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| "Warming Up" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: confusednarutofan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2007 13:09 CDT
Comment/Review:
like the last review said, this was very well written. Used a lot of detail and made it a great lemon. a couple notes, its just me but i think a lemon is much more sexy if theirs a story line, you know to build the relationship. I don't read many one shots, but it was still good. I aslo liked how you made hiei the seme, karama seems too cruel when he's the seme, so good choice. i also didn't see any grammer issues which is a surprise for fanfiction, even i have a bunch of mistakes in my fanfics so koodos on the grammer. Well i hope this was helpful. If you write anymore fiction give me an update, preferably when you review my stories. XP
| Title: Rated M for Mmmmm
Reviewed By: Viva_la_Yaoi On: August 03, 2007 16:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There is only one way to describe this shortly: WOW! If you want a long description though, I'll gladly give you one! After all, people seem to neglect doing so now. *Frowns* I don't know exactly why though, afterall, authors love long reviews. Well at least I do. :P First of all though, I must say, that is THE best HieixKurama oneshot that I have EVER read! And by far the best lemon featuring these two. Honestly, it was one of the best lemons I've ever read period. And the way you kept the two in character was absolutely briliant! And by god, thank you ever so much for making Hiei seme! I've been having such a hard time finding one where he is seme rather than uke, and I was trilled to find this one portraying him as such. Not that I mind when Hiei is uke, but I prefer him to be seme, as he strikes me as more dominate and picky about his position than Kurama. Besides, after reading this, I don't think Kurama would really mind being the uke. Hell, look at all the benifits and extra pleasure! *Cackles* Ahem, sorry about that little rant. I got carried away, so sorry. :/ Anway, back to the review. How can I put this? I LOVE the detial in this. I pride myself as being a detail nazi, so when I read something as exotically detail as this, it makes me giddy to no end. And don't get me started on your word choice. You have a wonderful vocabulary, dear, and I thank you for using it. It made the detail come alive, and though you did not use big, fancy words, it is ok. I think that would have killed the mood anyway. Ah, the mood. All I can say about it is that it was super kinky. I don't know how you managed it, but you gave this everything a good lemon needs. In fact, you did not only make it good, you mage it absolutely fucking briliant. You really made the characters, as well as their lust and passion, come alive in my mind. You gave a crystal clear image, but still left room for readers to imagine and play around a bit. I honestly respect that in a writer, becuase nowadays, there are very few people who seem capable of doing this. Fanfiction seems to be piles upon piles of crap now, and I'm so-o-o-o-o-o-o-o-o-o-o-o-o-o-o-o glad I found this in my search for good fics. *Bows* You have my etternal respect and appreciation, as well as my admiration! Once again, I totally loved it to death! It would be great if you wrote more fics like this one too. I absolutely need to go check out your other fics too. Heh, I'll end this nonsensical review here now, as you are probably both tired and annoyed at this review, and because I fear that I am running out of words. Frankly, there was no real way to express by love for this ficlet though. I hope I was at least semi-able to understand in this review. ;P
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