Inuyasha, and they're communicating with their eyes. No doubt at all that they're brothers. :) I liked Sango's comment about Kirara protecting her by transforming at a distance. I thought that was a very nice touch - and very sensible in this hidden-youkai world you've created. It's the little touches that make a world real. :)
| Reviewed By: hemlockglade On: July 17, 2008 13:29 EDT
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I *love* the dialogue about Sess!Mom - laugh out loud funny at so many lines - "Sesshomaru-sama has a mother?" .. "So you have met her," .. and my favorite, "She's [Kagura's] even as pretty as you are!" I haven't laughed this hard in a long time. Though now I wonder what kind of trouble Myouga is going to get into (only human, hmm? … guess he'll find out the hard way). Still greatly enjoying the story and can't wait for more!
| Reviewed By: Gin Blossom On: July 16, 2008 21:26 EDT
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I loved this one, mainly because of Kagura! Well done!
| Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2008 20:09 EDT
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ROFL Okay, I admit that I haven't been keeping up with this story. However, I thought I'd have a look when I saw that it had been updated. OMG! Kagura was awesome! Now I HAVE to go back and read just to see if you actually have any of the scenes from the meeting with Sesshoumaru's mother. That was great! Well written, as always. ^_^ Snow
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2008 19:36 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, wow! I LOVED this chapter. It was HILARIOUS! Kagura is Sesshoumaru's perfect match for sure. She could not have handled his bitch of a mother any better. The only thing Sessh's mom respects is power....and Kagura showed her plenty of that and then some. And, let's face it, Sesshoumaru would have run roughshod over anyone less proud than he was. So, he definitely met his match. EXCELLENT characterization. I am still snickering over this chapter...it's that good. I can't wait to read the next one!
| Reviewed By: Kinozee On: July 08, 2008 11:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wrote this review on your LJ, but it didn't show up, so I'm leaving it here for you as well: I've been a big fan of Minoue ever since chapter one, and I look forward to every week or so when you write a new one... but I've got to say that this chapter kind of turned me off almost completely. :/ I think you've written both Inuyasha and Kagome completely out of character here, and while you're allowed to blur some lines for an AU fic, I think rape is more like redrawing the lines entirely. Even in his Youkai form, Inuyasha was always violent, not lustful. I suppose you could call him Animalistic, which somewhat fits, but it isn't realistic to say that any animal would continue to mate when intruded upon by a perceived challenger -- they would fight. So if you're trying to say the Youkai world is different, you've created something completely new here and I have to tell you honestly that I don't like it. Rape is never "understandable" or "forgivable" or "OK." Never. And rape is what we're talking about here... to the point where Kagome was crying and trying to pull away and saying "no." Whether or not it felt good, nothing makes that ok, and I don't think Kagome is a weak enough character to be steamrolled by something like that. You don't just turn around and say "oh, you raped me... but you were an animal at the time so it's ok." If I (or any other self respecting woman, I feel) were Kagome, that would be the end of a relationship for me, and at the very least I'd be slightly traumatized by the fact that the person I feel closest to is capable of violating me in the most horrible way -- pretty much at whim. I also feel like, with Kagome's miko powers, she should have been able to repel Inuyasha if she'd wanted to (which she clearly did). We've seen her use those powers in your writing before, and I don't think she would have hesitated to use them here... unless you're saying that Kagome holds Inuyasha's safety before her own, which would be another example of you taking her out of character. Anyway... I really don't want to be rude; I've honestly enjoyed all of your writing up until this point -- but so flippantly having the main character rape his fiance and her be OK with that sends a horrible message to anyone reading, and that's where I have to draw the line. You disappointed me with this chapter. :(
| Title: FEUDAL ASSOCIATION
Reviewed By: inufan625 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2008 06:34 EDT
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