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| "Minoue" Reviews/Comments [ 521 ] | | Pages (35): [ « ‹ 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 › » ] | Title: Minoue Reviews.
Reviewed By: vikikibouki@hotmail.com On: April 29, 2008 08:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is good, really good. You have a very unique way of captivating your readers, my friend. I can't wait for the next chappie! Kudo's Cathy!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: Gin Blossom On: April 28, 2008 01:29 EDT
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Excellent chapter. You are certainly turning Naraku into a first class monster. Well done!
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2008 00:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ohhhh.... frozen bodies.... ewww.... and sick....
| Reviewed By: magedelbene [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2008 23:28 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent chapter!!! Each step they take we get to know a bit more about Naraku, and it's pretty scary. Really you are writing a thriller, and I love it! You are doing an excellent job in here, it amazes me how deep you develop the different characters, the way you work them, really it's a hard job but you're doing it with an impressive mastership. Incredible how much you grew up as a writer, been this story a living prove. Keep going DEL, although I love all your stories since "She is like the wind" and all your short ones, this is going to be your masterpiece! Till the next one, LOL Great job dear!! :hugs:
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2008 22:15 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter. MAN, Naraku is a fiend. Whathe did to those poor people was horrible. He has got to be eliminated, no question. I look forward to the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2008 17:36 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice building of suspense happening before the fight with Naraku really starts. I like how Kanna is starting to regret not leaving Naraku before. Is Kohaku going to have memory flashes of what Naraku made him do? Is he going to recognize Sango as sister when they see each other again? I can wait until you get to the relevant chapters for the answers to my questions. I was good to see Inuyasha carrying Kagome on his back, I was starting to miss that. Jaken was interestingly updated. I think you hit it well when you have him dealing with computers, it would suit him. It was also a good introduction to Ayame and dealing with Kouga and his antics. I wasn't surprised with what was found in the freezer after the warning from Jaken. I think it emphasized Naraku's evil well. I am waiting eagerly for the next update.
| Reviewed By: hemlockglade On: April 09, 2008 11:01 EDT
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Awww - love the M/S moment (Miroku even managed to restrain his "cursed hand" - heh heh). And the plot continues to thicken - I'll continue to lurk and can't wait for the next chapter!
| Title: Chapter Nineteen
Reviewed By: Far Away Eyes On: April 06, 2008 22:38 EDT
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The more I read of this story, the more I think that it is probably your best long work. I really enjoy how you've captured all of the characters essence in this AU setting so well and wove a plot that is both familiar yet new and interesting. I like how in the beginning of this chapter we see Sango struggling with her preparations for going out later that night to celebrate Inuyasha and Kagome's engagement. This is a side of Sango oft overlooked by many fanficwriters, I think because it's harder to explore and capture. She's strong and capable, yet vulnerable and shy and while we see her alone here we get that sense clearly. And the fact that she does acknowledge her emerging attraction to Miroku comes across as realistic as opposed to locking her in the mold of the anime/early manga as we see so often. I like how Ji-chan pressed the issue with Inuyasha about Kagome without the silly antics. They're nice and quaint in both the anime/manga because we so rarely see his character, but here it makes sense to have him approach it realistically without any sutras. And while Inuyasha's response seems to be out of character in canon-verse, we have to remember his age and experiences within the AU and then it makes perfect sense and fits. Inuyasha may have some insecurities, but for the most part he is rather stable and self-assured. I haven't really seen him have any self-hate or doubt concerning his status, outside of the Kikyo-incident that is. Because he has that confidence, I think it's easier for him to express himself. I think it's funny that Inuyasha wears Ralph Lauren. The idea of him wearing anything name brand just seems---odd. You know, unlike Kagome, I've never had any trouble with Miroku's butt fascination---just his lack of self-restraint. For a Buddhist monk he's not very good at that part sometimes. The right butt can be very attractive after all. Poor Miroku, and even when he DOES try trouble seems to find him anyways. What slut that girl was. Miroku seemed, at the beginning of this story, to be rather empty and full of self-loathing, hence sleeping around the way he was. Here we see that growth him trying to get away from that and the feeling that he knows more than ever that his previous lifestyle was a mess and an embarrassment. That girl's lucky Kagome didn't hear that comment or we'd see a pile of ash, I think. I liked the bands that they chose for their engagement. I know quite a few people consider it to be cliché, but it makes sense that both Inuyasha and Sesshomaru are fairly financially well-off. To be as old as they are and to be destitute makes little sense. They would have seen things slowly change over time and evolve to a point where they could keep up and therefore accumulate considerable wealth to keep themselves fairly comfortable. And, considering they would probably be able to know how to survive this long doing so, they would have more than that to afford the extras in this life. And yet, it seems that Inuyasha shies away from it at all cost if he can help it. He would rather not surround himself with extravagances that are unnecessary. I think that would come from his upbringing and the times he struggled to survive in the past. I think it would be fairly interesting to hear more about that past, be it in connection with Sesshomaru's or not. In all, I find the story fascinating and well told. I'll be curious to see what happens next!
