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| "Minoue" Reviews/Comments [ 521 ] | | Pages (35): [ « ‹ 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 › » ] | Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 20, 2008 07:26 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter. The talk with Kagome was Sango was good; I especially enjoyed Sango's revenge on that little jerk who took her virginity, lol. I hate guys like that! As for Naraku and Kikyo, those two are filthy! They definitely deserve each other, but.......YUCK! LOL.
| Title: Chapter Twenty
Reviewed By: Far Away Eyes On: May 04, 2008 15:45 EDT
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I'm kinda getting caught up, if you consider I'm still on chapter twenty. I like how you had them have a nice, quiet outing shopping and sharing a meal. We've seen them come together as a team under duress, but here we can see them get to know one another and become better friends. And, although they've only known each other, at least Sango in this group, for a short time, they all seem extremely comfortable with one another. They aren't trying to force anything, and Sango seems to be easing right into their dynamics without too much awkwardness or difficultly. Inuyasha, of them all, seems the most comfortable. Regardless of his heritage and background, he is at ease with these people, enough so to tease Kagome about kissing him after eating spicy foods and then to take Miroku's comment without losing his temper. I'll say it again, to those not following your AU closely and only familiar with the manga/anime, especially the early story lines, would think he's OOC, but he's not. He's that much more matured and relaxed without losing his cautious edge. Somehow it doesn't surprise me that Sesshomaru could pacify Jii-Chan with the lure of wearing his formal robes to the big event. I think it's funny that he had to have his foot stomped on before he could say something offensive, although I doubt Sesshomaru, as he's aged to this point, would have done much more than snort. He's not as rash about eliminating offenders as he probably was in the past. I like Sango's wet dream. It was hot and sensual, yet awkward, as it should be. I like how we don't know who it is until she wakes up, because it looks like it might be the beginning of a lemon between Kagome and Inuyasha. This also lets us see that Sango has just as much interest in Miroku, and that she's uncomfortable with it because of their status. She also seems to know that Miroku's reputation is part of how he protects himself, something I don't think the majority of the other women he sleeps with understand. I liked the descriptions of them getting ready for Sesshomaru's fancy party. I think Kagome's very in tune to Inuyasha's moods, because she's absolutely right that he's nervous. He should and shouldn't be at the same time. He's still a hanyou and therefore can still find ridicule from those who are demonic, but at the same time he's got the backing of Sesshomaru. I'm confused that the demons there would think his mother was the youkai and not his father. Wouldn't they know Sesshomaru's true nature or does he hide it even from them in these settings? Or is it the humans he associates with that think he's human? They would be mightily surprised to find out who and what he is, I'm sure. I also think Inuyasha is nervous about his brother's party because of their bad blood in the past. I think they're still trying to mend the fences and get to know one another, so it's hard for him to just go and not be anxious. I don't see Sesshomaru reversing his actions when it comes to his brother at this point. Why would he? Even if he's come to terms with Inuyasha, he still works towards his goals and his motivations are very rooted in how a situation will benefit him. Having Inuyasha as an ally rather than an enemy or indifferent and neutral is the best option for him. I also enjoy the fact that, in his own way, it's Sesshomaru's way of admitting he was wrong, something he almost never does. The descriptions of the clothes were lovely, but I must admit, even though I unload apparel truck, fashion is not my thing. I have no idea anything about the shoes in the story. I can see them the way you've described their colors and such, but brand names mean nothing. Inuyasha tux, by far, has to be the best, though. Several people put him into tuxes in their AUs and the like, but this one seems to fit him better than all of those. And he clipped his claws? Does he do that often? I would think it'd hurt or put him at a disadvantage if he needs to defend himself. I look forward to Sesshomaru's party.
| Reviewed By: ravenreux, NLI On: May 03, 2008 15:12 EDT
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First off, congrats on all your wins and nominations with the IYFG. You deserve them all. Second, I absolutely love the turn you've taken by throwing Kagura in with the good guys. I think it gives the fic a nice little twist, along with Koga teaming up with them to hunt down Naraku. I can't wait to find out what'll happen next...so, thanks for sharin!! 'Til next time!~Reux
| Reviewed By: hemlockglade On: May 02, 2008 12:21 EDT
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I love the little bits of canon that get mixed in - Kagome riding on Inuyasha's back, Miroku "distracting" Sango… Though I also like Kouga getting put in his place by his alpha bitch! (ah, if only Ayame had a little more guts in the series). And Naraku is truly evil… I wonder, did he listen to the people in the freezer pounding on the door until the last one died? Now the gang has a better idea of the amoral enemy they're dealing with, and what he's capable of. Still lurking and enjoying the story - can't wait for more!
| Title: Minoue Reviews.
Reviewed By: vikikibouki@hotmail.com On: April 29, 2008 08:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is good, really good. You have a very unique way of captivating your readers, my friend. I can't wait for the next chappie! Kudo's Cathy!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: Gin Blossom On: April 28, 2008 01:29 EDT
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Excellent chapter. You are certainly turning Naraku into a first class monster. Well done!
