| "The Price You Pay" Reviews/Comments [ 187 ] |
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Reviewed By: theblueone [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2002 14:21 EDT
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The problem with chapter fourteen has been corrected. |
Reviewed By: theblueone [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2002 12:43 EDT
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I'm on a different computer right now, and for some reason the word program they have isn't compatable with MediaMiner. I keep trying to get it to load right, but I can't figure out how to get it to work. I got chapter thirteen to work, so now it's just figuring out what I did the first time. Sorry about this big mess. |
Reviewed By: Bulma Wannabe [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2002 07:57 EDT
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I think there's something wrong with chap 14. Like the reviewer above mentioned - what are all those boxy things? |
Reviewed By: KangaKilla On: July 08, 2002 02:35 EDT
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whats with all those boxy things? i err got confused and decided to maybe wait to see if you fxed it up |
Reviewed By: Susan On: July 08, 2002 02:05 EDT
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Very good, although a little hard to read at times. I can't wait for them to start talking. There's alot he needs to inform her of. |
Reviewed By: Ms2ry Angle 7 On: July 06, 2002 09:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I saw the summary and said to myself "dam, not another one of those three year stories again". However, I saw your reviews pick up and thought what the hell. Needless to say I have read all of your chaps and thought it was time to take my foot out of my mouth and now if you will excusse me I have to go garggle now!
Memo to me never doubt a creative and orginal writer. Great story, waiting for the next chap! |
Reviewed By: Susan On: July 05, 2002 23:35 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, so I reread #13, and you added a bit of closure to the chapter. Very good ^_^. |
Reviewed By: theblueone [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2002 21:44 EDT
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Hey, to everyone that read chapter thirteen, the first file I posted was the wrong one, so you might want to take another look at the chapter. The first file I uploaded was an incomplete one. Sorry about that. My bad. ^^ I promise you that what I re-uploaded IS the real and complete chapter. lol. |
Reviewed By: Psyfire [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2002 20:17 EDT
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ahh.. that's much better.. The little added part at the end makes the chapter more complete I think :) not to mention the fact that I'm in a constant state of wanting to read more of this story.. ;) |
Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2002 20:04 EDT
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The chapter was great! The sexual tension is thick, why not make a lemon to slice it? :) *licks lips* |
Reviewed By: Psyfire [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2002 11:07 EDT
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I can almost feel what she feels, man that must be amazing.. to have such a close tie with a man who has power to distory solar systems *heh* I'd say that's a bit of a rush alright.. can't wait to see what happens next! |
Reviewed By: manga, the Awesome one in pigtails On: July 05, 2002 09:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A little short this time, eh? But I understand that you're busy. :) |
Reviewed By: Susan On: July 05, 2002 03:24 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank Kami Veggie is ok. Funny how Bulma was able to feel his ki and sense that something was wrong. Can't wait to find out more about the Khon'daia na's effects on Bulma. Great chap!! |
Reviewed By: Susan On: July 04, 2002 03:27 EDT
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This is great. I wasn't expecting you to post anything for a couple of weeks. Excellent chap. Veggie went SSJ, if only for a moment. I loved the talk they had with each other and I guess that's one of the things I really enjoy about this fic. They are actually communicating with each other before jumping each others bones. Good job! |
Reviewed By: moonsaiyanprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2002 23:03 EDT
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This fic is awesome! I love it, what happens next!? |
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