| Reviewed By: sovereigntytoolazytobothersigninginatschool On: April 06, 2008 20:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
poor Jii-chan... to think that something you did may cause your family havic.
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 20:19 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter. Although I hate that Kagome's family may be in danger, I'm not surprised. Naraku, clearly, is capable of anything, so Inuyasha and the others are right to be casutious. Sango's story gets sadder each time you hear it. And Naraku still managed to find a way to get more disgusting; I'm glad that Kagura was able to get away from him. I just hope that her tie to naraku is permanently broken. I look forward to the next update.
| Reviewed By: CatLover260 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 18:29 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well at least the jewel isn't inside Kagome this time. Poor Sango worrying about her brother in Naraku's hands. And poor Kanna being used and discarded like she was, I wonder if she will at least be willing to go with Kagura or whomever is sent to rescue her now. Does it occur to anyone that they now have a wonderful opportunity to set a trap for Naraku using Kagura. Kagura could contact Naraku and tell him that she had ended up in the hospital but not that she is aware the defibrillator is broken and removed. If phrased correctly Naraku might believe her. Hopefully Naraku won't find out about the jewel being at the shrine and go after Kagome's family, or if he does that he goes after them when Kagome is there to purify him or the demons he sends. Inuyasha is going to have his hands full protecting Kagome, her family, and Sango. Then there is Miroku to consider, he will want to protect Sango himself so he will be re-training his spiritual powers and help train Kagome's so she can help protect her family and Sango. I am really looking forward to the rest of this story.
| Reviewed By: Rihannon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 17:38 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This story is getting better with each chapter. I'd been enjoying a lot, especially now that the pieces are starting to fit. Naraku is such an evil bastard, just as he should be, always messing with other people's life. Before this chapter, I didn't really understand why Kanna was behaving like that (even when she is supposed to be odd), but now I can see that Naraku is a real brainwash expert. I wonder why he didn't brainwash Kagura, maybe is the same as in the original story, that for some reason he wanted her to be able of taking her own decisions? About the Shikon no Tama, well… I didn't see that coming, but now it makes sense. Ah, and it seems that this crisis is helping Sango and Miroku to get closer… nice! Good job, I can't wait for the next chapter!
| Reviewed By: landofthekwt [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 17:26 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This hospital has some real problems with administration. I almost laughed when the nurse said that they released Kohaku to his uncle Naraku. The doctor who released him just happened to take over after the murder of Kohaku's doctor. Where is Big Nurse when you need her? The pieces are beginning to fall into place. The Shikon No Tama is connected both to Sango's family and Kagome's family. They really do need Sesshoumaru to protect them.
| Reviewed By: magedelbene [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2008 17:21 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Everything is unfolding and is very unsettling due to its implications. Naraku evilness is impressive, you made him as evil as the original one but in Modern times, sthg. more difficult to believe cause when you think of modern times you don't think about magical creatures. The issue that you could accomplish that without too much exposure of the character but showing a bit of his maquiavelic plotting is amazing. Love the tiny developing between Sango and Miroku, she is starting to rely on him -and her friends- although she is just realizing it. Poor Grandpa, his sillyness put all his family in danger when he should keep a secret well locked down. Not the brightest crayon in the box. Thank you for the updated, really a great way to start a heavy working week!! Thank you again for sharing with us!! :)
| Reviewed By: stargazer824 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2008 13:21 EDT
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Awesome chapter! This story keeps getting better and better. Thanks for the update!
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