| "Forbidden Fruit" Reviews/Comments [ 33 ] |
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Reviewed By: Precious [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2007 07:55 CDT
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This was beautiful. I don't care how out of charater they are. Change nothing! Anyone that tells you to alter the characters and/or plot is insane and should be ignored. Inuyasha's monolouge was deep, sweet, and charming. (Who wouldn't want to be stalked by him!) I can't imagine how long it must have taken to tweak it to your liking. It was perfect. Now let's not sell Kagome short. Her POV was nice too. Her's just isn't as deep as his was. But we have to get through the "foundation" of the plot before we can get to the "good stuff". As she grows and the story progresses her POV will be just as deep as his (even if his will always be deeper because he has studied her longer). I think your casting was a bit of a suprise to me. It seems like you took a lot of time to think about the roles. Everyone seems to be cast the role they have for a higher purpose. And I can't thank you enough for having a reasonable situation to have Koga like Kagome and not have him be too overbearing (of course he will explode later but it will be approperiate). Usually people screw it up and it makes me cry because Koga's potential is wasted into making him a catalyst for Inuyasha. Your writing style is indescribable. I love it and I can't explain why. The details...the attention you give to the small things make the big things shine even more. I see where you have planted the seeds for many little subplots. (Or maybe they are part of the big plot?) Makes me wonder if you will have time to nurture them all but I have confidence in you. I know you can juggle them all and still balance the story. It's so hard to write in the first person correctly. I commend you on doing so. Doing it correctly with style takes work and much effort. I want to go on and on about Kagome and Inuyasha's characters but I don't have enough space for that. But I do love what you have done with them. I'm eager to see what you do with them. The only vampire version of Inuyasha I have ever loved was Bloodlust by angelbabe17. I feared it would be the only one too. You have renewed my hopes and banished my fears. Finding a good vampire story is rare. I'm thankful to have found this hidden treasure. Sadly I see this story will be slow going. You can't rush perfection I suppose. So I won't tell you to hurry and update. I will try to remain paticent between posts. Sorry about not being a grammar goddess. I KNOW there are mistakes in here. Before I forget, I know Inuyasha said he was going to up the stakes...did he leave the curtain open on purpose? Is he playing around im her mind "helping" those dreams along? And I'm guessing he can stand sunlight as long as it isn't bright daylight?
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Reviewed By: crystal strawberry On: September 18, 2007 13:57 CDT
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Alright an update! Kouga as her caretaker,that was unexpected. I am so glad you are making this into a story.
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Reviewed By: Kawaii-KeKe-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2007 10:40 CDT
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Sorry to hear about your dad. I hope everything's ok! Great chappy, as always! Can't wait to find out who sent the letter!
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Title: LOVE
Reviewed By: blackr0s3 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2007 22:41 CDT
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did i ever tell you that i LOVE ur story? Plz update soon! I NEED to read more!!! u r such a GREAT writer!!!
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Title: LOVE
Reviewed By: blackr0s3 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2007 22:32 CDT
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did i ever tell you that i LOVE ur story? Plz update soon! I NEED to read more!!! u r such a GREAT writer!!!
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Reviewed By: Kawaii-KeKe-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2007 08:42 CDT
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Sorry to hear about your troubles! :( *hugs* We'll be here, so please take your time!!
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Reviewed By: CowgirlKagome [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2007 13:55 CDT
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i hope you update soon, this seems like it's going to be very interesting
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Reviewed By: atsuyaka On: July 16, 2007 00:32 CDT
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Oh I bet Kagome's father was turned into a vampire, and she was forced to kill him, am I right? Oh and I wonder if it was Inuyasha.
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Reviewed By: crystal strawberry On: July 15, 2007 23:03 CDT
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how could you think this wasn't as good as the first chapter! It was excellent, and that dream...bwauhaha priceless.
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Reviewed By: AnimePrincessInuLover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2007 21:17 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!!! I loved this chap sooooo much!!!! It was so AWESOME!!!!! I loved rading it!! OH PLEASE UPDATE THIS SOON!!!! I CAN'T WAIT TO READ WHAT YOU HAVE IN STORE FOR THE NEXT PART!!! YUO'R THE BEST!!!!!! I'M IN SUSPENSE FOR THE NEXT CHAP! PLEASE HURRY!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: ezaangel(nsi) On: July 14, 2007 04:22 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OHhhhh I loved this chapter....very creative..Keep up the good work and I really cant wait for the next chapter... P.S.InuYasha sounds soooo hot in the fic...
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Reviewed By: Teddy Bear [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2007 23:36 CDT
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Hello author this is the first time that I have read one of your fanfics and I am really impressed. It's nice to find an anime with a good plot and hopefully great sex. I like how it's going so far and I hope that really soon that you decide to update again. I like the idea of the whole vampire and vampire slayer relationship, and I'm expecting some really steamy sex soon *hint hint*. Continue to be inspired and update soon.
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Reviewed By: AnimePrincessInuLover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2007 02:13 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this first chap! I would probably like to read like him and her meeting and they have to sneek around all the time just to be with on another. you know the forbidden romance thing. and mabey a little citrucy lemon sene wouldn't hurt. WELL HOPE TO READ THE NEXT PART SOON!!! CAN'T WAIT!! YOU'R THE GREATEST!!! THIS FIC IS STARTING OUT REALLY GREAT!
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Reviewed By: leeluu On: July 12, 2007 00:59 CDT
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Oh I would love to see Inuyasha turn her into a vampire, after all they can't get together if she'll eventually end up looking like Kaede. Woah bad mental image.
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Reviewed By: animecraz92 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2007 00:57 CDT
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tell u what i want to read huh?! well lets see... i want them to get together after a little fight..... but keep having inuyasha visit her at night,thats really nice. peace
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