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2008 00:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ohhhh.... frozen bodies.... ewww.... and sick....
| Reviewed By: magedelbene [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2008 23:28 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent chapter!!! Each step they take we get to know a bit more about Naraku, and it's pretty scary. Really you are writing a thriller, and I love it! You are doing an excellent job in here, it amazes me how deep you develop the different characters, the way you work them, really it's a hard job but you're doing it with an impressive mastership. Incredible how much you grew up as a writer, been this story a living prove. Keep going DEL, although I love all your stories since "She is like the wind" and all your short ones, this is going to be your masterpiece! Till the next one, LOL Great job dear!! :hugs:
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2008 22:15 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter. MAN, Naraku is a fiend. Whathe did to those poor people was horrible. He has got to be eliminated, no question. I look forward to the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2008 17:36 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice building of suspense happening before the fight with Naraku really starts. I like how Kanna is starting to regret not leaving Naraku before. Is Kohaku going to have memory flashes of what Naraku made him do? Is he going to recognize Sango as sister when they see each other again? I can wait until you get to the relevant chapters for the answers to my questions. I was good to see Inuyasha carrying Kagome on his back, I was starting to miss that. Jaken was interestingly updated. I think you hit it well when you have him dealing with computers, it would suit him. It was also a good introduction to Ayame and dealing with Kouga and his antics. I wasn't surprised with what was found in the freezer after the warning from Jaken. I think it emphasized Naraku's evil well. I am waiting eagerly for the next update.
| Reviewed By: hemlockglade On: April 09, 2008 11:01 EDT
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Awww - love the M/S moment (Miroku even managed to restrain his "cursed hand" - heh heh). And the plot continues to thicken - I'll continue to lurk and can't wait for the next chapter!
| Title: Chapter Nineteen
Reviewed By: Far Away Eyes On: April 06, 2008 22:38 EDT
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The more I read of this story, the more I think that it is probably your best long work. I really enjoy how you've captured all of the characters essence in this AU setting so well and wove a plot that is both familiar yet new and interesting. I like how in the beginning of this chapter we see Sango struggling with her preparations for going out later that night to celebrate Inuyasha and Kagome's engagement. This is a side of Sango oft overlooked by many fanficwriters, I think because it's harder to explore and capture. She's strong and capable, yet vulnerable and shy and while we see her alone here we get that sense clearly. And the fact that she does acknowledge her emerging attraction to Miroku comes across as realistic as opposed to locking her in the mold of the anime/early manga as we see so often. I like how Ji-chan pressed the issue with Inuyasha about Kagome without the silly antics. They're nice and quaint in both the anime/manga because we so rarely see his character, but here it makes sense to have him approach it realistically without any sutras. And while Inuyasha's response seems to be out of character in canon-verse, we have to remember his age and experiences within the AU and then it makes perfect sense and fits. Inuyasha may have some insecurities, but for the most part he is rather stable and self-assured. I haven't really seen him have any self-hate or doubt concerning his status, outside of the Kikyo-incident that is. Because he has that confidence, I think it's easier for him to express himself. I think it's funny that Inuyasha wears Ralph Lauren. The idea of him wearing anything name brand just seems---odd. You know, unlike Kagome, I've never had any trouble with Miroku's butt fascination---just his lack of self-restraint. For a Buddhist monk he's not very good at that part sometimes. The right butt can be very attractive after all. Poor Miroku, and even when he DOES try trouble seems to find him anyways. What slut that girl was. Miroku seemed, at the beginning of this story, to be rather empty and full of self-loathing, hence sleeping around the way he was. Here we see that growth him trying to get away from that and the feeling that he knows more than ever that his previous lifestyle was a mess and an embarrassment. That girl's lucky Kagome didn't hear that comment or we'd see a pile of ash, I think. I liked the bands that they chose for their engagement. I know quite a few people consider it to be cliché, but it makes sense that both Inuyasha and Sesshomaru are fairly financially well-off. To be as old as they are and to be destitute makes little sense. They would have seen things slowly change over time and evolve to a point where they could keep up and therefore accumulate considerable wealth to keep themselves fairly comfortable. And, considering they would probably be able to know how to survive this long doing so, they would have more than that to afford the extras in this life. And yet, it seems that Inuyasha shies away from it at all cost if he can help it. He would rather not surround himself with extravagances that are unnecessary. I think that would come from his upbringing and the times he struggled to survive in the past. I think it would be fairly interesting to hear more about that past, be it in connection with Sesshomaru's or not. In all, I find the story fascinating and well told. I'll be curious to see what happens next!
| Reviewed By: sovereigntytoolazytobothersigninginatschool On: April 06, 2008 20:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
poor Jii-chan... to think that something you did may cause your family havic.
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 20:19 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter. Although I hate that Kagome's family may be in danger, I'm not surprised. Naraku, clearly, is capable of anything, so Inuyasha and the others are right to be casutious. Sango's story gets sadder each time you hear it. And Naraku still managed to find a way to get more disgusting; I'm glad that Kagura was able to get away from him. I just hope that her tie to naraku is permanently broken. I look forward to the next update.
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 18:29 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well at least the jewel isn't inside Kagome this time. Poor Sango worrying about her brother in Naraku's hands. And poor Kanna being used and discarded like she was, I wonder if she will at least be willing to go with Kagura or whomever is sent to rescue her now. Does it occur to anyone that they now have a wonderful opportunity to set a trap for Naraku using Kagura. Kagura could contact Naraku and tell him that she had ended up in the hospital but not that she is aware the defibrillator is broken and removed. If phrased correctly Naraku might believe her. Hopefully Naraku won't find out about the jewel being at the shrine and go after Kagome's family, or if he does that he goes after them when Kagome is there to purify him or the demons he sends. Inuyasha is going to have his hands full protecting Kagome, her family, and Sango. Then there is Miroku to consider, he will want to protect Sango himself so he will be re-training his spiritual powers and help train Kagome's so she can help protect her family and Sango. I am really looking forward to the rest of this story.
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